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The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

'Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers.'









The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. The author concluded that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers, according to the poorest-selling magazine featured international news stories on their front cover, the competing news-magazines have decreased the number of cover stories about international news and the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, seems logical.

However, the author failed to consider other possible alternatives to the poorest-selling magazine cover over the three years. Such alternatives may include the fact that there is a financial crisis in the three years, or the selling scope of the magazine is small. It’s possible that the magazine has increase its price so as to fewer people buy the magazine. In addition, the author failed to consider another new magazine which has some new aspects such as sports or cars has captivated the readers. Maybe the citizens where the magazines are sold have a trend to read magazines on Internet. Therefore, the author must focus on these trouble spots to analyze why their magazine is poor selling.

The argument is unacceptable if there is no compelling evidence to support the reason why the competing news-magazines have decreased the number of cover on international news is that the cover leads to the poor selling. The competing news-magazines which have decreased the number of cover on international news may find out the cover about sports news or cars can captivate more readers. Perhaps the competing news-magazines have not so much money to support the international news. It’s possible that after the competing news-magazines decreased the number of cover on international news, the number of the readers also decreased. It’s unwise to decrease the number of cover on international news as the competing news-magazines.

Finally, even if the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, the author can’t conclude that they should decrease their emphasis on international news on their magazine cover. The foreign bureaus may be enlarged to report more kinds of international news and more important information. The foreign countries where the foreign bureaus are may have a heavily financial crisis, so the cost of the foreign bureaus has to increase. There is no support offered to show that the author must decrease the number of covers on international news because of the increasing cost of foreign bureaus.

In conclusion, the argument is neither logically sound nor persuasive. To better bolster and strengthen the argument, the arguer needs to guarantee us that the international news covers is the only reason contribute to the poorest selling and the costs spending on international bureaus is far surpassed beyond their needs. Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal.



第一篇ARGUMENT,刚开始的时候觉得没有逻辑错误,很严谨的思维,但是看过版主发的分析帖子,逐渐开始对argument产生了一些想法
这篇是在看范文和分析的情况下写的,最大的问题还是自己的句型和单词积累不够,不知道这类文章应该用怎样句型。
最后的总结感觉大概都是这么一类写法,所以最后一段是抄袭前人的,作为对总结段的一次学习(以后要靠积累完成)
看来需要多看,多背,多练才能更快提高自己~

大家就大刀阔斧的批吧~批得我鼻青脸肿最好~
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发表于 2009-6-6 21:25:25 |只看该作者
The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. The author concluded that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers, according to the poorest-selling magazine featured international news stories on their front cover, the competing news-magazines have decreased the number of cover stories about international news and the cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, seems logical.开头的结尾处有些仓促。

However, the author failed to consider other possible alternatives to the poorest-selling magazine cover over the three years. Such alternatives may include the fact that there was a financial crisis in the three years, (三年前的事情)or the selling scope of the magazine was small. It’s possible that the magazine has increased its price so as to fewer people buy the magazine. In addition, the author failed to consider (句型重复)another new magazine which has some new aspects such as sports or cars have captivated the readers. Maybe the citizens where the magazines were sold have a trend (prefer/tend) to read magazines on Internet. Therefore, the author must focus on these trouble spots to analyze why their magazine was poor selling.

The argument is unacceptable if there is no compelling evidence to support the reason why the competing news-magazines have decreased the number of cover on international news is that the cover leads to the poor selling. (不错!!!)The competing news-magazines which have decreased the number of cover on international news may find out the cover about sports news or cars can captivate more readers. Perhaps the competing news-magazines have not so much money to support the international news. It’s possible that after the competing news-magazines decreased the number of cover on international news, the number of the readers also decreased. It’s unwise to decrease the number of cover on international news as the competing news-magazines.

Finally, even if the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, the author can’t conclude that they should decrease their emphasis on international news on their magazine cover. The foreign bureaus may be enlarged to report more kinds of international news and more important information. The foreign countries where the foreign bureaus are may have a heavily financial crisis, so the cost of the foreign bureaus has to increase. What’s more, there is no support offered to show that the author must decrease the number of covers on international news because of the increasing cost of foreign bureaus.

In conclusion, the argument is neither logically sound nor persuasive. To better bolster and strengthen the argument, the arguer needs to guarantee us that the international news covers is the only reason contribute to the poorest selling and the costs spending on international bureaus is far surpassed beyond their needs. Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal.

你的argument写得比issues好,分析的比较透彻,但是注意需要用逻辑连接词去进行连接,这样才更加有说理性,同样认为你的逻辑能很好

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