Issue7 =So What=小组第1次作业 by 2006201652

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文章中没有特别的素材,最近写科技类文章，不知道这个行不？关于核泄漏...:L 严重跑题！:dizzy:
1. nuclear leak in USA in 1979, is the most significant accident in the history of the American commercial nuclear power generating industry. It released a lot of radioactive noble gases, just as a spokeman in USNRC said "There's a hell of a lot of radiation.".This is a classical example of unproper control and use of high-teched equipment(mechanical faiure).After the leakage, a majority of people were in panic, many people lost their faith in nuclear power.
2.function of video（this is cited from a website）
Video cameras are used primarily in two modes. The first, characteristic of much early television, is what might be called a live broadcast, where the camera feeds real time images directly to a screen for immediate observation; in addition to live television production, such usage is characteristic of security, military/tactical, and industrial operations where surreptitious or remote viewing is required.

2006201652UID: 2496703

TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
WORDS: 507          TIME: 01:00:35          DATE: 5/24/2009 8:33:23 PM
摄像机可以通过如此精确而有力的记录手段来再现当代生活，因此它已经代替书面记录成为了一种更重要的记录手段。
提纲：
论点：摄像机确实大大的提高了人们记录的方式，但是不能取代书面记录。
1.摄像机重要。我们看电视，全部是摄像机的功劳。我们可以更直观的看到各式各样的新闻等等。
2.摄像机可以记录平常人的一些难忘的瞬间。像一场生日聚会，婚礼。这些幸福热闹的场面是文书所不能体现的.摄像机是人们娱乐的一个重要部分和源泉、
3.但是，文本很重要。摄像机不能取代，如法律，没有国家的法律是通过vedio来实现制定和实施的。书写的更有效力。
4.没有书面表达，只看video对于理解某些问题没有货很少有帮助。在教育领域，虽然老师们用多媒体教学，但这也只是个工具而已。看一些模型更直观，有助于理解，但精华还是在书上。另外，一些从太空传来的关于地球的视频，要经过专家的解释注释人们才会更好的理解。这些都说文本的重要性。
结尾：作者那么说不正确。

2006201652UID: 2496703

Does the video camera play a significant role in modern life that it is becoming more important as documentation than the written records? I concede that video camera is dramatically useful in recording our contemporary life, but it can never take the place of written records.

Admittedly, video camera as a tool of documentation since invented(its advent) dramatically changed the way we memorize our life. We should not go further to see the significant role of video, because many respects of our life are accurately represented to the whole people. When we turn on the television, all in our eyes are the moving and vivid picture, from news express to talk shows, from the interview of a magnate to a certain sports ceremony. In addition, one can gain a sight of how the president of his country deals with the diplomatic problems with other countries. Without video, it is hard for us to get such accurate information.

In addition, with the help of video, we can easily present our once wonderful moments which can not well expressed and contained by any written forms.
For example, as everyone desires to record and memorize his/her important events like a birthday party or a wedding ceremony, and without doubt, video camera can achieve this and it can accurately record the details of the whole party as one wishes. The happiness conveyed by video is more vivid and direct, and video is a dramatically way and resource to entertainment.

However, video camera can never replace the great role of written forms in deeper understanding, further explanation and more accurate analysis. In the first place, to some certain and special terms, authority can be gained and strengthened only through written documentation. The most compelling example is the regulatory and complement of the laws. In no country is law represented by video camera, because law written on paper is more powerful while video as documentation is much more related with entertainment and informal.

In the second place, without written documentation, which are conducive to explain further and hidden meanings of the video, video is useless or of little importance in many cases. A proper example related to this point involves the use of multimedia in education. In education, there is a raise in using the multimedia as an ancillary facility. Since the multimedia provides a more direct and vivid picture of such conditions like the movement of an atom or molecule. However, teachers always emphasize the knowledge in books no matter how is the multimedia frequently used by them. Similarly, through a series of videos returned by manmade satellites from outer space, one can hardly obtain some useful information. Only after these videos are analyzed and noted by gastronomists can we actually find out this conveyed information. Thus, the video are insufficient to explain the conditions of certain entities.

To sum up, even though video plays an increasingly important role in contemporary life, mostly as a form of entertainment, it can not replace the position of written forms when takes the deeper explanation and function of protecting authority into consideration.

gabywUID: 2633725

Does the video camera play a significant role in modern life that it is becoming more important as a form of documentation than the written records? I concede that video camera is dramatically (这个词用的恰当吗？considerable)useful in recording our contemporary life, but it can never take the place of written records.

