[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 leeking85第17次作业]

leeking85UID: 2257265

[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 leeking85第17次作业]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to cooperate with other well is more important today than in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Obviously, cooperation is becoming popular nowadays whatever you are doing. In the view of advanced techniques and pressure of competition, cooperation is definitely more important than in the past.

In the past someone might be survived even they are isolated from society or community, the typical example is Tarzan. However, finally we accept the consequence that he would be civilized because only can he enter into the human being society or he would never like human being. On the other hand, Tarzan cooperated with animals to some extent. Therefore, we can assume that isolation jeopardize the survival for any creatures, whereas human being is evolutional creature, how can we alive without cooperation?

Furthermore, cooperation is base for evolution for our human being. Without cooperation we can't expect we can have many high-tech products which parts are made from many countries, without cooperation we can't expect we can benefit from the competition among firms, without cooperation we can't expect we can use the internet to take the exams, chat with friends or purchase things online. Cooperation makes our life more perfect and give our chance to challenge cutting-edge idea. In more common view, not just for modern technique, just for our society safety without cooperation is very horrible. Recently, there is a flood in North Dakota where I live now. In our community many people help sandbags for whole day even overnight. My university even cancels class to encourage students to assist. I also be a volunteer to carry sandbags, if you were there you will find people is really organized and passionate for their community. When someone feel tired others would take over your job and give you a cup of hot coffee. This valuable cooperation among people make me absolutely realize the importance of cooperation.

In the view of competition, maybe someone will deny the importance of cooperation. However, we can't ignore the cooperation in competition. There is old saying: enemy's enemy is friend. Even in the furious competitions there also exists the cooperation because of the limit of one person. Competition between two companies will enhance the cooperation and management of each company. Nowadays instead of harmful bankruptcy of another company, more and more company will combine with other companies, which to some extent is also other type of cooperation.

Therefore, without cooperation would endanger ourselves and cooperation improve our society and life. Even some existing competitions people will benefit from cooperation as the whole.
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gundammoleUID: 2300958

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Obviously, (全文刚开头就来个副词不太好,改为no one can deny the truth that怎么样) cooperation is becoming popular nowadays whatever you are doing. In the view of advanced techniques and pressure of competition, cooperation is definitely more important than in the past.# I/ q: E! Z  G: w5 r


In the past someone(改为people,与后面的they对应) might be survived even they are isolated from society or community, the typical example is Tarzan. However, finally we accept the consequence that he would be civilized because only can he enter into the human being society or he would never like human being. On the other hand, Tarzan cooperated with animals to some extent. Therefore, we can assume that isolation jeopardize the survival for any creatures(creature), whereas human being is evolutional creature, how can we alive without cooperation?


Furthermore, cooperation is base for evolution for our human being. Without cooperation we can't expect we can have many high-tech products which parts are made from many countries, without cooperation we can't expect we can benefit from the competition among firms, without cooperation we can't expect we can use the internet to take the (去掉)exams, chat with friends or purchase things online. Cooperation makes our life more perfect and give our chance to challenge cutting-edge idea. In more common view, not just for modern technique, just for our society safety without cooperation is very horrible. Recently, there is a flood in North Dakota where I live(am living) now. In our community many people help sandbags for whole day even overnight. My university even cancels class to encourage students to assist. I also be a volunteer to carry sandbags, if you were there you will find people is really organized and passionate for their community. When someone feel(feels)
tired others would take over your job and give you a cup of hot coffee. This valuable cooperation among people make(makes) me absolutely realize the importance of cooperation." ^4 B4 N9 P! C3 V4 a' d6 y


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In the view of competition, maybe someone will deny the importance of cooperation. However, we can't ignore the cooperation in competition. There is old saying: enemy's enemy is friend. Even in the furious competitions there also exists the cooperation because of the limit of one person. Competition between two companies will enhance the cooperation and management of each company. Nowadays instead of harmful bankruptcy of another company, more and more company will combine with other companies, which to some extent is also other type of cooperation. . \. I& B9 y'


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Therefore, without cooperation would endanger ourselves and cooperation improve our society and life. Even some existing competitions people will benefit from cooperation as the whole.


