0910G【Try Best】第二小组 issue99 by 许浩杰

许浩杰UID: 2644623

Topic issue 99: In any realm of life---whether academic, social, business, or political----the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simpler, more immediate options.

What is the only way to succeed in any realm of life---whether academic, social, business, or political? The speaker asserts that pragmatic ideas and behaviors lead everyone to the road. To this point of view, I agree with reserve; however, the speaker over simples the relationship between the pragmatism and idealism, he/she omelets that they are the two sides of doing everything, that is,
idealism determines pragmatism, in turn, pragmatism affects idealism, as a result, pragmatism will always regulate the outline of idealism . They are developing with time going past, at least, they are not opposite with each other.

When a problem encounters us, the first reaction is how to solve it; admittedly, it seems that it is a pragmatic reaction, not idealistic one. Is that true?
Certainly not. If we don not have any idealistic ideas, what solution we will choose to solve the question; it means the idealistic goal is just like a target, the only thing we have to do is how to shoot it, it follows that the idealistic goal we set in our mind is the termination of all our pragmatic reaction struggling for. Moreover, without idealistic ideas, what the word --romantic-- means. Is it barely means that we human beings behave just like animals, that is, the only purpose that a man falls in love with a woman is to have off springs, just for developing their genes?

In the other hand, supposed that we only have idealistic ideas full of our minds, the world will be consisted of deranged men and women, and namely, all the men and women will see and conduct things as what we are not as they are. In that situation the people are the bland due to their ideal world; in fact, their world is not real. Without pragmatic ideas, they don not know which is right and wrong because they simply lose their criteria. Consider idealists such as America's founders, Mahatma Gandhi, or Martin Luther King. Had these idealists concerned themselves with their conscious world of their nations rather than with their pragmatic actions of an ideal society, the United States and India might still be British colonies, and African Americans might still be relegated to the backs of buses.

In conclusion, for pragmatic behaviors, the ideal ideas play a vital role; yet pragmatic ideas also serves as an important catalyst for ideal behaviors.

seraphy1986UID: 2629743

What is the only way to succeed in any realm of life---whether academic, social, business, or political? （Which is the only way to succeed in any realm of life---whether accademic, social, business or political ,practical or idealitic behavior? 这样改是不是好些？）The speaker asserts that pragmatic ideas and behaviors lead everyone to the road(the succeeding road). To this point of view, I agree with reserve; (；改成句号)however, the speaker over simples（oversimplified） the relationship between the pragmatism and idealism,（逗号改成句号） he/she omelets(你是不是想用omit，忽略一词？) that they are the two sides of doing everything, that is, idealism determines pragmatism, in turn, pragmatism affects idealism, as a result, pragmatism will always regulate the outline of idealism . They are developing with time going past(去掉past), at least, they are not opposite with each other.
When a problem encounters us（改成when we encounter a problem）, the first reaction is how to solve it;（；改成句号） admittedly, it seems that it is a pragmatic reaction, not(an) idealistic one. Is that true?
Certainly not. If we don not have any idealistic ideas, what solution we will choose to solve the question;（改成what solution will we choose to solve the problem?） it means the idealistic goal is just like a target, （and）the only thing we have to do is how to shoot it, it follows that the idealistic goal we set in our mind is the termination of all our pragmatic reaction struggling for. Moreover, without idealistic ideas, what the word --romantic-- means. Is it barely means that we human beings behave just like animals, that is, the only purpose that a man falls in love with a woman is to have off springs, just for developing their genes? （我们对一个问题做出的反应，以及对浪漫一词的解释对理想和现实的关系来说理似乎很牵强，说理不太具有说服力）In the other hand, supposed that we only have idealistic ideas full of our minds, the world will be consisted of deranged men and women, and namely, all the men and women will see and conduct things as what we are not as they are. In that situation the people are the bland due to their ideal world（; in fact, their world去掉改成which）is not real. Without pragmatic ideas, they don not know which is right and wrong because they simply lose their criteria. Consider idealists such as America's founders, Mahatma Gandhi, or Martin Luther King. Had these idealists concerned themselves with their conscious world of their nations rather than with their pragmatic actions of an ideal society, the United States and India might still be British colonies, and African Americans might still be relegated to the backs of buses. （这两个例子很好，但不是用来支持你这段的论点的，甚至有背道相驰的感觉）
In conclusion, for pragmatic behaviors, the ideal ideas play a vital role; yet pragmatic ideas also serves as an important catalyst for ideal behaviors.

看了许同学的文章，我觉得可能论点需要再提炼，然后才好展开说理,结构和逻辑才能更清晰。
语言还行，哦，注意你的断句。
另外字数上有些少了。
以上拙见，仅供参考。

许浩杰UID: 2644623

2# seraphy1986
的确是啊，谢谢你的点评。。。。