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With the fast development of relevant technology .movie ,as a traditional artistic form ,plays a more and more important role in our life .however, which kind of movie do you prefer is presently a heated debate under different education background and interesting .as far as I am concerned, I contend that it’s a bit haste to say that one is better than the other ,or vice versa.

One type of moive is designed to make audience think which I believe has several features as follow:firstly, we can learn different successful examples from such movies,as a poor child keeps studying hard under various pressure and finally becomes a scientist or a tycoon . the stories benefit youg generation a lot as fortitude ,brave and persistence which are prerequisites of success.secondly some  movies are designed to tell the secret of how can ancestors make themselves survive in dangerous natural environment to make us understand the process of evolution. Moreover , another type of film is to make us realize the fierce mistake we have made on the earth that if not take prompt action .we will subsequently suffer unbelieved disasters such as starvation,diseases and even disappear from the planet.

While the other category movie is designed to entertain us. when people exhausted after a heavy work ,the best way to relax is watching a light comedy with family members. the laughter can not only releases your tried but also provides an opportunity for you to enjoy the company of families. as my experience in life. before an important exam I usually feel nervous and anxiety even can’t sleep at night. but after watching a comedy .I feel refreshed and become more confident. Nowdays such movies are not simply entertain people but uncover some truth in life as well. So we also can be taught like the former kind .

To conclude.from what has been discussed above ,people choose different movies vary with their interests.movie is just like a mirror of life. We should make full use of it to enrich our mental world.to put another way , People seldom agree with each other even in such trivial issues as preference between two kinds of movies.

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发表于 2009-4-5 23:12:32 |显示全部楼层
1# HYPS2011 With the fast development of relevant technology .movie ,as a traditional artistic form ,plays a more and more important role in our life .however, which kind of movie do you prefer is presently a heated debate(?) under different education background and interesting(不是很懂这句话的意思额) .as far as I am concerned, I contend that it’s a bit haste to say that one is better than the other ,or vice versa.
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One type of moive
s is designed to make audience think whichthat比较好吧) I believe has several features as follow:firstly, we can learn different successful examples from such movies,as a poor child keeps studying hard under various pressure and finally becomes a scientist or a tycoon . the stories benefit youg generation a lot as fortitude ,brave and persistence which are prerequisites of success.secondly some  movies are designed to tell the secret of how can ancestors make themselves survive in dangerous natural environment to make us understand the process of evolution. Moreover , another type of film(s) is to make us realize the fierce mistake we have made on the earth that(不需要) if not take prompt action .we will subsequently suffer unbelievedunbelievable disasters such as starvation,diseases and even disappear from the planet(与前面的suffer不对应).* A* i2 J( t; W$ \. H

( l% [  g8 p$ d* j' w5 \, zWhile the other category movie is designed to entertain us. when people
are exhausted after a heavy work ,the best way to relax is watching a light comedy with family members. the laughter can not only releases your tried but also provides an opportunity for you to enjoy the company of families. as my experience in life. before an important exam I usually feel nervous and anxiety even can’t sleep at night. but after watching a comedy .I feel refreshed and become more confident. Nowdays such movies are not simply entertain people but uncover some truth in life as well. So we also can be taught like the former kind ./ `& U7 a$ j& ^
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To conclude.from what has been discussed above ,people choose different movies vary with their interests.movie is just like a mirror of life. We should make full use of it to enrich our mental world.to put another way , People seldom agree with each other even in such trivial issues as preference between two kinds of movies.


可能楼主写得比较仓促。。在句式句法方面不够完善。。有点摸不清头脑。。
共同进步。。

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发表于 2009-4-7 22:08:47 |显示全部楼层
1# HYPS2011

With the fast development of relevant technology .movie ,as a traditional artistic form ,plays a more and more important role in our life .however, the question(加先行词做主语) which kind of movie do you prefer is presently a heated debate under different education background and interesting(什么意思?) .as far as I am concerned, I contend that it’s a bit haste(词性不对,建议reckless to say that one is better than the other ,or vice versa.
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One type of moive is designed to make audience think which I believe has several features as follow
(句子结构不对):firstly, we can learn different successful examples from such movies,as a poor child keeps studying hard under various pressure and finally becomes a scientist or a tycoon . the stories benefit youg young generation a lot as fortitude ,brave(bravery) and persistence which are prerequisites of success.secondly, some  movies are designed to tell the secret of how ancestors can make themselves survive in dangerous natural environment and to make us understand the process of evolution. Moreover , another type of film is to make us realize the fierce mistake we have made on the earth that if not take prompt action .we will subsequently suffer unbelieved disasters such as starvation,diseases and even disappear from the planet.
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While the other category movie is designed to entertain us. when people exhausted after a heavy work ,the best way to relax is watching a light comedy with family members. the laughter can not only releases(release) your tried but also provides an opportunity for you to enjoy the company of families. as my experience in life. before an important exam I usually feel nervous and anxiety(anxious) even can’t sleep at night. but after watching a comedy .I feel refreshed and become more confident. Nowdays(nowadays) such movies are not only simply entertain people but also uncover some truth in life as well. So we also can be taught like(as) the former kind do
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4 e6 y: L$ m& E' Q9 c5 t' V" nTo conclude.from what has been discussed above ,people choose different movies vary(variably) with their interests.movie is just like a mirror of life. We should make full use of it to enrich our mental world.to put another way , People seldom agree with each other even in such trivial issues as preference between two kinds of movies.


楼主观点和论据都不错,但是句子语法错误较多,影响楼主思想的传达,如;
however, which kind of movie do you prefer is presently a heated debate under different education background and interesting.
One type of moive is designed to make audience think which I believe has several features as follow.
the stories benefit youg
generation a lot as fortitude ,brave and persistence which are prerequisites of success.secondly

部分单词拼写错误,如yougNowdays,部分词性不对,如hastebraveanxiety等。
意见比较严重,请楼主不要恼怒,大家相互学习,共同进步哈。

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