0910G【Try Best】第二小组 argument173 by tianshi02

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The publisher of a news magazine concludes that they need to put less emphasis on international news and avoid displaying such stories on their magazine covers. However, the three reasons he mentioned don’t quite support his/her argument.

Firstly, the fact that the magazines with international news on the front cover have poorest sale does not immediately imply that it is the front cover international news that leads to the bad sale.Many other relevant factors are involved, such as the cover design, the wording of the headlines, the inside stories. To what degree does the front cover internationalnews contribute to the bad sale? This is the question that needs to be answered before the conclusion can be drawn. Even if the fronts cover international news is the culprit of the problem, it might be a different story after three years.Perhaps, the economic crisis transferred the people’s common attention to domestic news. In all, the continuity of the sale condition cannot be assumed unless pertinent information and analyses are shown.

Secondly, there is no good reason to follow the rivals’ action to limit the international news stories on the front cover.Different companies have different focuses, styles, and sale strategies,depending on the quality, financial condition and leadership of the companies.Thus, it is presumptuous to say that the dramatic cut in the international newson the front cover of other magazine companies is advisable for the arguer’scompany.

Last but not least, the rise in the cost tomaintain foreign bureaus should not be a killing factor for international news on the cover. To determine whether or not to decrease international news stories on the cover, the demand of the customers is certainly the primary factor to be considered, regardless of the cost. Suppose the demand is also on the rise, and to a larger extent that the rise of the cost, the arguer might have to reconsider the pros and cons before making a stronger argument.

To sum up, the reasons the arguer gave are not convincing and the argument is flawed in many respects. The arguer fails to see other factors than the international news stories that affect the sale as well as blindly favors the actions taken by other companies. In order to strengthen the argument, the arguer also needs to further analyze whether the international news is worth the increasing cost the maintain the foreign bureaus.

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1# tianshi02
The publisher of a(the) news magazine concludes that they need to put less emphasis on international news and avoid displaying such stories on their magazine covers. However, the three reasons he mentioned don’t quite support his/her argument(我觉得argu的第一段中，能不能稍微丰满一点，我觉得这样开头太干瘪了).

Firstly, the fact that the magazines with international news on the front cover have poorest sale does not immediately imply that it is the front cover international news that leads to the bad sale.Many other relevant factors are involved, such as the cover design, the wording of the headlines, the inside stories. To what degree does the front cover internationalnews contribute to the bad sale? This is the question that needs to be answered before the conclusion can be drawn. Even if the fronts cover international news is the culprit of the problem, it might be a different story after three years.Perhaps, the economic crisis transferred the people’s common attention to domestic news. In all, the continuity of the sale condition cannot be assumed unless pertinent information and analyses are shown.

Secondly, there is no good（convincing） reason to follow the rivals’ action to limit the international news stories on the front cover.Different companies have different focuses, styles, and sale strategies,depending on the quality, financial condition and leadership of the companies.Thus, it is presumptuous to say that the dramatic cut in the international newson the front cover of other magazine companies is advisable for the arguer’scompany.

Last but not least, the rise in the cost tomaintain foreign bureaus should not be a killing factor for international news on the cover. To determine whether or not to decrease international news stories on the cover, the demand of the customers is certainly the primary factor to be considered, regardless of the cost. Suppose the demand is also on the rise, and to a larger extent that the rise of the cost, the arguer might have to reconsider the pros and cons before making a stronger argument.

To sum up, the reasons the arguer gave are not convincing and the argument is flawed in many respects. The arguer fails to see other factors than the international news stories that affect the sale as well as blindly favors the actions taken by other companies. In order to strengthen the argument, the arguer also needs to further analyze whether the international news is worth the increasing cost the maintain the foreign bureaus.

我感觉问题说清楚了，行文比较流畅，就是句子是不是该有血有肉点？不过这也是我该考虑的问题：究竟ARGU句子是不是也要好看点？我正在寻找答案，限于我的水平，呵呵，只能评成这样，请见谅。

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