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in all of our life,we are infatuated with the passion of pursuing a goal of successing,but some failed it ,some made it,so frequently we asked ourself,what should we be in purpose of successing, in other words ,what's the extreme important character to success? based on various ground, there must be lots of wonderful answers, and in my opinion,i will firstly be a honest person for the aim of catching my own successful future.


firstly,to be honest is the first essential step of winnig other's belief and attaining other's help at crisis moment. for example,when you are in a morass of doing something, and mess up the assignment that your boss give to you ,you'd better explain these to him or her honestly and ask for an another chance to fix up the problem,but if you choose to disguise your mistake,there is no doubt it will be your finish line when all the false revealed as time goes by.

another importance of being honest is that helps you cooperate with others easiy.when you give others a deep impression of being honest, it means that your cooperator would invest more chance and force on your business,beacuse they trust you,believe you,in opposite,if they find out that you alway cheat others, they will leave you behind directly.

and then , what i want to express is to be honest leads you a happy life with friends' love ,this is also a success  you can make  in your life, only being honest to your friends is the right way keeping your friends aroud you, there is no one likes cheater being their friends,so to accumulate the  precious friendship in our life,to be successful on getting a happiness fullfilled life,we need to be a absolute honest person.

and finally conclude all of above, honesty is the most valuable character in our life of persisting the way going to success.

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in all of our life,we are infatuated with the passion of pursuing a goal of successing（这个句子里面意思太重复累赘了， be infatuated with, be passion of sth, pursuing 都有痴迷于，有热情做什么的意思，用一个就好） ,but some failed it（去掉it) ,some made it(去掉）,so frequently we asked ourself （frequently) ,what should we be( obtain to win success) in purpose of successing, in other words ,what's the extremely important character to success? based on various ground, there must be lots of wonderful(去掉） answers, and in my opinion,i will firstly become a honest person for the aim of catching my own successful future.


    firstly,to be honest is the first essential step of winnig other's belief and attaining other's help at crisis moment. for example,when you are in a morass of doing something, and mess up the assignment that your boss give to you ,you'd better explain these to him or her honestly and ask for an去掉 another chance to fix up the problem,but if you choose to disguise your mistake,there is no doubt that it will be your finish line when all the false revealed as time goes by.
   建议用长难句时一定保证句子的语法正确性。词句不是越华丽越好，适合的才好。句子不是越复杂越好，清晰明了的好。写文章，重要的是观点表述清晰鲜明。例证充分恰当。
what matters is your idea.

    another importance of being honest is that helps you cooperate with others easiy句子改改 .when you give others a deep impression of being honest, it means that your cooperator would invest more chance and force on your business,beacuse they trust you,believe you,in opposite,if they find out that you alway cheat others, they will leave you behind directly.
    建议举实际的例子例证，比如某人，欺骗了，结果怎么了

    Fand then（finally) , what i want to express is to be honest leads you a happy life with friends' love ,this is also a success  you can make  in your life, only being honest to your friends is the right way keeping your friends aroud you, there is no one likes cheater being their friends,so to accumulate the  precious friendship in our life,to be successful on getting a happiness fullfilled life,we need to be a absolute honest person.

    and finally conclude all of above, honesty is the most valuable character in our life of persisting the way going to success.
    优点： 结构清晰
    缺点：句子语法有问题，建议多写多练多记。一定要注意用心认真心，写慢点都没得啥子，关键是练习时要打好提纲写好句子。

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in all of our life,we are infatuated with the passion of pursuing a goal of successing（这个句子里面意思太重复累赘了， be infatuated with, be passion of sth, pursuing 都有痴迷于，有热情做什么的意思，用一个就好） ,but some failed it（去掉it) ,and some made it(去掉）,so frequently we asked ourself （frequently) ,what should we be( obtain to win success) in purpose of successing, in other words ,what's the extremely important character to success? based on various ground, there must be lots of wonderful(去掉） answers, and in my opinion,i will firstly become a honest person for the aim of catching my own successful future.6 J7 J5 n, V  ~/ P
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firstly,to be honest is the first essential step of winnig other's belief(trust) and attaining other's help at crisis(critical) moment. for example,when you are in a morass of doing something, and mess up the assignment that your boss give to you ,you'd better explain these to him or her honestly and ask for an去掉 another chance to fix up the problem,but if you choose to disguise your mistake,there is no doubt that it will be your finish line when all the false revealed as time goes by.. G) r: |- c: l+ M+ C
   建议用长难句时一定保证句子的语法正确性。词句不是越华丽越好，适合的才好。句子不是越复杂越好，清晰明了的好。写文章，重要的是观点表述清晰鲜明。例证充分恰当。/ o& `4 X1 f$ D7 |, H1 Z( `
what matters is your idea.
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    another importance of being honest is that helps you cooperate with others easiy句子改改 .when you give others a deep impression of being honest, it means that your cooperator would invest more chance and force on your business,beacuse they trust you, and believe you,in opposite,if they find out that you alway cheat others, they will leave you behind directly.
    建议举实际的例子例证，比如某人，欺骗了，结果怎么了6 c1 m3 H. p: x# G

    and then（finally) , what i want to express is to be honest leads you a happy life with friends' love ,this is also a success  you can make  in your life, only being honest to your friends is the right way keeping your friends aroud you, there is no one likes cheater being their friends,so to accumulate the  precious friendship in our life,to be successful on getting a happiness fullfilled life(a life filled with happyness),we need to be an absolutely honest person.$ |8 d. f, ]( }6 x, q+ O; n
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    and finally conclude all of above, honesty is the most valuable character in our life of persisting on the way going(leading) to success.