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发表于 2009-5-2 21:53:59 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In university, students
should take the history courses no matter what field they study in. Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.(07/28/07)


As personal experience,the students in my university take the history course when they are sophomore.History is really an interesting and vivid class for it not only let us know huge amounts of information occurred in the past but also we can learn some methods to predict future.Therefore,I totally agree with the opinion that all the college students should be arranged history curriculam.Everyone may obtain some merits from this course.

To begin with,the history is the basic knowledge for a person.History means the past,if one never consider what happened in the past time will not fit in our society.For example,the military movies always utilize the material like World War Two,if a person do not know the history between 1937 to 1945,movies of this type are meaningless to him/her.The basic knowledge of history is the general knowledge like math.Besides,the stories in history often demonstrate the national spirit.It is an excellent way to cultivate the national spirit through teaching history class,especially for youngsters.Thus,students who learn some knowledge about history will not only benefit to their daily life but also let them know the national spirit.

In addition,history provides inspiration to other fields.It is the resource of other subjects such as science,architecture or even art.In science field,numerous new innovations are invented after the inventors learning the history of the product development process.It is the development history bring the idea that the scientist creats the new generation products which more welcomed by public. Similarly,if the architects or artists design the houses or clothes cater to the older people,those necessities definitely will attract more elder customers. Learing history of old buildings or clothes which fasion in the past will let the designers know what kind of works should they manufacture.

Furthermore,the most important function of learning history is that the history can predict the future.People always want to know what will happen tomorrow.The best way to predict future is that finding out the past of those affairs since the phenomenon or social behavior has its rule and regulation which hide behind the appearance.Students in different area all need the ability of insighting past things.The basic principle of one subject is also useful in another field.Obviously,it is benefit for all the collage students learning history.

In conclusion,learning history will widen the horizon of college students.Through what they learn from history class,they can also enjoy their social life as well as grasp the method which they can apply into their own field.

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发表于 2009-5-6 17:37:58 |显示全部楼层
As personal experience, the students in my university take the history course when they are sophomore. History is really an interesting and vivid class for it not only let us knows huge amounts of information occurred in the past but also we can learn some methods to predict future. Therefore, I totally agree with the opinion that all the college students should be arranged history curriculam.Everyone may obtain some merits from this course.* y4 P: a" X6 V* @6 a% P4 m

To begin with,the history is the basic knowledge for a person.History means the past,if one never consider what happened in the past time will not fit in our society.For example,the military movies always utilize the material like World War Two,if a person do not know the history between 1937 to 1945,movies of this type are meaningless to him/her.The basic knowledge of history is the general knowledge like math.Besides,the stories in history often demonstrate the national spirit.It is an excellent way to cultivate the national spirit through teaching history class,especially for youngsters.Thus,students who learn some knowledge about history will not only benefit to their daily life but also let them know the national spirit.
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In addition,history provides inspiration to other fields.It is the resource of other subjects such as science,architecture
orand even art.In science field,numerous new innovations are invented after the inventors learning the history of the product development process.It is the development of history brings the idea that the scientist creates the new generation products which were more welcomed by public. Similarly,if the architects or artists design the houses or clothes catered to the older people,those necessities definitely will attract more elder customers. Learning history of old buildings or clothes which fashion in the past will let the designers know what kind of works should they manufacture.( W# ^1 i- C- f/ i" Y# O9 {

Furthermore,the most important function of learning history is that the history can predict the future.People always want to know what will happen tomorrow.The best way to predict future is that finding out the past of
those(指代哪里?) affairs since the phenomenon or social behavior has its rule and regulation which hide behind the appearance.Students in different areas all need the ability of insighting past things.need to develop insight to past things,没有insightingThe basic principle of one subject is also useful in another field.Obviously,it is benefit for all the collage students learning history.- f3 _  q$ }1 d# M" V
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In conclusion,learning history will widen the horizon of college students.Through what they learn from history class,they can also enjoy their social life as well as grasp the method which they can apply into their own field.(
结尾不错哦~)

文章还不错~ 结构
衔接
语言都挺好
但是感觉例子不够具体
不够有说服力
再具体一点可能更好~
加油!


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发表于 2009-5-10 11:45:30 |显示全部楼层
    As personal experience,the students in my university take the history courses when they are sophomore.History is really an interesting and vivid class for it not only let us know huge amounts of information occurred in the past but also we can learn some methods to predict future.Therefore,I totally agree with the opinion that all the college students should be arranged history curriculam.Everyone may obtain some merits from this course.- y" F& h9 t$ j* X4 q! Q
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    To begin with,the history is the basic knowledge for a person.History means the past,if one never consider what happened in the past time will not fit in our society.For example,the military movies always utilize the material like World War Two,if a person do not know the history between 1937 to 1945,movies of this type are meaningless to him/her.The basic knowledge of history is the general knowledge like math.Besides,the stories in history often demonstrate the national spirit.It is an excellent way to cultivate the national spirit through teaching history class,especially for youngsters.Thus,students who learn some knowledge about history will not only benefit to their daily lives but also let them know the national spirit.8 g4 d1 B1 L* |  N- {% m  p% T

    In addition,history provides inspiration to other fields.It is the resource of other subjects such as science,architecture or even art.In science field,numerous new innovations are invented after the inventors learning the history of the product development process.It is the development history bring the idea that the scientist creats the new generation products which more welcomed by public. Similarly,if the architects or artists design the houses or clothes cater to the older people,those necessities definitely will attract more older(elder指有亲属关系的长辈) customers. Learing history of old buildings or clothes which (are) fashion in the past will let the designers know what kind of works should they manufacture.* B( w( T& g1 b

    Furthermore,the most important function of learning history is that the history can predict the future.People always want to know what will happen tomorrow.The best way to predict future is that finding out the past of those affairs since the phenomenon or social behavior has its rule and regulation which hide behind the appearance.Students in different area all need the ability of insighting past things.The basic principle of one subject is also useful in another field.Obviously,it is benefit for all the college students learning history.

   
    In conclusion,learning history will widen the horizon of college students.Through what they learn from history class,they can also enjoy their social lives as well as grasp the method which they can apply into their own field.


总的来说还可以吧,要注意一些拼写错误,单复数问题,语法问题
总的来说就是细节问题~!
加油~!

还有,请改下你小组同学的文章吧,大家都在付出~!
请珍惜别人的劳动成果,不能一味的都是别人跟你改啊~!
谢谢~!

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