Argument7=So What=小组第1次作业 by ZhouPYF

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不好意思开始格式搞错了

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汗，自卑一下，速度还真快。我连题还没看的说。。。

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT7 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.

"In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved."

在下一次市长选举中，Clearview的市应投Good Earth Coalition成员Ann Green的票，而不是Clearview市委成员Frank Braun，因为当前的市委成员没有保护我们的环境。举例来说，去年Clearview的工厂数量翻了一番，空气污染水平增加了，而且当地医院因呼吸道疾病就诊的数量增加了25％。如果我们选举Ann Green，Clearview的环境问题肯定将被解决。

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TIME: 00:39:40
DATE: 5/22/2009 4:14:38 PM

提纲：

1 也许当前的town council 并没有不保护环境，没有他们的努力，工厂数量可能更多，另外除了空气污染还有很多别的可能导致呼吸道疾病
2就算当前town council 不注重保护环境， Frank本人的立场并没有说明，也许他是一位环保主义者，仅仅是因为在council里面势力比较小
3 仅仅因为Ann是环保组织一员并不能保证她能解决环保问题。

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In this argument the author claims that in order to solve environment problems residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green in the next mayoral election rather than current council member Frank Braun. To bolster his proposal he points out that two facts, one is that Ann is the member of a certain environmental protection organization and the other is the in the past year the number of factories in town has doubled and also pollution levels have increased which shows the current are not protecting the environment. Although the conclusion seems reasonable, several unsubstantiated assumptions and logical flaws may undermine this argument.

To begin with, the increase of the factories and air pollution levels does not necessary mean the current town council is not protecting our environment. It is possible that in order to boost the economic, the town had to open new factories as many as possible and without current council's effort, perhaps the number of new factories would be three or four times more. In addition there are many possible reasons to cause respiratory illnesses, for instance, the change of the climate. So it is not persuasive to assert that current are not protecting the environment until more details are provided.

Moreover, even if we concede the current council does not focus on the environmental protection, it is unfair to attribute all the faults to Frank Braun, maybe setting up new factories is some other members' idea and Frank Braun is a supporter of the environmental protection. The author does not provide us the information of Frank, what is his attitude towards environment, what did he do during the past time, unless we have known some background information of Frank, we cannot simply make the judgment.

Finally, the fact that Ann Green is a member of Good Earth Coalition does not mean she can solve the environmental problems. Being a member of town council is not like being a member of certain association. We are not sure that if Ann has the ability to manage quite a lot of things as a mayor. It is also not clear whether she has relative experience before. It is entirely possible that she cannot deal with so many tough works and complicated relations when she is elected as mayor, not to mention solving the environmental problems.

In sum, the proposal lack the credibility because the evidence cited in the argument can not support what arguer maintains, to strengthen the argument, the author should have to provide us more information concerning the background of both candidates, including their abilities and attitudes towards environmental protection. To better evaluate the argument we should also need more information regarding the causation of the respiratory illness.

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In this argument the author claims that in order to solve environment problems residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green in the next mayoral election rather than current council member Frank Braun. 貌似反了吧？应该主要是围绕选做市长的问题展开的。而之所以要选AG是因为保护环境的问题。。。可能楼主不是这样想的，但这句话你这样写出来就觉得你搞反了。。。To bolster his proposal he points out that不用要that吧？ two facts, one is that Ann is the member of a certain environmental protection organization and the other is the in the past year the number of factories in town has doubled and also pollution levels have increased which shows the current are not protecting the environment. Although the conclusion seems reasonable, several unsubstantiated assumptions and logical flaws may undermine this argument.个人觉得首段不用把错误讲这么详细而且把数量也写出来吧？后面反正要展开各个击破的嘛。

To begin with, the increase of the factories and air pollution levels does not necessarynecessarily mean the current town council is not protecting our environment. It is possible that in order to boost the economic要用名词，economy, the town had to open new factories as many as possible and without current council's effort, perhaps the number of new factories would be three or four times more. In addition there are many possible reasons to cause respiratory illnesses, for instance, the change of the climate. So it is not persuasive to assert that current council membersare not protecting the environment until more details are provided.

Moreover, even if we concede the current council does not focus on the environmental protection, it is unfair to attribute all the faults to Frank Braun, maybe setting up new factories is some other members' idea and Frank Braun is a supporter of the environmental protection. The author does not provide us the information of Frank, what is his attitude towards environment, what did he do during the past time, unless we have known some background information of Frank, we cannot simply make the judgment这个搭配。。。好像有点不对也。。。.

Finally, the fact that Ann Green is a member of Good Earth Coalition does not mean she can solve the environmental problems. Being a member of town council is not like being a member of certain association. We are not sure that if Ann has the ability to manage quite a lot of things as a mayor. It is also not clear whether she has relative experience before. It is entirely possible 是想表达绝对有可能的意思吗？是否可以用extremely likely that she cannot deal with so many tough works and complicated relations when she is elected as mayor, not to mention solving the environmental problems.

In sum, the proposal lacks the credibility because the evidence cited in the argument can not support what arguer maintains, to strengthen the argument, the author should have to provide us more information concerning the background of both candidates, including their abilities and attitudes towards environmental protection. To better evaluate the argument we should also need more information regarding the causation of the respiratory illness.

还是觉得不够acdemic吧。。。然后语法错误。。。不过想想自己那篇错误估计也挺多。
anyway,一起加油吧！

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谢谢楼上
我细细研读下再好好修改……

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In this argument the author claims that in order to solve environment problems residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green in the next mayoral election rather than current council member Frank Braun. To bolster his proposal he points out that two facts, one is that Ann is the member of a certain environmental protection organization and the other is the in the past year the number of factories in town has doubled and also pollution levels have increased which shows the current are not protecting the environment. Although the conclusion seems reasonable, several unsubstantiated assumptions and logical flaws may undermine this argument.

我觉得你的开头还行  沿用了 一个S+E+Q的模式
我觉得你可以在每段句首把错误名列出来，这样会显得很有水平
例如  The arguer falls into the false analogy that
如果我们选举Ann Green，Clearview的环境问题肯定将被解决。这就是错误类比
The author commit  a fallacy of hasty generalization```去年Clearview的工厂数量翻了一番，空气污染水平增加了  这是错误因果， It is highly possible other factors may have contribute to ```For instance,```
The author falsely depends on gratuitous assumption that````

25％------这是典型攻击点  the author fails to give the specific number of ``  也许原来基数很小，也许就几个人，那么增长了25％就不足为奇