Admittedly, video camera as a tool of documentation since invented (its advent) dramatically （delete）changed the way we memorize our life in a large degree. We should not go further to see the significant role of video, because many respects (aspects) of our life are accurately represented to the whole people. When we turn on the television, all in our eyes are the moving and vivid picture, from news express to talk shows, from the interview of a magnate to a certain sports ceremony. In additional, one can gain a sight of how the president of his country deals with the diplomatic problems with other countries. Without video, it is hard for us to get such accurate information.

In additional,(furthermore, additionally, moreover,), with the help of video, we can easily present our once wonderful moments ,which can not well expressed and contained by any written forms.
For example, as everyone desires to record and memorize his/her important events like a birthday party or a wedding ceremony, (and without doubt) (undoubtedly), video camera can achieve this and it can accurately record the details of the whole party as one wishes. The happiness conveyed by video is more vivid and direct, and video is a dramatically （这个词在你这里感觉好万能啊，怎么都能用？？？）way and resource to entertainment.

However, video camera can never replace the great role of written forms in deeper（deeply）
understanding, further explanation and more accurate analysis. In the first place, to some certain and special terms, authority can be gained （你想表达什么？）and strengthened only through written documentation. The most compelling example is the regulatory and complement of the laws. In no country is law represented by video camera, because law written on paper is more powerful while video as documentation is much more related （associated ） with entertainment and informal.

In the second place, without written documentation, which are conducive to explain further and hidden meanings of the video, video is useless or of little importance in many cases. A proper example related to this point involves the use of multimedia in education.(good！) In education, there is a raise (increase) in using the multimedia as an ancillary facility. Since the multimedia provides a more direct and vivid picture of such conditions like the movement of an atom or molecule. However, teachers always emphasize the knowledge in books no matter how is the multimedia frequently used by them. Similarly,（这个让步状语从句太牵强了，你可以用，although，Although the multimedia is nearly used in teaching classes, the importance of book is never be ignored or denied. ）through a series of videos returned by manmade satellites from outer space, one can hardly obtain some useful information. Only after these videos are analyzed and noted by gastronomists can we actually find out this conveyed information. （good！）Thus, the （delete）videoS are insufficient to explain the conditions of certain entities.

To sum up, even though video plays an increasingly important role in contemporary life, mostly as a form of entertainment, it can not replace the position of （delete, 中文表达中的措辞）written forms when takes the deeper explanation and function of protecting authority into consideration.（？）

注： 1.基本语法错误很少，很好，再使用写好的句子就很不错，注意英文表达方式，一定学习好的英文文章中的表达。
  2. 用词不准缺，状语表大的不好。
  3.另外，批改不对的地方请指出，大家共同学习进步 加油！！

sha-shineUID: 2610662

Does the video camera play a significant role in modern life that it is becoming more important as documentation than the written records? I concede that video camera is dramatically（戏剧化
放在这里不是十分贴切换成pretty就行） useful in recording our contemporary life, but it can never take the place of written records.

Admittedly, video camera as a tool of documentation since invented(its advent) dramatically changed the way we memorize our life. We should not（不是不应该这给人一种被动的感觉 do not need to即可） go further to see the significant（可以用momentous替换） role of video, because（since替换） many respects（aspects不是尊重
是方面） of our life are accurately represented to the whole people. When we turn on the television, all in our eyes are the moving and vivid picture, （which is）from news express to talk shows,（中间应该加and 逗号也要去掉） from the interview of a magnate to a certain sports ceremony. In addition, one can gain a sight of how the president of his country deals with the diplomatic problems with（不是和国外国家处理外交事务而是处理国外事物用about） other countries. Without video, it is hard for us to get such accurate（上面说的是“多方面”[大体这个意思]的消息而不是精确的消息应该换成various and useful 可能更加贴切些） information.

In addition（moreover）, with the help of video, we can easily present our once wonderful moments（once这个词好！） which can not well expressed and contained by any written forms.
For example, as everyone desires to record and memorize his/her important events like a（a去掉比较好） birthday party or a wedding ceremony, and without doubt（“, and without doubt”换成“.Without doubt”）, video camera can achieve this(太chinenglish了 make it true) and it can accurately（exactly） record the details of the whole party as one wishes. The happiness conveyed by video is more vivid and direct, and video is a dramatically way and resource to entertainment.

