Issue13 =So What=小组第二次作业 by robotwish

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:L 连跟着版主们的同主题贴的顺序看下来加上列提纲到完成习作，大概用了2+1+3=6个小时，，观点很多照搬，整篇文章等于在翻译

这次作业迟交，借口我也不找了，分必须扣
同组的2006同学见谅，argument中午补上，先睡会觉

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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

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TS: lesser-known languages 的消亡是不可避免的，出于自己的利益、文化的传承与全世界人类的长远发展，The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.
1.        the reasons why the lesser-known languages are being lost
1）        全球化，落后地区要融入全球化，首先就要开放，要与外界沟通，这样就耗费了大部分精力。语言是沟通的最便利、最主要的工具
2）随着通用语言传播力度的加强，特别是以通用语为依托的新传播手段，如广播、电视、网络、移动通讯等日益深入普通人的日常生活。土著语言的交流功能将陆续减弱，甚至在同族群中出现了通用语替代母语的结果，从而加速了母语的消亡。
2. the importance of languages
a)        人类的文明发展至今，与生物界一样，构成一种多样化、差别性生态。文化多样化与语言多样化，与生物物种多样化一样，是人类文明生态的宝贵财富。
b)        维护文化的多样性，离不开维护语言的多样性。因为语言是文化的重要组成部分，是文化的最为重要的载体与根基，故事、神话、传说、寓言、诗歌、唱词、谜语、戏剧等各类文艺作品都依靠语言来表达。
c)        一种语言就是一种思维方式的直接体现。以一种语言表达和记载的天文、地理、几何以及世界观、人生观思想，包含着该语言使用者对客观世界的认知体系
3.        what can the governments can get or what can the society and people be benefit from the protections of the languages
1)        个人：可以领悟不同文化，丰富自己云云，虽然分散了一部     分的精力，
2)        政府：促进经济全球化并不是要抑制民族文化的传承，接着对应2-2，反而有价值的文化精神财富可以给民族的壮大，整个民族所在国家的壮大带来帮助

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Marie Smith Jones, the last people who spoken the Eyak language, died in 2008 in Alaska,which announced that the languages were completely extinct. Before that, Gaelg, Abdzakh and so on had been lost. A survey from UNESCO(United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization) showed that more than two hundred languages which were lesser-used had been disappeared from the earth. To make things worse, the member from UNESCO alerted that there have been about 2500 sorts of languages facing the fate of vanishing. Based on the data, I agree with the statement that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. Following this further, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct for the reasons including the protection of culture, the benefits for their people and countries and even global developments.
      

Firstly, now in the age of globalization, more and more communications happen between different countries, consisted of culture, economics, etc. Strong civilizations influence vulnerable ones inevitably leading to the loss of cultural and political resources. The languages in the vulnerable groups, as the most easy-impacted form of civilization, are lost with a high speed. There is a need for the peoples in backward regions to learn a language to exchange with others from countries all over the world. So they do not have enough time to study their own languages. When the instruments for transferring information, such as TV, Internet, audio and so on, are widely used in their daily life, they will have little time to study and make use of their own languages. Therefore, the lesser-used languages disappear gradually.

Secondly, a language is a significant portion of culture. It expresses meanings of stories, myths, legends, fables, poetry, lyrics, riddles, drama and etc. It is the carrier and the foundation of culture. Like the biological diversity, culture, or said a language, also has its diversity. When the languages vanish, we will lose our precious fortune which provides us comparisons to distinguish and improve our culture, and inspiration and creativity. Besides, a language is a direct manifestation of the way we think. Astronomy, geography, geometry, and the world and life thinking, which is based on the manifestation and records of languages, includes the language user's cognitive system of the objective world.

Finally, what can the governments get or what can the society and people be benefit from the protections of the languages? As a person of a people which has a disappearing language, the more time he/she studies his/her native language, the less time and energy he/she learns other languages to fill the need of his/her people's development, but he can be full of two or more different kinds or styles of culture which they can be benefit from; as a government which has such peoples, it do not need to limit the transferring of vulnerable civilizations in order to adapt to the globalization. However, the governments can strong these peoples through disseminating their unique and valued culture which even can make its country stronger and richer.

To sum up, preserving a dangerous language is , admittedly, a worthy goal. It can maintain the diversity of the culture in the world and the languages can express people' minds no matter whether their group or people is small or big, backward or developed. Further more, the governments should act to prevent these languages extinct, devoting their  time and resources elsewhere, and leaving their people themselves all to take participate in.

