TOEFL 4—6月-Dark_Tournament小组写作qing200 第十次作业

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Do you agree or disagree: governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.(

We are often told that sports of country means strength of a country and health of its citizens, should any government ignore it? Would citizens have no sense of honor and shame? Could citizens pay little attention on their own health?
In fact, our country China has become quite strong in many aspects in recent decades. And citizens have a more intensive sense of national honor, and are more aware of their health. So I believe it is important for government to spend more money in favor of athletics instead arts.

More excellent performance in international programs makes it possible that our Chinese are respected by other countries. In the past, our country once suffered from miserable failure in international sports games, which due to physical weakness of our athletes. In recent decades, thank to the rapidly development of economy, the average physical conditions are improved so this also result in the amazing performance in international sports programs. Our Chinese people can head up high again. Therefore, it is of great importance for government to allocate more money to athletics.

As the improvement of life quality, there is no one but longs to keep healthy and live longer. While, doing sports is just such a way to lead people to enjoy a healthier life and longer life span. Many people are so busy in such a speed up society so they spend too much time concentrate on their work and have little awareness to do exercise. A recent survey shows that people in increasing number get sick due to lack of exercise in modern society. So it is time for government to encourage citizens doing more exercise as well as get into construct public sports facilities, which finally will lead to improvement of well—being in our country.

Important though investing money to athletics, there is no excuse for any government to ignore the construction of arts. As we all know, arts preserves history and culture for any society, and also it is a pretty method for artist to express their unique feelings as well as an excellent way for people to entertain. It also needs support from government.

In conclusion, government should strike a balance to allocate the money to these two fields. And I tend to argue that government should give a little more finance to athletics than that of arts.
After all, athletics is a matter of national honor and citizens’ health—a matter no government can afford to ignore.

水龙娃娃UID: 2359238

We are often told that sports of （a）country means strength of a country and health of its citizens, should any government ignore it? Would citizens have no sense of honor and shame? Could citizens pay little attention on(to一般pay attention 后面跟的是to) their own health?

In fact, our country China has become quite strong in many aspects in recent decades. And citizens have a more intensive sense of national honor, and are more aware of their health. So I believe it is important for government to spend more money in favor of athletics instead （of）arts.

More excellent performance（performances最好用复数形式） in international programs makes（make） it possible that our Chinese are respected by other countries. In the past, our country once suffered from miserable failure in international sports games, which（去掉，which） due to physical weakness of our athletes. In recent decades, thank to（thanks to） the rapidly（rapid） development of economy, the average physical conditions are improved so this also result in the amazing performance in international sports programs. Our Chinese people can head up high again（Our Chinese people can hold us head up again）. Therefore, it is of great importance for government to allocate more money to(感觉用for更好些) athletics.

As the improvement of life quality, there is no one but longs to keep healthy and live longer. While, doing sports is just such a way to lead people to enjoy a healthier life and longer life span. Many people are so busy in such a speed up society so they spend too much time concentrate（on concentrating） on their work and have little awareness to do exercise. A recent survey shows that people in increasing number get sick due to lack of exercise in modern society. So it is time for government to encourage citizens doing more exercise as well as get into construct public sports facilities, which finally will lead to improvement of well—being in our country.

Important though investing money （is）to athletics, there is no excuse for any government to ignore the construction of arts. As we all know, arts preserves history and culture for any society, and also it is a pretty method for artist to express their unique feelings as well as an excellent way for people to entertain. It also needs support from government.

In conclusion, government should strike a balance to allocate the money to these two fields. And I tend to argue that government should give a little more finance to athletics than that of arts.
After all, athletics is a matter of national honor and citizens’ health—a matter no government can afford to ignore.

逻辑比较清晰，文字比较流畅。
写的时候注意一些小细节。第三段的例子稍稍有些不是太贴切，感觉多强调体育运动所带来的声誉或是荣誉，再具体一些，比如举乒乓球，或是近年来刘翔的崛起之类的，可能说服力更强一些。第四段例子不错。
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qing200UID: 2507993

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