0910G[Try Best]第一小组 argument173 by nlhust

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这么晚才写好，给批改的同学添麻烦了，很抱歉。

TOPIC: ARGUMENT173 - The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."
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In this memo, the author suggests placing less emphasis on international news and refrain from showing such stories on their magazine covers. To support his suggestion, the author points out the fact that their poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those featured with international issues on their front covers. Also, he shows us their competitors' reducing the number of cover stories about international news. He even uses the more cost of reporting international news as an evidence.

It seems that the author takes everything into consideration, but when scrutinizing those evidences, I find that his assumption that international stories lead to the poor-selling is unwarranted, and then he unfairly concludes that reporting such stories is not profitable.

First of all, no evidence is presented to tell us that those international stories are the cause of poor selling. The author tells us that those poorest-selling magazine issues in recent years had international news as their cover stories. But this may be only a coincidence. It is entirely possible that these international news had already been reported a lot by TV or radio program before Newsbeat so that people did not want to pay to read these stories any more. Then the failure of these issues may be the result of wrong choices of the editor. Thus, we can tell that even if Newsbeat pay less attention on international issues, this magazine may also not sell well until the editor is able to choose appropriate stories.

Also, without finding out the reasons why their competitors reduced the number of cover stories about international news, it is not advisable to following such reformation. Maybe editors on other magazine find they know more about other issues than international news. Thus, in order to make the right decision about what should be published, they change to report on other issues they are familiar with.  If Newsbeat's employees know better about international issue, then reporting less international news would be a bad choice.

What's more, the higher cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report on international news does not equal to the less profits of reporting such stories and displaying them on the magazine covers. The high cost of reporting international issues may result from global recession or battles in certain area, for the reason that it would take more to ensure the safety and good living condition of their correspondent. But in these situations, people may want to know more about such news.  Therefore, if Newsbeat pay much to obtain the real attractive international stories and report them timely, people may be more willing to buy these issues. Then, in contrast to the author's suggestion, the more selling might result in more profits.

In a nutshell, the author fails to consider some alternative explanations of these phenomenon, and thus makes his recommendation less convincing. He should analyze more information, deliberate other possibilities and then make a persuasive conclusion. This is also an essential ability a good news reporter should obtain.

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In this memo, the author suggests placing less emphasis on international news and refraining from showing such stories on their magazine covers. To support his suggestion, the author points out the fact that their poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those featured with international issues on their front covers. Also, he shows us their competitors' reducing the number of cover stories about international news(我不太确定这种表达方式对不对). He even uses the more cost of reporting international news as evidence.

It seems that the author takes everything into consideration, but when scrutinizing those evidences, I find that his assumption that international stories lead to the poor-selling is unwarranted, and then he unfairly concludes that reporting such stories is not profitable.

First of all, no evidence is presented to tell us that those international stories are the cause of poor selling. The author tells us that those poorest-selling magazine issues in recent years had international news as their cover stories. But this may be only a coincidence. It is entirely possible that these international news had already been reported a lot by TV or radio program before Newsbeat so that people did not want to pay to read these stories any more. Then the failure of these issues may be the result of wrong choices of the editor. Thus, we can tell that even if Newsbeat pay less attention on international issues, this magazine may also not sell well until the editor is able to choose appropriate stories.（我感觉这一个理由不是很充分，封面新闻导致销量不好，尽管是选择问题，可还是封面新闻，应该现在开头说可能是由于编辑选择的问题，不是新闻本身的问题，我读到中间才发现是想说这个意思）

Also, without finding out the reasons why their competitors reduced the number of cover stories about international news, it is not advisable to following such reformation. Maybe editors on other magazine find they know more about other issues than international news. Thus, in order to make the right decision about what should be published, they change to report on other issues they are familiar with.  If Newsbeat's employees know better about international issue, then reporting less international news would be a bad choice.（不知道其他人换的理由？我认为author的理由是他觉得别的杂志跟他一样是因为销量不好，所以换了，也许销量好了。作者是基于这个推理作为他的理由的，攻击的时候也应该侧重在不知道结果，所以不能认定这个一个好方法）

