[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 司青 第十九次作业]

司青UID: 2590811

[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 司青 第十九次作业]

第十九次作业如下：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for
a teacher try to help students to gain self-confidence than to teach them specific
knowledge. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer (03/10/07).

交作业时间4月8号（星期三）晚上十点前

It is widely believed that imparting specific knowledge to students is the basic obligation of a teacher. However, on a personal level, I think an eligible teacher will not only satisfy with improving his students to the marvelous realm of intelligence, but also .imparting them to form vigorous personality. I ascribe my decision to the reasons elucidated as follows.

Self-confidence is a motivator which can inspire a child interests and ambitions of learning the unknown world. Undoubtedly it is the first step when children have the courage to face difficult problems because at least they want to have a try. At this time, teachers can encourage children by telling them they were well-done as these commitments can help people to believe in themselves. Only a confidential student would like to spend more time and energy to study hard. On the other side, scientific data also shows that the inactive students could not absorb as well as the positive and confidential ones.

Success cannot be measured in terms of money or power. Also an excellent student is not the one who gets the highest score in the examination. Generally speaking, a useful man should first be a lofty people who keeps optimistic attitude in life. As a ridiculous instance in point, in 2002，Liu haiyang, a student of Tsinghua University, vitriolzed five bears in Beijing zoo just want to test the poor animals’ olfactory sense. Through this accident, we could not say one is excellent even he was from a famous college if one who affected with an antisocial personality disorder.

The person who own large amount of money and broad powers may not be very happy, but the confidential person can enjoy the life and finally success. Obviously teachers cannot ask everybody to be scholar because each of us has our goals for which we are continuously striving, but we could encourage children to overcome obstacles in the future by helping them to trust themselves in the life.

To sum up, a successful teacher should pay attention on both two sides. He could help the students to set up his self-confidence and also can teach them specific knowledge. Only in this way, our students can grow up healthy and develop in balance.

laqfanfanUID: 2618864

It is widely believed that imparting specific knowledge to students is the basic obligation of a teacher. However, on a personal level, I think an eligible teacher will not only satisfy with improving his students to the marvelous realm of intelligence, but also .imparting them to form vigorous personality. I ascribe my decision to the reasons elucidated as follows.(词汇感觉很得当,学习了哈)

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Self-confidence is a motivator which can inspire a child interests and ambitions of learning the unknown world. Undoubtedly it is the first step when children have the courage to face difficult problems because at least they want to have a try. At this time, teachers can encourage children by telling them they were well-done as these commitments can help people to believe in themselves. Only a confidential student would like to spend more time and energy to study hard. On the other side, scientific data also shows that the inactive students could not absorb as well as the positive and confidential ones.

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Success cannot be measured in terms of money or power. Also an excellent student is not the one who gets the highest score in the examination. Generally speaking, a useful man should first be a lofty people who keeps optimistic attitude in life. As a ridiculous instance in point, in 2002，Liu haiyang, a student of Tsinghua University, vitriolzed five bears in Beijing zoo just want to test the poor animals’ olfactory sense. Through this accident, we could not say one is excellent even he was from a famous college if one who affected with an antisocial personality disorder.(这个例子与自信没什么关系吧?只是说高分并不是优秀的..有点偏题)

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The person who own large amount of money and broad powers may not be very happy, but the confidential person can enjoy the life and finally success. Obviously teachers cannot ask everybody to be scholar because each of us has our goals for which we are continuously striving, but we could encourage children to overcome obstacles in the future by helping them to trust themselves in the life.

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To sum up, a successful teacher should pay attention on both two sides. He could help the students to set up his self-confidence and also can teach them specific knowledge. Only in this way, our students can grow up healthy and develop in balance.

文章词汇很好..特别值得学习..只是论据太不充分..因为他是在比较学习知识和自信的重要性..但是没有一个论据是在比较这两个的...

没有语法和什么错误..看起来英语功底真的很好..

司青UID: 2590811

谢谢评论，我正在改文章，发现例子不对了，已经修改过了。现在再发一遍刚改的。

司青UID: 2590811

It is widely believed that imparting specific knowledge to students is the basic obligation of a teacher. However, to my mind, an eligible teacher’s responsibility is not only improving his students to the marvelous realm of intelligence, but also helping them to form vigorous personality. I ascribe my decision to the reasons elucidated as follows.

Self-confidence can inspire a child’s interest and ambition of learning the unknown world; it is also the prerequisite condition that enables children to own enough courage to face difficulties. Therefore, helping children to cultivate self-confidence might conducive them to overcome obstacles met in our daily life. At this time, teachers can encourage children by telling them they were well-done as these commitments can motivate them. According to scientific data, the inactive students could not absorb knowledge as much as the positive ones. In fact, a confident student would like to spend more time and energy to study hard.

