0910G【Try Best】第二小组 argument173 by bittnt

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT173 - The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."
WORDS: 346          TIME: 00:40:03          DATE: 2009-5-30 19:41:19

The author claims that Newsbeat Company should decrease their emphasis on international news and avoid displaying such stories on their magazine covers, and providing some evidences to prove it. The argument is well presented, however the fake of reasoning is also clear.

Firstly, it's said that the international news stories covered magazines have a poor selling over the past three years. By using this evidence, the author wants to prove that the cause of selling poor is that the international news stories covered the magazines. However, that will be true under the condition that customer will choose the magazines only considering the covered stories of it. But the assumption doesn't significantly exist, since there is clearly that many factors will affect the customer rather than only considering the covered stories.

Secondly, the author argue that the Newsbeat company should descrease the number of cover international stories since the competing company have done that. But the argument doesn't tell why the competing company does. That is to say, the cover international stories may not affact their selling. And they does so may because that they have other problem. In addition, the author assumes that the situations of the two companies are the same, and the competing one does the right. But it is obviously may not true.

Thirdly, the author claims that the cost of maintaining the bureaus to report on international news is increasing, but doesn't serve the fully information about the Newsbeat company. The cost of the maintaining the bureaus may not burden the company. The author assumes that the increasing cost affects the company a lot, and it still not benefit from the cost. However, it is not true to ignore the evaluation on the role of international news. If the international news play a important roles in the magazine, the cost are necessary.

In sum, the author can not conclude the cut down the percent of the international news and refrain it from displaying such stories in the magazine, since the argument suffered from ungrounded evidence, fake reasoning and ignorance of the fact.

CharlesHuUID: 2638360

The author claims that Newsbeat Company should decrease their emphasis on international news and avoid displaying such stories on their magazine covers, and providing some evidences to prove it（我看了很多范文都简要的介绍一下argument的line of reasoning，为后来铺垫，这里如果也这样做可能更好）. The argument is well presented, however the fake of reasoning is also clear.

Firstly, it's said that the international news stories covered magazines featured international news stories on their front covers have a poor selling over the past three years. By using this evidence, the author wants to prove that the cause of selling poor is that the international news stories covered （用词值得商榷，我不确定是否正确） the magazines. However, that will be true under the condition that customer will choose the magazines only considering the covered stories of it. But the assumption doesn't significantly exist, since there isare clearly that many factors that will affect the customers’ purchasing rather than only considering the coveredthe cover stories.

Secondly, the author argued that the Newsbeat company should descrease the number of cover international cover stories since the competing companiesy have done that. But the argument doesn't tell why the competing companiesy does this. That is to say, the cover international stories may not affactaffect their selling. And they didoes so may because that they have other problem. In addition, the author assumes that the situations of the two companies are the same, and the competing one does the right. But it is obviously may not true.

Thirdly, the author claims that the cost of maintaining the bureaus to report on international news is increasing, but doesn't serve the fully information about the Newsbeat company. The cost of the maintaining the bureaus may not burden the company. The author assumes that the increasing cost affects the company a lot, and it still not benefit from the cost. However, it is not true to ignore the evaluation on the role of international news. If the international news play aan important roles in the magazine, the costs are necessary.

In sum, the author can not conclude the cutting down the percent of the international news and refraining it from displaying such stories in the magazine, since the argument suffered from ungrounded evidence, fake reasoning and ignorance of the fact.

全面的找出了漏洞，并准确的表达出来了。文字还要多商榷，注意避免低级错误。
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I'm sorry, 字体还是没调好，复制到word看吧