写的挺不错的呀,逻辑很清楚,就是有些单复数形式要注意一下,不要太粗心.
个人很喜欢North Dakota洪水的例子,很有感染力,正是ETS想要的.
BTW,谢谢你对我文章的认真修改,大家一起努力吧,加油!^_^

ferryboat31UID: 2137398

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to cooperate with other well is more important today than in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Obviously, cooperation is becoming popular nowadays whatever you are doing. In the view of advanced techniques and pressure of competition, cooperation is definitely more important than in the past.  n* {  ]0 K* `0 Q$ E3 D" p

In the past someone might be survived even they are isolated from society or community, the typical example is Tarzan. However, finally we accept the consequence that he would be civilized because only can he enter into the human being society or he would never like human being. On the other hand, Tarzan cooperated with animals to some extent. Therefore, we can assume that isolation jeopardize the survival for any creatures, whereas human being is evolutional creature, how can we alive without cooperation?

Furthermore, cooperation is （是不是应该有个冠词）base for evolution for our human being. Without cooperation we can't expect we can have many high-tech products which parts are made from many countries, without cooperation we can't expect we can benefit from the competition among firms, without cooperation we can't expect we can use the internet to take the exams, chat with friends or purchase things online. Cooperation makes our life more perfect and give our chance to challenge cutting-edge idea. In more common view, not just for modern technique, just for our society safety without cooperation is very horrible. Recently, there is a flood in North Dakota where I live now. In our community many people help sandbags for whole day even overnight. My university even cancels class to encourage students to assist. I also be a volunteer to carry sandbags, if you were there you will（would） find people is really organized and passionate for their community. When someone feel tired others would take over your job and give you a cup of hot coffee. 这一部分感觉应该用过去式This valuable cooperation among people make me absolutely realize the importance of cooperation.% O4 V! D0 f& r

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In the view of competition, maybe someone will deny the importance of cooperation. However, we can't ignore the cooperation in competition. There is old saying: enemy's enemy is friend. Even in the furious competitions there also exists the cooperation because of the limit of one person. Competition between two companies will enhance the cooperation and management of each company. Nowadays instead of harmful bankruptcy of another company, more and more company will combine with other companies, which to some extent is also other type of cooperation. 最喜欢这一部分，很不错哦

Therefore, without cooperation would endanger ourselves and cooperation improve our society and life. Even some existing competitions people will benefit from cooperation as the whole.

看了之后，真正理解了什么叫做分论点。非常值得学习


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legolastuUID: 2453793

In the past someone might be survived even they are isolated from society or community, the typical example is Tarzan. However, finally we accept the consequence that he would be civilized because only can he enter into the human being society or he would never like human being. On the other hand, Tarzan cooperated with animals to some extent. Therefore, we can assume that isolation jeopardize the survival for any creatures, whereas human being is evolutional creature, how can we alive without cooperation?

Furthermore, cooperation is base for evolution for our human being. Without cooperation we can't expect we can have many high-tech products which parts are made from many countries, without cooperation we can't expect we can benefit from the competition among firms, without cooperation we can't expect we can use the internet to take the exams, chat with friends or purchase things online. Cooperation makes our life more perfect and give our chance to challenge cutting-edge idea. In more common view, not just for modern technique, just for our society safety without cooperation is very horrible. Recently, there is a flood in North Dakota where I live now. In our community many people help sandbags for whole day even overnight. My university even cancels class to encourage students to assist. I also be a volunteer to carry sandbags, if you were there you will find people is really organized and passionate for their community. When someone feel tired others would take over your job and give you a cup of hot coffee. This valuable cooperation among people make me absolutely realize the importance of cooperation.

In the view of competition, maybe someone will deny the importance of cooperation. However, we can't ignore the cooperation in competition. There is old saying: enemy's enemy is friend. Even in the furious competitions there also exists the cooperation because of the limit of one person. Competition between two companies will enhance the cooperation and management of each company. Nowadays instead of harmful bankruptcy of another company, more and more company will combine with other companies, which to some extent is also other type of cooperation. 2 h2 T4 b( a  Q5 [1 E

Therefore, without cooperation would endanger ourselves and cooperation improve our society and life. Even some existing competitions people will benefit from cooperation as the whole.
(句式和例子都很漂亮，我就不改了。。。学习中)