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Marie Smith Jones, the last people(person) who spoken the Eyak language, died in 2008 in Alaska, which announced that the languages were completely extinct.（？） Before that, Gaelg, Abdzakh and so on had been lost. A survey from UNESCO(United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization) showed that more than two hundred languages which were lesser-used had been disappeared from the earth. To make things worse, the member from UNESCO alerted that there have been about 2500 sorts of languages facing the fate of vanishing. Based on the data, I agree with the statement that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. Following this further, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct for the reasons including the protection of culture, the benefits for their people and countries and even global developments.(新颖，很好的开头。不过有点长…远超过其他任何段落，可以直接用survey开头)

Firstly, now in the age of globalization, more and more communications happen between different countries（中式英语，改）, consisted of culture, economics, etc. Strong civilizations influence vulnerable ones inevitably leading to the loss of cultural and political resources（不懂.. ）. The languages in the vulnerable groups, as the most easy-impacted form of civilization, are lost with a high speed. There is a need for the peoples（？） in backward regions to learn a language to exchange with others from countries all over the world. So they do not have enough time to study their own languages. When the instruments for transferring information, such as TV, Internet, audio and so on, are widely used in their daily life, they will have little time to study and make use of their own languages.（感觉例子后半句牵强，little-less） Therefore, the lesser-used languages disappear gradually.

Secondly, a language is a significant portion of culture. It expresses meanings of stories, myths, legends, fables, poetry, lyrics, riddles, drama and etc. （Thus，）It is the carrier and the foundation of culture. Like the biological diversity, culture, or said a language, also has its diversity. When the languages vanish, we will lose our precious fortune which provides us comparisons to distinguish and improve our culture, and inspiration and creativity. Besides, a language is a direct manifestation of the way we think. Astronomy, geography, geometry, and the world and life thinking, which is(are) based on the manifestation and records of languages, includes the language user's cognitive system of the objective world.

Finally, what can the governments get or what can the society and people be benefit from the protections of the languages? As a person of a people which has a disappearing language, the more time he/she studies his/her native language, the less time and energy he/she learns other languages to fill the need of his/her people's development(自身发展的意思吗?), but he can be full of two or more different kinds or styles of culture which they can be benefit from; as a government which has such peoples, it do not need to limit the transferring of vulnerable civilizations in order to adapt to the globalization. However, the governments can strong these peoples through disseminating their unique and valued culture which even can make its country stronger and richer.(没有读懂...)

To sum up, preserving a dangerous language is , admittedly, a worthy goal. It can maintain the diversity of the culture in the world and the languages can express people' minds no matter whether their group or people is small or big, backward or developed. Further more, the governments should act to prevent these languages extinct, devoting their  time and resources elsewhere, and leaving their people themselves all to take participate in.（最后一句，语法有问题）

1. 开头不错，在简洁些更好！ 文章（是说主体哦）第一段说语言消失现象的必然性，二段写英语重要性，三段写从保护语言中得到的benifits（理解有限，没有怎么读懂:dizzy: ），感觉有写跑题，是不是该论述政府是不是该保护语言呢？有待讨论。总之，文章论述水平很高，很深，也许我提出错误不理解的地方作者有异议，讨论的时候提出来吧。
2.灰色建议修改的地方，橙色有待讨论。
3.文章感觉有不少chinenglish的地方，这个咱们有的一拼，呵呵。我也不知道该怎么办，讨论一下吧。

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Marie Smith Jones, the last people who spoken（拼写错误，spoke） the Eyak language, died in 2008 in Alaska,which announced that the languages were completely extinct. Before that, Gaelg, Abdzakh and so on had been lost（wow，你的见识这么广博啊，赞一下。审作文的专家恐怕也要自惭形秽了）. A survey from UNESCO(United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization) showed that more than two hundred languages which were lesser-used had been disappeared from the earth. To make things worse, the member from UNESCO alerted that there have been about 2500 sorts of languages facing the fate of vanishing.（虽然开头很吸引人，但是可以稍微简洁一点） Based on the data, I agree with the statement that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. Following this further（不确定，但是google了一下，发现这是你发明的，虽然很赞赏你的创意……）, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct for the reasons including the protection of culture, the benefits for their people and countries and even global developments.        Firstly, now in the age of globalization, more and more communications happen between different countries, consisted of culture, economics, etc. Strong civilizations influence vulnerable ones inevitably leading to the loss of cultural and political resources（这个长句有点confusing）. The languages in the vulnerable groups, as the most easy-impacted form of civilization, are lost with a high speed. There is a need for the peoples in backward regions to learn a language to exchange with others from countries all over the world. So they do not have enough time to study their own languages. When the instruments for transferring（个人感觉transmit更恰当） information, such as TV, Internet, audio and so on, are widely used in their daily life, they will have little time to study and make use of their own languages. Therefore, the lesser-used languages disappear gradually. Secondly, a language is a significant portion of culture. It expresses meanings of stories, myths, legends, fables, poetry, lyrics, riddles, drama and etc. It is the carrier and the foundation of culture. Like the biological diversity, culture, or said a language（这是什么用法o(╯□╰)o）, also has its diversity. When the languages vanish, we will lose our precious fortune which provides us comparisons to distinguish and improve our culture, and inspiration and creativity. Besides, a language is a direct manifestation of the way we think. Astronomy, geography, geometry, and the world and life thinking, which is based on the manifestation and records of languages, includes the language user's cognitive system of the objective world. Finally, what can the governments get or what can the society and people be benefit from（此处有误） the protections of the languages? As a person of a people which has a disappearing language, the more time he/she studies his/her native language, the less time and energy he/she learns other languages to fill the need of his/her people's development, but he can be full of two or more different kinds or styles of culture which they can be benefit from; as a government which has such peoples, it do not 语法错误need to limit the transferring of vulnerable civilizations in order to adapt to the globalization. However, the governments can strong these peoples through disseminating their unique and valued culture which even can make its country stronger and richer. To sum up, preserving a dangerous language is , admittedly, a worthy goal. It can maintain the diversity of the culture in the world and the languages can express people' minds no matter whether their group or people is small or big, backward or developed. Further more, the governments should act to prevent these languages extinct此处语法错误, devoting their  time and resources elsewhere, and leaving their people themselves all to take participate in（费解take participate in what？）. 1 总体水平很高，不过有不少地方令人费解。 2 至于句型，不一定都搞成长句，看得我眼冒金花啊（这好像经验贴也提到）。要长短结合，多变化才好。你的主要是定语从句。 3至于你用到很多high-level words，确实它们的正确用法和正真含义我不清楚，不做评价。但是友情提示：小亮好像说过有时候用得不好会显得造作。 4 还有一点，不要在开头段展开论述或加入论据（韦晓亮，第二版，p23）。