However, video camera can never replace the great role of written forms in deeper understanding, further explanation and more accurate analysis. In the first place, to some certain and special terms, authority can be gained and strengthened only through written documentation. The most compelling（好词） example is the regulatory and complement of the laws. In no country is law represented by video camera,（个人感觉说的过于繁琐
“law represented by video camera never happens”可能好点） because law written on paper is more powerful while（这里不属于转折关系用on the other side表示两件事物所体现的不同方面） video as documentation is much more related with entertainment and informal.

In the second place, without written documentation,（去掉，） which are conducive to explain further and hidden meanings of the video, video is useless or of little importance（改成video indicates uselessness and unimportance） in many cases. A proper example related to this point involves the use of multimedia in education. In education（重复啦~~）, there is a raise（好词） in using the multimedia as an ancillary facility. Since the multimedia provides a more direct and vivid（vivi太多了换成个attractive吧） picture of such conditions like the movement of an atom or molecule. However,（这个转折太强大了一个while就可以了） teachers always emphasize the knowledge in books no matter how is（is放在名词后） the multimedia frequently used by them. Similarly, through a series of videos returned by manmade（man-made） satellites from outer space, one can hardly obtain some useful information（表达不清楚啊 hardly容易引起歧义后面的only 可以提前）. Only after these videos （which）are analyzed and noted by gastronomists can we（，we can） actually find out this conveyed information. Thus, the video are insufficient to explain the conditions of certain entities（总结句有些跑题了）.

To sum up, even though video plays an increasingly important role（好词） in （our）contemporary life, mostly as a form of entertainment, it can not replace the position of written forms when takes the deeper explanation and function of protecting authority into consideration.

1.小的逻辑用词错误比较多
平时注意积累；
2.倒数第二段后面的句子逻辑混淆有些严重，可能限于水平有限，读的不是很明白。
3.还有像前面说的
可以从传递精神食粮——文化方面进行多角度阐述。

2006201652UID: 2496703

Does the video camera play a significant role in modern life that it is becoming more important as a form of documentation than the written records? I concede that video camera is considerably useful in recording our contemporary life, but it can never take the place of written records.

Admittedly, video camera as a tool of documentation since invented changed the way we memorize our life to a large degree. We should not go further to see the significant role of video, because many aspects of our life are accurately represented to the whole people. When we turn on the television, all in our eyes are the moving and vivid picture, from news express to talk shows, from the interview of a magnate to a certain sports ceremony. In additional, one can gain a sight of how the president of his country deals with the diplomatic problems with other countries. Without video, it is hard for us to get such accurate information.

Furthermore, with the help of video, we can easily present our once wonderful moments, which can not well expressed and contained by any written forms. For example, as everyone desires to record and memorize his/her important events like a birthday party or a wedding ceremony, undoubtedly, video camera can achieve this and it can accurately record the details of the whole party as one wishes. The happiness conveyed by video is more vivid and direct, and video is a indispensable way and resource to entertainment

However, video camera can never replace the great role of written forms in deeply understanding, further explanation and more accurate analysis. In the first place, in some certain and special conditions, authority can be strengthened only through written documentation. And the most compelling example is the regulatory and complement of the laws. In no country is law represented by video camera, because law written on paper is more powerful while video as documentation is much more associated with entertainment and informality.

In the second place, without written documentation, which are conducive to explain further and hidden meanings of the video, video is useless or of little importance in many cases. A proper example related to this point involves the use of multimedia in education. In education, there is a increase in using the multimedia as an ancillary facility. Since the multimedia provides a more direct and vivid picture of such conditions like the movement of an atom or molecule. However, although the multimedia is nearly used in teaching classes, the importance of book is never be ignored or denied. Moreover, through a series of videos returned by manmade satellites from outer space, one can hardly obtain some useful information. Only after these videos are analyzed and noted by gastronomists can we actually find out this conveyed information. Thus, videos are insufficient to explain the conditions of certain entities.

To sum up, even though video plays an increasingly important role in contemporary life, mostly as a form of entertainment, it can not replace written forms when takes a deeper explanation of some scientific achievements and the function of assure the authority of laws into consideration.