Success cannot be measured in terms of money or power. Similarly, an excellent student cannot be measured by score he gained in examinations. Generally speaking, a comprehensive student should characterize as a lofty person who keeps optimistic attitude towards life. As we all know, what the disabled author, Helen Keller, who wrote Three Days To see, relied is the steel of her belief. Without the strong resolve, she could not beat a physical handicap easily. In this case, we can discover that confidence is the essential element for the people who were striving for success.

The person who own large amount of money and broad powers might not be the happiest person who always win in competitions. However, a confident one could enjoy his life and finally achieve success. Obviously, teachers cannot ask everybody to be scholar since each of us has our goals for which we are continuously striving, but they could encourage children to conquer hardness by helping them to trust themselves in the life.

To sum up, a successful teacher should pay attention to both two sides. He should help the students to set up his self-confidence and also teach them specific knowledge. Only in this way, our students can grow up both mentally and physically.

HYPS2011UID: 2618437

1# 司青
It is widely believed that imparting specific knowledge to students is the basic obligation of a teacher. However, to my mind, an eligible teacher’s responsibility is not only improving his students to the marvelous realm of intelligence, but also helping them to form vigorous personality. I ascribe my decision to the reasons elucidated as follows.
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Self-confidence can inspire a child’s interest and ambition of learning the unknown world; it is also the prerequisite condition that enables children to own enough courage to face difficulties. Therefore, helping children to cultivate self-confidence might conducive (conduct)them to overcome obstacles met in our daily life. At this time, teachers can encourage children by telling them they were (are)well-done as these commitments(当诺言讲还是？) can motivate them. According to scientific data（datas）, the inactive students could not absorb knowledge as much as the positive ones. In fact, a confident student would like to spend more time and energy to study hard.(spend ...on) 或许可以说 confident students are willing to work hard while the others are not.
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Success cannot be measured in terms of money or power. Similarly, an excellent student cannot be measured by score he gained in examinations. Generally speaking, a comprehensive student should be characterized as a lofty person who keeps optimistic attitude towards life. As we all know, what the disabled author, Helen Keller, who wrote
（用the writer of替代，不然句子结果就有问题了） Three Days To see(著作名用斜体), relied is the steel of her belief. Without the strong resolve, she could not beat a physical handicap easily. In this case, we can discover that confidence is the essential element for the people who were striving for success.

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The person who owns large amount of money and broad powers might not be the happiest person who always win in (删掉)competitions. However, a confident one could enjoy his life and finally achieve success. Obviously, teachers cannot ask（建议用require）everybody to be scholar since each of us has our goals for which we are continuously striving, but they could encourage children to conquer hardness by helping them to trust themselves in the life.
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To sum up, a successful teacher should pay attention to both two sides. He should not simply help the students to set up his self-confidence and also teach them specific knowledge as well. Only in this way, our students can grow up both mentally and physically.（感觉成分缺了）
总的来说司青同学的句子结构好像都是主谓。
可以换几种表达方式。Helen的例子很不错，当时我为什么没想到呢？
一起加油，你改我的没喃？呵呵不好意思这么晚才来

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司青UID: 2590811

conducive (conduct)

conducive
adj.
导致..的； 有助于...的 (to)
Fresh air is conducive to health.
新鲜空气有助于健康。

commitments(当诺言讲还是？)

呵呵，单词记错了。。。惭愧，
commendation,n.
称赞， 赞扬
推荐
奖品， 奖状
祝词； 问候
earn commendation for a job well done
因工作成绩优异而赢得赞扬

In fact, a confident student would like to spend more time and energy to study hard.(spend ...on) 或许可以说 confident students are willing to work hard while the others are not.

这个句子我是想破了脑袋也没有想到怎么写的充实，写的不重复。

To sum up, a successful teacher should pay attention to both two sides. He should not simply help the students to set up his self-confidence and also teach them specific knowledge as well. Only in this way, our students can grow up both mentally and physically.（感觉成分缺了）

恩，最后一段我自己觉得写的很鸡肋。也没有更好的句式表达，打算等下继续重写一遍。

司青UID: 2590811

谢谢5楼的HYPS2011，改的很细致，细小的错误都指出来的。很感动哦。

其实我的句式掌握不多，写的文章不多，看的范文也少，所以可能文章写起来就比较枯燥。大家一起批判我，就让我感觉自己还有很多需要恶补的地方。下次一定要更努力的写。

HYPS2011UID: 2618437

你的词汇还是很不错的！conducive 呵呵 学习了 哈！ 一起努力吧