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The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.
"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing newsmagazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."





As the publisher of the newsmagazine,the writer insists on the decrease of emphasis on international news and refraining from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.He or she cites quite a lot of facts,such as poorest-selling results of those issues featuring international news stories on their front covers, competing newsmagazines'significant decrease of cover stories of international news, and the increasing cost of maintaining foreign reporting bureaus.However,the author has added his or her imagination and subjective presumption in the arguing process.
First, the author has assumed that featuring international news stories on front covers is the only factor and it necessarily caused the poorest-selling situation over the past three years.But there is no support of this assumption.There are many factors other than the kind of the news on front cover related to the situation of sales,including the content and efficiency of the news, the diction of the essay picked into the magazine, and people's mutable interest and economical condition.It may be not the kind of cover stories, international news or domestic news, that does not intrigue the audience, but the dull diction and the obsolete content that diminish their enthusiasm.The author overlooked these factors,some of which are more crucial than the kind of news stories on front cover.
Then, the following fact is even more irrelevant to the author's conclusion. Without telling the result of competing newsmagazines' decrease of international news on cover, citing the action itself does not make any sense. There is no evidence which illustrates that competing companies took this action in order to prevent falling sales caused by international news on front cover.They may have to do this, rather than want to, pressed by the shortage of money to maintain foreign bureaus.Moreover, without any result mentioned, how can we believe that international news on cover does have a negative effect on magazine selling?
To rationalize the author's argument, he or she stressed the fact of the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus. But this helped little,because only considering the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus is one-sided. The rise or falling of cost is controlled by many factors. According to economy theory, the higher demand of salaries promotes the employer raise the price of products, which in return,will bring even higher demand. Inflation will take place if this trend goes on. So the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus may be a micro effect caused by the macro inflation, and the price of magazines may also keep going up to compensate the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus.
This argument fails to be valid because it is based upon several simple facts, yet many subjective assumptions.More persuasive proof should be assembled, instead of false presumptions, to build up this argument.  

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发表于 2009-6-8 23:37:51 |显示全部楼层
As the publisher of the newsmagazine, the writer insists on the decreas(e)ing of emphasis on international news and refraining from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.He or she cites quite a lot of facts,such as poorest-selling results of those issues featuring international news stories on their front covers, competing newsmagazines' significant decrease of cover stories of international news, and the increasing cost of maintaining foreign reporting bureaus. However, the author has added his or her imagination and subjective presumption in the arguing process.
First, the author has assumed that featuring international news stories on front covers is the only factor and it necessarily caused the poorest-selling situation over the past three years.But there is no support of this assumption.There are many other factors than the kind of the news on front cover related to the situation of sales,including the content and efficiency of the news, the diction of the essay picked into the magazine, and people's mutable interest这个我当时就没敢写,如果根据人们的兴趣,那么去掉国际新闻就是对的,人都不感兴趣了,还要买他干嘛,楼主再考虑下 and economical condition.It may be not the kind of cover stories, international news or domestic news, that does not intrigue the audience, but the dull diction and the obsolete content that diminish their enthusiasm.The author overlooked these factors,some of which are more crucial than the kind of news stories on front cover.
Then, the following fact is even more irrelevant to the author's conclusion. Without telling the result of competing newsmagazines' decrease of international news on cover, citing the action itself does not make any sense. There is no evidence which illustrates that competing companies took this action in order to prevent falling sales caused by international news on front cover.They may have to do this, rather than want to, pressed by the shortage of money to maintain foreign bureaus.Moreover, without any result mentioned, how can we believe that international news on cover does have a negative effect on magazine selling?
To rationalize the author's argument, he or she stressed the fact of the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus. But this helped little,because only considering the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus is one-sided. The rise or falling of cost is controlled by many factors. According to economy theory, the higher demand of salaries promotes the employer raise the price of products, which in return,will bring even higher demand. Inflation will take place if this trend goes on. So the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus may be a micro effect caused by the macro inflation, and the price of magazines may also keep going up to compensate the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus.
This argument fails to be valid because it is based upon several simple facts, yet many subjective assumptions.More persuasive proof should be assembled, instead of false presumptions, to build up this argument.  
结构和思路都比较清晰,找的错误点和我的一样,呵呵,希望在小细节上能注意。

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As the publisher of the newsmagazine, the writer insists on the decrease(decreasing我查了都可以) in emphasis on international news and refraining from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.He or she cites quite a lot of facts,such as poorest-selling results of those issues featuring international news stories on their front covers, competing newsmagazines' significant decrease of cover stories of international news, and the increasing cost of maintaining foreign reporting bureaus. However, the author has added his or her imagination and subjective presumption in the arguing process to make the conclusion well-founded, which is obviously not.

