Issue13 =So What=小组第2次作业 by 2006201652

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2006201652UID: 2496703

ISSUE13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
WORDS: 486          TIME: 00:58:41          DATE: 5/31/2009 4:33:26 PM


提纲：
论点：同意lesser-known language 正在消失，但是不仅仅会死政府的责任，全社会的责任。
1. 描述现象，语言的消失。
2. 一个universal 语言是必须的。举例商业。
3. 但是政府应该财务措施保护语言，吧他作为official language。
4. 不仅政府，每个人都要努力，在日常生活工作中尽量说本国语。
结论：政府个人一起努力。

2006201652UID: 2496703

Many of the lesser-known languages in our world are faced with the danger of being extinct because a decreasing number of people speak them. Does the government should take measures to prevent them from being extinguished as the speaker's assertion? As far as I am concerned, it is not only the government's obligation to protect them but all of the citizen's responsibility.

As the high developed technology significantly changed people's lifestyle and the ever-increasing globalization, it is inevitably and desirable to have a universal language to cope with the growing number of commercial affairs. Yet, this sort of revolution just invites risk and danger to many native languages which are possessed a relatively small population. Some measures should be taken.

On the one hand, this changing situation in language is needed and necessary in many fields. In the area of business, which serves as a compelling example, there is an increasing number of multi-national companies and business. So, there should be a language as common criteria that can be employed by all of the negotiators in different parts of the world, because so many languages are there in our world and it is sure to cause conflict and difficulty with dealing. And, this universal language permeates in every aspect in our life, thus lead to risk of our dialect.

However, on the other hand, as language is a great and unique respect for any culture, the authority should take steps to protect their language to prevent it from being extinct. If a language is extinguished from a nation, then, it will be a great flaw of a culture, a sad extinction of a heritage, and, a decline of the identity of the civilians of this nation. So, the government, which is the leader of the whole society and its people, should make its uttermost to save their extinct language. For example, regard their own language as official language, and courage its citizens to speak the vernacular.

What is more, it is not only should our government take up this responsibility but every individual, such as socialists, linguists, and even philosophers, should do their most. As people live in a same society and share a same culture, they should have recognized the uniqueness and difference of their language which precisely represent their distinct culture. And it will make sense that speak their own language on daily life and daily work when cope with domestic affairs, and use universal language when deal with business with multi-national enterprise.

To sum up, it is possible that the ever-increasing developed globalization will eventually efface the lesser-known language, thus, it is the government along with its individuals to protect their distinct vernacular and to prevent it from being extinguished. The best solution is pay attention to the existence of their native language as well as learns the universal language to have a further development of their economy and policy.

(5/31/2009 4:33:26 PM)

mqi07UID: 2521740

Many of the lesser-known languages in our world are faced with the danger of being extinct because a decreasing number of people speak them. Does the government should take measures to prevent them from being extinguished as the speaker's assertion? As far as I am concerned, it is not only the government's obligation to protect them but all of the citizen's responsibility.

As the high developed technology significantly changed people's lifestyle and the ever-increasing globalization, it is inevitably(e) and desirable to have a universal language to cope with the growing number of commercial affairs. Yet, this sort of revolution just invites risk and danger to many native languages which are possessed(呃，:O ，被动？？？belong to吧) a relatively small population. Some measures should be taken.

On the one hand, this changing situation in language is needed and necessary in many fields. In the area of business, which serves as a compelling（学习好词） example, there is an increasing number of multi-national companies and business. So, there should be a language as common criteria（语言做通用标准？？？我怎么觉着这块用carrier更好呢？）can be employed by all of the negotiators in different parts of the world, because so many languages are there in our world and it is sure to cause conflict and difficulty with dealing（没明白？？？it 指什么？后半句是什么意思？And, this universal language permeates in every aspect in our life, thus  (it)readto risk of our dialect.

However, on the other hand, as language is a great and unique respect for any culture, the authority should take steps to protect their language to prevent it from being extinct. If a language is extinguished from a nation, then, it will be a great flaw of a culture, a sad extinction of a heritage, and, a decline of the identity of the civilians of this nation. So, the government, which is the leader of the whole society and its people, should make its uttermost to save their extinct language. For example, regard their own language as official language, and courage its citizens to speak the vernacular.

What is more, it is not only should(什么结构？？？)ur government take up this responsibility but every individual, such as socialists, linguists, and even philosophers, should do their most. As people live in a same society and share a same culture, they should have recognized the uniqueness and difference of their language which precisely represent their distinct culture. And it will make sense that speak their own language on daily life and daily work when cope with domestic affairs, and use universal language when deal with business with multi-national enterprise.

