Argument235【0906G背水一战三月小组】第1次作业 thanks gy2006211 version2

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    Supporting the recommendation that KNOW radio station shuold shift its programming from rock-and-roll to  continuous news format, the author provides the evidence of the number of older people increasing and among the total listeners and sales of recorded music decreasing. Additionally, the author points out the success of continuous news in nearby cities. A careful examination of this argument would reveal how groundless the recommendation is.

    To begin with, the author relies on the assumption that the listeners do not favor the rock-and-roll music. The evidence of listeners and sales decreasing seems logic. However, it is entirely possible that the quality of KNOW radio station leads to the decline. In addition, taking the recorded music differs from listening to radio station. The former expend money and the later is free. Perhaps the price of recorded music is too expensive, or perhaps the decline is due to the economic depression. Unless the author takes these factors into consideration, the conclusion is unconvincing.

    Yet another problem with the argument involves the implicit assumption that older people prefer continuous news fomat. As we know, older people may pay more attention on healthy program in order to live a longer and more comfortable life. What's more, even assuming that the older people do favor continuous news format, the author does not give the statistics about the number of older people. Perhaps the number of older people still fewer than the number of younger people. For that matter, if true, we may miss numerous listeners who favor rock-and-roll music.

    Then there is absolutely no proof offered to substantiate the success of continuous news station in nearby cities. It takes for granted that people focus on the continuous news before the recent election. In fact, the political leader may determine the direction of the city development, such as project, policy, which relates to public’s live. Furthermore, even assuming that continuous news in neighboring is successful; the author fails to consider possible difference between our city and neighboring city that might help to bring about a different result. Perhaps those stations are successful because of their immediately reporting, strength transmitters. Therefore,  the author cannot draw firm conclusion about the success of continuous news in our city.

    As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the author would have to make sure that people enhance more concerned news and less concerned rock-and-roll music. Additionally, the author must consider and provide evidence to rule out other possible causes of the success of continuous news format in nearby cities, and must convince me that older people in our city favor continuous news.

感觉自己的语言还差很多，自己还得再细改

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    Supporting therecommendation that KNOW radio station shuold shift its programmingfrom rock-and-roll to  continuous news format(用To support 好点吧，我感觉 to do 一般做目的状语，doing一般是伴随状语), the author provides theevidence of the number of older people increasing and among the totallisteners and sales of recorded music decreasing. Additionally, theauthor points out the success of continuous news in nearby cities. A careful examination of this argument would reveal how groundless the recommendation is.

    To begin with, the author relies on the assumption that the listeners do not favor the rock-and-roll music. The evidence oflisteners and sales decreasing seems logical. However, it is entirelypossible that the quality of KNOW radio station leads to (去掉to)the decline.In addition, taking the recorded music differs from listening to radiostation. The former expend money and the later is free. Perhaps theprice of recorded music is too expensive, or perhaps the decline is dueto the economic depression. Unless the author takes these factors intoconsideration, the conclusion is unconvincing.
可以再改改第二段，感觉有点乱，句子偏短 However前后显得很突然..
   Yet another problem with the argument involves the implicitassumption that older people prefer continuous news format. As we know,older people may pay more attention on healthy program in order to livea longer and more comfortable life. What's more, even assuming that theolder people do favor continuous news format, the author does not givethe statistics about the number of older people. Perhaps the number ofolder people still fewer than the number of younger people. For thatmatter, if true, we may miss numerous listeners who favor rock-and-rollmusic.

   Then there is absolutely no proof offered to substantiate the successof continuous news station in nearby cities. It takes for granted thatpeople focus on the continuous news before the recent election. Infact, the political leader may determine the direction of the citydevelopment, such as project, policy, which relates to public’s live.Furthermore, even assuming that continuous news in neighboring issuccessful,the author fails to consider possible difference betweenour city and neighboring city, which might help to bring about adifferent result. Perhaps those stations are successful because oftheir immediately reporting, strength transmitters. Therefore,  theauthor cannot draw firm conclusion about the success of continuous newsin our city.

   As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned. To make it logicallyacceptable, the author would have to make sure that people enhance moreconcerned news and less concerned rock-and-roll music. Additionally,the author must consider and provide evidence to rule out otherpossible causes of the success of continuous news format in nearbycities, and must convince me that older people in our city favorcontinuous news.