Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组Grace.TT第九次作业

grace.TTUID: 2534695

word 380 time 20 min  写得有点仓促了，可能有好多错，拍文的辛苦，不好意思了～
The development of technology is impetus of our human history,which will start a new page.As to this issue that if children's creativity would become disappeared because of technology,my answer is yes,simple yet candid.

All sorts of technology has been invented,such as television,computer,digital camera etc.,so human being take any convenience for granted.Childhood is the most beautiful moment of our life,for our memory is excellent enough and creativity would be shaped.However,more and more high-tech invention make kids forget making use of his/her brain.Take electronic dictionary for example.Every child in our country would be required to learn a foreign language when he/she enters school.Almost every students in elementary school own one electronic dictionary.If you want to take good command of a foreign language,how about learning a word just by tapping few letters?You should using the dicitonary which is designed for foreign language learner.You know the word’s meaning at the same time get more usage and sentences about it.

Let’s take another example—calculator.Before the invention of calculator,all kids learning math in classes calculate many formulas by themselves.Their logical thinking will be developed.But now,whenever doing homework of math or even buy some foods using changes in super market,little boys and girls may take out of their calculators from his/her pockets.How do their logical thinking will get further progress?However, kids have the ability of calculate by heart in ancient years in our country when calculator had not been invented.

Nevertheless,computers and the Internet have become an integral part of everyday life especial to the invention of Internet of search engine.The life of less “search engine”like the fish of less water for almost every children.Everyone have inertia including their thinking.If a student finish his/her studying task of paper,he/she definitly will complete it only by surfing internet.Although it can save a little bit time,something children missed cannot be calculated.Because you could not learn about how to categorize reference books and literature and absorb the essence and discard the dross.The process of select information what you need is the progess in your thinking.But traditional library in past can do it.

According to what I am talking about above,I advise every child should keep balance between applying technical equipments and traditional methods.Don't indulge in comfortable happy instantaneously and give up exercise your brain.I believe that no pain no gain.

iceland17UID: 2589814

The development of technology is impetus of our human history,which will start a new page.As to this issue that if children's creativity would become disappeared(disappear) because of technology,my answer is yes, simple yet can did(没看明白，是不是想些simple yes can did，表达过于chinglish).
All sorts of technology has been invented,such as television,computer,digital camera etc.,so human being take any convenience for granted.Childhood is the most beautiful moment（time） of our life,for our memory (memories) is(are) excellent enough and creativity would be shaped(不明白).However,more and more high-tech invention make kids forget making（to make）use of his/her brain.（不是forget,而是not willing to）,Take electronic dictionary for example.Every child in our country would be required to learn a foreign language when he/she enters school.Almost every student in elementary school own(s) one electronic dictionary.If you want to take good command of a foreign language,how about learning a word just by tapping few letters?You should using(use) the dicitonary which is designed for foreign language learner.You know the word’s meaning ,at the same time, get more usage and sentences about it.
Let’s take another example—calculator.Before the invention of calculator(the calculator was invented),all kids learning math in classes calculate many formulas by themselves.Their logical thinking will be developed.But now,whenever doing(they do) homework of math or even buy some foods using changes in super market,little boys and girls may take out of their calculators from his/her pockets.How do their logical thinking(与逻辑思考无关，最多就是calculating ability) will get further progress?(转折关系突兀)However, kids have the ability of calculating by heart in ancient years in our country when calculator had not been invented.

Nevertheless,computers and the Internet have become an integral part of everyday life especially the invention of Internet of search engine.The life without “search engine”like the fish without water for almost every children.Everyone have inertia including their thinking.If a student finish his/her studying task of paper,he/she definitly will complete it only by surfing internet.Although it can save a little bit time,something children missed cannot be calculated.Because you could not learn about how to categorize reference books and literature and absorb the essence and discard the dross.The process of selecting information what you need is the progess in your thinking.But traditional library in past can do it.

According to what I am talking about above,I advise every child should keep balance between applying technical equipments and traditional methods.Don't be indulged in comfortable happiness instantaneously and give up exercise your brain.I believe that no pain no gain.
语法错误比较多，句子逻辑关系较弱，有些表达过于中国式，分析得还算翔实，加油吧！！

grace.TTUID: 2534695

my answer is yes,simple yet candid.  
candid是一个词。
是一个固定的英文式表达。就是：对于这个问题，我的回答是肯定的！

grace.TTUID: 2534695

不好意思，确实语法、时态错误很多，因为马上有事，写得很急。。。

iceland17UID: 2589814

4# grace.TT
恩,那个表达我看明白了,不好意思,批错了~~

熊爱棒棒糖UID: 2598861

The development of technology is impetus of our human history,which will start a new page（the development of technology has started a new page for our human history in that it is the impetus of our society).As to this issue that if children's creativity would become disappeared because of technology,my answer is yes,simple yet candid.
All sorts of technology has(have) been invented(so far),such as television,computer,digital camera etc.,(建议把一句分成两句）so human being take any（删去any) convenience for granted.Childhood is the most beautiful moment of(in） our life(lives),(同样这里的逗号去掉）for our memory is excellent enough and creativity would be shaped（since our memory is excellent and the competence of creativity would be developed, childhood should be treated as the most beautiful moment in our lives).However,more and more high-tech invention make kids forget making use of his/her(前面kids，复数，所以不能用his/her) brain.Take electronic dictionary for example.(Taking eletronic dictionary for example, more and more high-tech inventions make kids forget making use of t heir brain)Every child in our country would be required to learn a foreign language(english as second language) when he/she enters school.Almost every students(student) in elementary school own(owns) one electronic dictionary.If you want to take good command of a foreign language,how about learning a word just by tapping few letters?You should using(use) the dicitonary which is designed for foreign language learner.You know the word’s meaning at the same time get more usage and sentences about it(怎么出现了两个谓语动词？）.
Let’s take another example—calculator.Before the invention of calculator,all kids learning math in classes calculate many formulas by themselves（all kids learned to calculate many formulas by themselves).Their logical thinking will be developed.But now,whenever doing homework of math or even buy(buying) some foods using(删去using,改成for) changes in super market,little(删去little) boys and girls may take out of their calculators from his/her pockets.How do their logical thinking will get further progress?However, kids have the ability of calculate by heart in ancient years in our country when calculator had not been invented. 5 f, Y, t7 M: N
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Nevertheless,computers and the Internet have become an integral part of everyday life especial(especially) to the invention of Internet of search engine.The life of less “search engine”like the fish of less water for almost every children(without the search engine, the lives of children would like the fish of less water).Everyone have(has) inertia including their(his/her) thinking.If a student finish his/her studying task of paper,he/she definitly will complete it only by surfing (on the) internet.Although it can save a little bit time,something children missed cannot be calculated.Because you could not learn about how to categorize reference books and literature and absorb the essence and discard the dross.The process of select information what you need is the progess in your thinking.But traditional library in past can do it.8 W' Q! K5 B2 d; t
According to what I am talking about(删about) above,I advise every child should keep balance between applying technical equipments and traditional methods.Don't (instantaneously) indulge in comfortable (and)happy instantaneously(删） and give up exercise your brain.I believe that no pain no gain.
或许是LZ写的比较匆忙，有些明显的语法错误