TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 wazza 第22次作业

wazzaUID: 2473807

Accompanied by the ever increasing progress of the science and technology, the pace of modern life also speeds up. Nowadays each person has his/her own tasks to carry out under certain deadlines, Say, attending a course in MBA program, making a marketing plan and so on. Thus, many people claim that individuals should take up some plans at one time so that they can finish on time. However, after all aspects carefully considered, I still believe that to perform one project then another does more good to human beings.

To begin with, the more attention individuals pay to their projects, the more likely they succeed. As is known to all, concentration is of great significance for a person who is aspiring for his/her goal. On the contrary, coping with several projects at the same time distracts people's focus, which is prone to mistakes. Take the well-known businessman, Bill Gates, for example. From that day he run his company, Gate was devoted himself to develop the personal computers' operating system. After years of effort, he made it. If Gates developed computer games simultaneously, how could he lead Microsoft into such a big success?

In addition, the difficulties and pressure dramatically increase as the number of tasks rises. Generally speaking, human beings tend to fully utilize their potential in a less stressful condition. In other words, more projects mean more obstacles, pressure and probability to make mistake. I still remember the time when I prepared for my final exams and the internship interview at one time. Those days, unforgettably, almost drove me crazy. Since the math final exam came soon, my presentation in the interview was really awful because of anxiety. As a result, I missed the chance. If I could come back that time, I would focus on one project each time.

Admittedly, treating with several projects at the same time is a challenge, which is helpful to strengthen individual capacity. During the limited working period, a person must learn how to arrange his time and how to deal with emergency. People can benefit from this process, though many times the price is the failure to achieve their goals.

To sum up, people had better to focus on one project each time rather than several in one time, which can provide a circumstance where individuals tend to make full use of their abilities and easily concentrate on the single goal.

限时练习，写到第四段时间已经差不多了。结尾已经是超时写的。如果速度还提不起来，到考试时，只能写2论点。

不知大家有没有什么好经验给小弟借鉴一下？？

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Accompanied by the ever increasing progress of the science and technology, the pace of modern life also speeds up.（首句很好） Nowadays each person has his/her own tasks to carry out under certain deadlines, Say, attending a course in MBA program, making a marketing plan and so on. （很喜欢你的开篇，每次写作文都要在首段纠结，觉得老是写不好，或者不太顺，向楼主学习）Thus, many people claim that individuals should take up some plans at one time so that they can finish on time. However, after all aspects carefully considered, I still believe that to perform one project then another does more good to human beings.

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To begin with, the more attention individuals pay to their projects, the more likely they succeed. As is known to all, concentration is of great significance for a person who is aspiring for his/her goal. On the contrary, coping with several projects at the same time distracts people's focus, which is prone to mistakes. Take the well-known businessman, Bill Gates, for example. From that day he run his company, Gate was devoted himself to develop the personal computers' operating system. After years of efforts, he made(got) it. If Gates developed computer games simultaneously, how could he lead Microsoft into such a big success?

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In addition, the difficulties and pressure (are) dramatically increasing as the number of tasks rises. Generally speaking, human beings tend to fully utilize their potential in a less stressful condition. In other words, more projects mean more obstacles, pressure and probability to make mistake. I still remember the time when I prepared for my final exams and the internship interview at one time. Those days, unforgettably, almost drove me crazy. Since the math final exam came soon, my presentation in the interview was really awful because of anxiety. As a result, I missed the chance. If I could come back that time, I would focus on one project each time.(觉得楼主句与句之间的逻辑很好，学习）

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Admittedly, treating with several projects at the same time is a challenge, which is helpful to strengthen individual capacity. During the limited working period, a person must learn how to arrange his time and how to deal with emergency. People can benefit from this process, though many times the price is the failure to achieve their goals.（这段的让步觉得有点突兀，好像还是应该在结尾强化一下自己的论点）

To sum up, people had better to focus on one project each time rather than several in one time, which can provide a circumstance where individuals tend to make full use of their abilities and easily concentrate on the single goal.

楼主这篇文章有450字了吧，在规定时间内估计也能完成400，足够了。
觉得只要语言好，清晰，有说服力就很好了，应该不用过分追求字数的~~

liurui8802UID: 2595045

Accompanied by the ever increasing progress of the science and technology, the pace of modern life also speeds up. Nowadays each person has his/her own tasks to carry out under certain deadlines, Say, attending a course in MBA program, making a marketing plan and so on. Thus, many people claim that individuals should take up some plans at one time so that they can finish on time. However, after all aspects carefully considered, I still believe that to perform one project then another does more good to human beings（这个词用的太大了）.

To begin with, the more attention individuals pay to their projects, the more likely they succeed. As is known to all, concentration is of great significance for a person who is aspiring for his/her goal. On the contrary, coping with several projects at the same time distracts people's focus, which指代有问题，是人犯错误，不是人的经历被分散这件事情 is prone to mistakes. Take the well-known businessman, Bill Gates, for example. From that day he run过去时 his company, Gate was去掉 devoted himself to develop+ing the personal computers' operating system. After years of effort, he made it. If Gates developed computer games simultaneously, how could he lead Microsoft into such a big success?

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In addition, the difficulties and pressure dramatically increase as the number of tasks rises. Generally speaking, human beings tend to fully utilize their potential in a less stressful condition. In other words, more projects mean more obstacles, pressure and probability to make mistake. I still remember the time when I (got)prepared for my final exams and the internship interview at one(the same) time. Those days, unforgettably, almost drove me crazy. Since the math final exam came soon, my presentation in the interview was really awful because of anxiety. As a result, I missed the chance. If I could come back that time表达有误，中式表达（if I had the chance to handle this situation again), I would focus on one project each time.

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Admittedly, treating（dealing) with several projects at the same time is a challenge, which is helpful to strengthen individual+'s capacity(capabilities). During the limited working period, a person must learn how to arrange his time and how to deal with emergency. People can benefit from this process, though many times(这不是一个时间状语从句引导词） the price(cost) is the failure to achieve their goals.

To sum up, people had better to去掉 focus on one project each time rather than （deal with前后对称 )several (projects)in one time, which can provide a circumstance where individuals tend to make full use of their abilities and easily concentrate on the single goal.

总的来说还不错，就是语法错误有一些。你可以先列个提纲，然后在开始写，尽量提高打字的速度和思维的速度，多练几次，应该能提高写作的速度。最好留3-4分钟检查。