Dark_tournament 写作小组jackie1983第二十八次作业

jackie1983UID: 2484456

第二十八次作业发布如下：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Getting advice from
older friends is more valuable than getting advice from friends at your age. Use
specific reasons and examples to support your answer.（08/17/07
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more experiences
2 peers , more updated info eg, go to university computer major

3 same experiences, understand situation better, consertive, try new things,

Is the advice of older friends more precious than that of the peers? Different people may respond to this question variously according to their personal experiences and educational levels. As far as I am concerned, although older friends' advice may have some merits, the advice of peers is more important.

Admittedly, the advice of older people may be more comprehensive than that of the peers, because older friends may have more experiences in their lives. However, peers' advice may be more significant.

First and foremost, peers may get more updated information with which they can give a more proper suggestion than the older friends. As we know, the pace of the development of science and technology is increasing everyday, and friends at my age can get the latest information and their suggestion may be appropriate for me. For instance, peers may suggest me to choose computer science as my major in a university because they know the opportunity that computers have brought about to the society. Nevertheless, older friends may lack the touch with computer, and therefore they can not suggest such a good major to me. Thus, we can see a peer can give some important opinion according to their renewed knowledge.

In addition, the suggestion of peers may be more suitable for me because our peers share similar experiences and may understand the problem I meet better. Let me take my study as an example, in the process of learning, I often meet with some problems in mathematics or chemistry, and peers can help me to solve these problems. On the contrary, if I turn to older friends for help, they may have forgotten the knowledge once they have learned.

Taking into consideration what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that advices of peers are more significant than that of the older friends, because peers often gain updated knowledge and we share similar experiences

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Is the advice of older friends more precious than that of the peers? Different people may respond to this question variously according to their personal experiences and educational(education) levels. As far as I am concerned, although older friends' advice may have some merits, the advice of (of or from?)peers is more important.

Admittedly, the(去掉，这里并没有特指） advice of older people may be more comprehensive（advice 能用comprehensive来形容？换个词吧） than that of the peers, because older friends may have more experiences in their lives. However, peers' advice may be more significant.
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First and foremost, peers may get more updated information with which they can give a more proper suggestion than the older friends. As we know, the pace of the development of science and technology is increasing everyday, and friends at my age can get the latest information and their suggestion may be appropriate for me. （给怎样的建议跟知不知道the latest information 有什么关系，觉得后面的例子还是不太能够说明问题，个人意见。）For instance, peers may suggest me to choose computer science as my major in a university because they know the opportunity that computers have brought about to the society. Nevertheless, older friends may lack the touch with computer（不一定older 了就不知道computer 啊，都发明好长时间了...这里应该特指一下，说明在我的生活了，扮演older friends 的是妈妈或者老师级的人物，他们与我年龄差距太大，而且lack the touch with computer), and therefore they can not suggest such a good major to me. Thus, we can see a peer can give some important opinion according to their renewed knowledge.4 N1 ~% O5 r0 x2 S7 g

In addition, the suggestion of peers may be more suitable for me because our peers share similar experiences and may understand the problem I meet better. Let me take my study as an example, in the process of learning, I often meet with some problems in mathematics or chemistry, and peers can help me to solve these problems. On the contrary, if I turn to older friends for help, they may have forgotten the knowledge once they have learned.

Taking into consideration what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that advices of peers are more significant than that of the older friends, because peers often gain updated knowledge and we share similar experiences

LZ的观点不错，但例子还应该再充实。
另外，句式不太丰富，句型结构还是有点单一。

一起加油~

桑梓UID: 2613051

Is the advice of older friends more precious than that of the peers? Different people may respond to this question variously according to their personal experiences and educational levels. As far as I am concerned, although older friends' advice may have some merits, the advice of peers is more important.

Admittedly, the advice of older people may be more comprehensive than that of the peers, because older friends may have more experiences in their lives. However, peers' advice may be more significant.

First and foremost, peers may get more updated information with which they can give a more proper suggestion than the older friends. As we know, the pace of the development of science and technology is increasing everyday, and friends at my age can get the latest information and their suggestion may be appropriate for me. For instance, peers may suggest me to choose computer science as my major in a university because they know the opportunity that computers have brought about to the society. Nevertheless, older friends may lack the touch with computer, and therefore they can not suggest such a good major to me. Thus, we can see a peer can give some important opinion according to their renewed knowledge.

In addition, the suggestion of peers may be more suitable for me because our peers share similar experiences and may understand the problem I meet better. Let me take my study as an example, in the process of learning, I often meet with some problems in mathematics or chemistry, and peers can help me to solve these problems. On the contrary, if I turn to older friends for help, they may have forgotten the knowledge once they have learned.

Taking into consideration （这个应该放在above后吧）what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that advices （单数）of peers are more significant than that of the older friends, because peers often gain updated knowledge and we share similar experiences
LZ加油了 没找出多少要改的地方 就是觉得例子应该更具体点~~~~