To sum up, it is possible that the ever-increasing developed globalization will eventually efface the lesser-known language, thus, it is the government along with its individuals to protect their distinct vernacular and to prevent it from being extinguished. The best solution is pay attention to the existence of their native language as well as learns the universal language to have a further development of their economy and policy.

很流畅，整体的思路挺顺的，我觉得这是我们这些初写这最难过的一关，赞一个 蓝色的是好的句子
但我感觉有的地方似乎展开不够，反正比我的好多了，学习学习哈！
ps 真是不好意思，我进展的太慢了，才给来看你的，也才把自己的传上来，道个歉了，在此！

robotwishUID: 2550184

Many of the lesser-known languages in our world are faced with the danger of being extinct because a decreasing number of people speak them(这句的意思是一个正在下降的人口数目说他们，改为people who speak). Does the government should（should the government） take measures to prevent them from being extinguished as the speaker's assertion? As far as I am concerned, it is not only the government's obligation to protect them but all of
（all）the citizen's
（citizens’） responsibility.（我觉得有点偏题了，你把这个论题扩大了（这个问题暂且提出来，待讨论））

As the high developed technology significantly changed people's lifestyle and the ever-increasing globalization(曾经增长的先进的全球化？), it is inevitably and desirable to have（是否换个别的更好） a universal language to cope with the growing number of commercial affairs. Yet, this sort of revolution just invites risk and danger to many native languages which are possessed（of ）a relatively small population（语言拥有人口？）. Some measures should be taken.

On the one hand, this changing situation in language is needed and necessary in many fields. In the area of business, which serves as a compelling example, there is an increasing number of multi-national companies and business. So, there should be a language as （a？不确定criteria可数不可数） common criteria that can be employed by all of the negotiators in different parts of the world, because so many languages are there in our world and it is sure to cause conflict and difficulty（斗争和困难？） with dealing. And, this universal language permeates in every aspect in our life, thus lead to risk of our dialect.（觉得这两段说的是经济全球化呼吁了一种世界通用语言的诞生，这种语言可以避免国际交流，商务间的冲突，不过感觉没有论证清楚lesser-known languages 消亡的过程，这个前后关系有些突然，全球的语言是在怎么导致本国语言的消亡的，，，还有就是你上面用的是native languages 和 our dialect 以及下面的vernacular，都不准确，不是our，是countries in which these languages are spoken，可能你破题有些失误，把濒临灭绝的语言扩大为本国的语言了）

However, on the other hand, as （缺冠词） language is a great and unique respect for any culture, the authority should take steps to protect their language to prevent it from being extinct. If a language is extinguished from a nation, then, it will be a great flaw of a culture, a sad extinction of a heritage, and, a decline of the identity of the civilians of this nation.（这个可以换一下用别的介词，这样有点像绕口令，我经常也有这样用的想法，另外，这个我读不懂，国家民众身份的衰退？） So, the government, which is the leader of the whole society and its people, should make its uttermost to save their extinct language. For example, regard their own language as official language, and courage its citizens to speak the vernacular. （没有主语，祈使句？貌似不是太合适）

What is more, it is not only should our government take up this responsibility but （also可省略吗？）every individual, such as socialists, linguists, and even philosophers, should do their most. As people live in a same society and share a same culture, they should have recognized the uniqueness and difference of their language which precisely represent their distinct culture. And it will make sense that speak their own language on daily life and daily work when (they) cope with domestic affairs, and use universal language when deal with business with multi-national enterprise.

To sum up, it is possible that the ever-increasing developed globalization will eventually efface the lesser-known language(s), thus, it is the government along with its individuals to protect their distinct vernacular and to prevent it from being extinguished. The best solution is pay attention to the existence of their native language as well as learns the universal language to have a further development of their economy and policy.

1总结：首先，语言上我就不多说了，不客气的说我们半斤对八两，哈哈，都需努力，我改的地方有些都有待确认，我都标了问号了
2在文章的整体论证的结构上，作者的思路就是既要发展国际语言又要保持本国语言的中立的观点，原因说的都在理，不过不深刻，基本表达了提纲的意思，然而破题有所失误，在上面也都说过了，，具体我建议你看一下https://bbs.gter.net/thread-957526-1-1.html 从头到尾的认真地读一遍再来看你写的文章，肯定会有很多启发的 ，从破题到思路的开拓以及素材的查找