TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 Lucifa 第9次作业

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Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

Robotics, Genetic engineering, electric vehicle, Information technology, space technology, hundreds and thousands new technology approved and have effected us today's daily life a lot. Some people afraid about this change, which will cause children our next generation show less creative than they were in the past. They argue that new technology made children become lazy and dependent on machines. As I know those worries are dead wrong. They didn't see the revolution that technology made give children more possibility and opportunity to create. 


Personal Computer, Google, those great creative came from the information technology development, has give children a new way to create. Children could create skyscraper, space craft in the computer virtual which could only created by lots of professional engineer. Google give children a efficient way to find how to create a new things that they have never meet. Those information technology not only helped us daily work but also help children study, a fast study, which may make young ages could create more than their parents do. There are about hundreds Internet CEO age about 10~18 in this century. They'd built website sale information, goods on the network. Those creative changes haven't come without daily technology.  

A robot, a new species which we could not image in our childhood, has come true with the development of the technology improvement. Children create the robot cloth and costume play the Optimus Prime. They have began to image one day they will know how to build and control those huge robot. In the past children play with Barbie Pal, they could only image one day they will married with a princess or a prince. How could they do those great innovation without the technology created opportunity.

Technology have gave children great change, let them know how to create by themselves and create more than their father and mother. And they also have the opportunity to create the things happened in sci-fi movies. Technology is a window to showing a new world for children to create.

哈哈单词量不够，只能算小学生作文了。。。OMG
顺便传个OG上的 WHbook。。前段时间无聊打进去的。。ms挺浪费时间的。。-_-~!

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Robotics, Genetic engineering, electric vehicle, Information technology, space technology, hundreds and thousands（加个of） new technology approved and have effected us today's daily life a lot. Some people afraid about this change, which will cause children our next generation show less creative than they were in the past. They argue that new technology made children become lazy and dependent on machines. As I know those worries are dead wrong. They didn't see the revolution that technology made give children more possibility and opportunity to create.
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- M* u4 U; M5 L: \( e4 EPersonal Computer, Google, those great creative came from the information technology development, has give（given） children a new way to create. Children could create skyscraper, space craft in the computer virtual which could only created by lots of professional engineer. Google give children a（an） efficient way to find how to create a new things（thing） that they have never meet. Those information technology not only helped us（our） daily work but also help（helped）children study, a fast study, which may make young ages could create more than their parents do. There are about hundreds Internet CEO age about 10~18 in this century. They'd built website sale information, goods on the network. Those creative changes haven't come without daily technology.  3 ~' k) T, A: D
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A robot, a new species which we could not image in our childhood, has come true with the development of the technology improvement. Children create the robot cloth and costume play the Optimus Prime. They have began to image one day they will know how to build and control those huge robot（s）. In the past children play with Barbie Pal, they could only image one day they will married with a princess or a prince. How could they do those great innovation（s） without the technology created opportunity.
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  i, j6 _! ~5 u" k, G& N- N% Z2 b4 lTechnology have gave（given） children great change, let them know how to create by themselves and create more than their father and mother. And they also have the opportunity to create the things happened in sci-fi movies. Technology is a window to showing a new world for children to create.8 e3 o9 a7 U8
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