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[活动] 【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 alfabita 第10次作业】 [复制链接]

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Do you agree or disagree: governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.


In our society, governments spend money to improve the quality of the people’s life. Some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of arts while others think that governments spend money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. People have different opinions about this topic. In my opinion, governments should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams or soccer teams because they are symbol of their state.


Firstly, teams are the symbol of one state or country. I think, most people take their teams as the symbol of their country and honor of them. Take soccer team as an example, many soccer fans gather together and support their teams in soccer match. May be their team lose the game, but through this actions, people get united and their love to the state become strong.


Secondly, more people are interested in sports activities if governments spend more money in athletics. Now, people are aware of the importance of doing exercise because through doing exercise people become healthy. If governments invest more money to the athletics, more people are interested in sports activities.


Most importantly, states train athletes to their country through spending money in athletics. For example, one good team consists of good athletes. If governments spend more money on one team, they not only get success for their state but also train potential athletes to the country and they may get good achievements in Olympic
games.


In conclusion, people getting more benefits if governments spend more money in athletics. For example, more people are interested in doing exercise and more people support their team. Also, spending more money in athletics are important for both state and country.


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发表于 2009-3-9 05:19:37 |只看该作者
1# alfabita

Do you agree or disagree: governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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In our society, governments spend money to improve the quality of the people’s life. Some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of arts while others think that governments spend (more)money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. People have different opinions about this topic(我觉得用this topic不是很好,虽然你在前面举了两种观点,但是没有明确的说出topic到底是啥。我在美国这边感觉美国人很喜欢直来直去,所以作文最好直接一点好). In my opinion, governments should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams or soccer teams because they are symbol(s) of their state(s).(在正文中你举了好几个理由,所以在开头段你不能只提到一个理由)


Firstly, teams are the symbol of one state or country. I think, most people take their teams as (delete the) symbol(s) of their country and honor of them. Take soccer team as an example, many soccer fans gather together and support their teams in soccer match. May be their team lose the game, but through this actions, people get united and their love to the state become strong.


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Secondly, more people are interested in sports activities if governments spend more money in athletics. Now, people are aware of the importance of doing exercise because through doing exercise people become healthy. If governments invest more money to the athletics, more people are interested in sports activities.
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Most importantly, states train athletes to their country through spending money in athletics. For example, one(a) good team consists of good athletes. If governments spend more money on one team, they not only get success for their state but also train potential athletes to the country and they may get good achievements in Olympic games.
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In conclusion, people getting more benefits if governments spend more money in athletics. For example, more people are interested in doing exercise and more people support their team. Also, spending more money in athletics are important for both state and country


觉得你审题有点偏,题目中在让你分析 艺术和体育那个更重要,而你却一直围绕着团体体育展开。

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发表于 2009-3-9 23:02:46 |只看该作者
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In our society, governments spend money to improve the quality of the people’s life. Some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of arts while others think that governments spend money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. People have different opinions about this topic. In my opinion, governments should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams or soccer teams because they are symbol of their state.
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Firstly, teams are the symbol of one state or country. I think, most people take their teams as the symbol of their country and honor of them. Take soccer team as an example, many soccer fans gather together and support their teams in soccer match. May be
maybe their team lose the game, but through thisthese actions, people get united and their love to the state become strong. (本段开头最好能先直接点明 governments’ support of athletics can improve team spirit…)
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Secondly, more people are interested in sports activities if governments spend more money in athletics. Now, people are aware of the importance of doing exercise because through doing exercise people become healthy. If governments invest more money to the athletics, more people are
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