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Marie Smith Jones, the last people(person) who spoke(n) the Eyak language, died in 2008 in Alaska,which announced that the languages were(this language was) completely extinct. Before that, Gaelg, Abdzakh and so on(some others是否更好) had been lost. A survey from UNESCO(United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization) showed that more than two hundred languages which were lesser-used had been disappeared from the earth. To make things worse, the member from UNESCO alerted that there have been about 2500 sorts of languages facing the fate of vanishing. Based on the data, I agree with the statement that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. Following this further, the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct for the reasons including the protection of culture, the benefits for their people and countries and even global developments.
      

Firstly, now in the age of globalization, more and more communications happen between different countries（不确定happen是否合适???   但我觉得 用被动 are made 似乎更保险）, consisted of culture, economics, etc. Strong civilizations influence vulnerable ones inevitably leading to the loss of cultural and political resources（两点:第一，从这段主题句来讲，我觉得influence做状语，而lead做谓语比较好；第二，这个逻辑不对，论证力度显然没有达到你的本意，仅仅是influence就能inevitably导致文化流失？太牵强了，你可以，要么把前面加重，要么后面别写那么绝对。）. The languages in（是要表示属于吧？of更准） the vulnerable groups, as the most easy（easily 好像合成形容词都是这么组成的，你是查的材料还是自己想的？）-impacted form of civilization, are lost with a high speed. There is a need for the peoples in backward regions to learn a language（既然都是说和外国人交往，那就应该是 official/common language） to exchange （加个information是否更通顺）with others from countries all over the world. So they do not have enough time to study their own languages（你这句是个小结论，但和段末的结论一样了。就是说，这句话后面的也是这句话的论据，所以可以去掉此句，然后在中间加个连词，就和下一句并列做论据）. When the instruments（用means 表方式 ，手段。 抽象具体的都适合。但instrument,指仪器，乐器。而且你后面马上跟了 internet,用instrument就更不对了） for transferring information, such as TV, Internet, audio and so on, are widely used in their daily life, they will have little time to study and make use of their own languages. Therefore, the lesser-used languages disappear gradually.

Secondly, a language is a significant portion of culture. It expresses meanings of stories, myths, legends, fables, poetry, lyrics, riddles, drama and etc. It is the carrier and the foundation（两词位置换一下更好吧） of culture. Like the biological diversity, culture, or said a language（???）, also has its diversity. When the languages vanish, we will lose our precious fortune which provides us (加个with。只见过 provide sb with sth)comparisons to distinguish and improve our culture, (and去掉更好) inspiration and creativity. Besides, a language is a direct manifestation of the way we think. [Astronomy, geography, geometry, and the world and life thinking（什么意思???）, which is(are) based on the manifestation and records of languages, includes the language user's cognitive system of the objective world.](对最后这句分析主谓宾：基于...的学科和... , 包括了...系统。而且和你上句话没承接好，讨论时在具体谈吧，这块我想说的挺多???)

Finally, what can the governments get or what can the society and people（ be )benefit是动词 benefit from the protections of the languages? As a person of a people which has a disappearing language, the more time he/she studies his/her native language, the less time and energy he/she learns other languages to fill the need of his/her people's development, but he can be full of two or more different kinds or styles of culture which they can （be） benefit from（没懂，弄不清为什么用but???）; as a government which has such peoples, it do not need to limit the transferring of vulnerable civilizations in order to adapt to the globalization. However, the governments can strong（是strengthen吧） these peoples through disseminating their unique and valued culture which even can make its country stronger and richer.

To sum up, preserving a dangerous language is , admittedly, a worthy goal. It can maintain the diversity of the culture in the world and the languages can express people' minds no matter whether their group or people is small or big, backward or developed. Further more, the governments should act to prevent these languages extinct, devoting their  time and resources elsewhere, and leaving their people themselves all to take participate in.

蓝色是好的句子， 但我只挑了好句中的一两个出来
三个问号的是有待讨论的
加强语言吧,我们现在共同的缺点哟