What's more, the higher cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report on international news does not equal to the less profits of reporting such stories and displaying them on the magazine covers. The high cost of reporting international issues may result from global recession or battles in certain area, for the reason that it would take more to ensure the safety and good living condition of their correspondent. But in these situations, people may want to know more about such news.  Therefore, if Newsbeat pay much to obtain the real attractive international stories and report them timely, people may be more willing to buy these issues. Then, in contrast to the author's suggestion, the more selling might result in more profits.（我认为有点跟你写的第三段矛盾了，但我也太确定怎么自说其话，我看到范文上是攻击别人都不报道所以N报道可能会获利，我认为那个攻击点就挺好）

In a nutshell, the author fails to consider some alternative explanations of these phenomenon, and thus makes his recommendation less convincing. He should analyze more information, deliberate other possibilities and then make a persuasive conclusion. This is also an essential ability a good news reporter should obtain.

我认为整篇文章错误点都找到了，但是攻击的理由不是很充分，有时感觉有些自相矛盾，但文章读起来很通顺。
对于你给我Argument的批评，我接受了，我最近看了很多范文，可能想尽快找到自己的模板，所以套用的比较明显一点了，套用模板确实可以节省时间，但你们很明显就发现这种痕迹，我也觉得这么早就模仿不是个好方法，希望能给大家当个教训，尽量在写出自己风格之后再形成自己的模板。

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In this memo, the author suggests placing less emphasis on international news and refrain from showing such stories on their magazine covers. To support his suggestion, the author points out the fact that their poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those featured with international issues on their front covers. Also, he shows us their competitors' reducing the number of cover stories about international news. He even uses the more cost of reporting 这样表达好像有点别扭international news as an evidence.

It seems that the author takes everything into consideration, but when scrutinizing those evidences, I find that his assumption that international stories lead to the poor-selling is unwarranted, and then he unfairly concludes that reporting such stories is not profitable.

First of all, no evidence is presented to tell us that those international stories are the cause of poor selling. The author tells us that those poorest-selling magazine issues in recent years had international news as their cover stories. But this may be only a coincidence. It is entirely possible that these international news had already been reported a lot by TV or radio program before Newsbeat so that people did not want to pay to read these stories any more. Then the failure of these issues may be the result of wrong choices of the editor. Thus, we can tell that even if Newsbeat pay less attention on international issues, this magazine may also not sell well until the editor is able to choose appropriate stories.编辑的错误和international news做cover之间有什么关系？这和楼主要驳斥的观点似乎不契合。

Also, without finding out the reasons why their competitors reduced the number of cover stories about international news, it is not advisable(wise) to following (follow)such reformation. Maybe editors on other magazine find they know more about other issues than international news. Thus, in order to make the right decision about what should be published, they change to report on other issues they are familiar with.  If Newsbeat's employees know better about international issue, then reporting less international news would be a bad choice.

What's more, the higher cost of maintaining the foreign bureaus to report on international news does not equal to the less profits of reporting such stories and displaying them on the magazine covers. The high cost of reporting international issues may result from global recession or battles in certain area, for the reason that it would take more to ensure the safety and good living condition of their correspondent. But in these situations, people may want to know more about such news.  Therefore, if Newsbeat pay much to obtain (spend a lot in capturing) the real attractive international stories and report them timely, people may be more willing to buy these issues. Then, (Consequently, )in contrast to the author's suggestion, the more selling might result in more profits.

In a nutshell, the author fails to consider some alternative explanations of these phenomenon, and thus makes his recommendation less convincing. He should analyze more information, deliberate other possibilities and then make a persuasive conclusion. This is also an essential ability a good news reporter should obtain.
论述上有些不是很充分。特别是在讲竞争对手减少国际新闻录用为封面的原因时，编辑对题材的熟悉度似乎不是一个合理的理由啊