First, the author has assumed that featuring international news stories on front covers was the only factor and it necessarily caused the poorest-selling situation over the past three years.But there is no support of this assumption.There are many other factors than the kind of the news on front cover related to the situation of sales,including the content and efficiency of the news, the diction of the essay picked into the magazine, and people's
economical condition.It may be not the kind of cover stories----the international news , that does not intrigue the audience, but the dull diction and the obsolete content that diminish their enthusiasm.The author overlooked these factors,some of which are more crucial than the kind of news stories on front cover.
Then, the following fact is even more irrelevant to the author's conclusion. Without telling the result of competing newsmagazines' decrease of international news on cover, citing the action itself does not make any sense. There is no evidence which illustrates that competing companies took this action in order to prevent falling sales caused by international news on front cover.They may have to do this, rather than want to, pressed by the shortage of money to maintain foreign bureaus.Moreover, without any result mentioned, how can we believe that international news on cover does have a negative effect on magazine selling?
To rationalize the author's argument, he or she stressed the fact of the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus. But this helped little,because only considering the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus is one-sided. The rise or falling of cost is controlled by many factors. According to economy theory, the higher demand of salaries promotes the employer to raise the price of products, which in return,will bring even higher salary demand. Inflation will take place if this trend goes on. So the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus may be a micro effect caused by the inflation in the macro social environment, and the price of magazines may also keep going up to compensate the rising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus.
This argument fails to be valid because it is based upon several simple facts, yet many subjective assumptions.More persuasive proof should be assembled, instead of false presumptions, to build up this argument.  

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发表于 2009-6-9 18:42:34 |显示全部楼层
As the publisher of the newsmagazine,thewriter insists on the decrease of emphasis on international news andrefraining from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.He orshe cites quite a lot of facts,such as poorest-selling results of thoseissues featuring international news stories on their front covers,competing newsmagazines'significant decrease of cover stories ofinternational news, and the increasing cost of maintaining foreignreporting bureaus.However,the author has added his or her imaginationand subjective presumption in the arguing process.

First, the author has assumed thatfeaturing international news stories on front covers is the only factorand it necessarily caused the poorest-selling situation over the pastthree years.But there is no support of this assumption.There are manyfactors other than the kind of the news on front cover related to thesituation of sales,including the content and efficiency of the news,the diction of the essay picked into the magazine, and people's mutableinterest and economical condition.It may be not the kind of coverstories, international news or domestic news, that does not intriguethe audience, but the dull diction and the obsolete content thatdiminish their enthusiasm.The author overlooked these factors,some ofwhich are more crucial than the kind of news stories on front cover.

Then, the following fact is even moreirrelevant to the author's conclusion. Without telling the result ofcompeting newsmagazines' decrease of international news on cover,citing the action itself does not make any sense. There is no evidencewhich illustrates that competing companies took this action in order toprevent falling sales caused by international news on front cover.Theymay have to do this, rather than want to, pressed by the shortage ofmoney to maintain foreign bureaus.Moreover, without any resultmentioned, how can we believe that international news on cover doeshave a negative effect on magazine selling?
To rationalize the author's\the argument, heor she\the arguer stressed the fact of the rising cost of maintaining foreignbureaus. But this helped little,because only considering the risingcost of maintaining foreign bureaus is one-sided. The rise or fallingof cost is controlled by many factors. According to economy\economics theory, thehigher demand of\for salaries promotes\causes the employer to raise the price ofproducts, which in return,will bring even higher demand for higher salary. Inflation willtake place if this trend goes on. So the rising cost of maintainingforeign bureaus may be a micro effect caused by the macro inflation,and the price of magazines may also keep going up to compensate therising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus.
This argument fails to be valid becauseit is based upon several simple facts, yet many subjectiveassumptions.More persuasive proof should be assembled, instead of falsepresumptions, to build up this argument.

组长写的不错啊,几乎找不到什么大的毛病哈。

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改的不多我就不重发了,下位同学继续在leopard修改的基础上改吧,然后我在重改

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As the publisher of the news magazine,the writer insists on the decrease of emphasis on international news and refraining from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.He orshe cites several facts,such as poorest-selling results of thoseissues featuring international news stories on their front covers,competing newsmagazines'significant decrease of cover stories ofinternational news, and the increasing cost of maintaining foreignreporting bureaus.However,the author has added his or her imaginationand subjective presumption in the arguing process.

First, the author has assumed thatfeaturing international news stories on front covers is the only factorand it necessarily caused the poorest-selling situation over the pastthree years.But there is no support of this assumption.There are manyfactors other than the kind of the news on front cover related to thesituation of sales,including the content and efficiency of the news,the diction of the essay picked into the magazine, and people's mutableinterest and economical condition.It may be not the kind of coverstories, international news or domestic news, that does not intriguethe audience, but the dull diction and the obsolete content thatdiminish their enthusiasm.The author overlooked these factors,some ofwhich are more crucial than the kind of news stories on front cover.

Then, the following fact is even moreirrelevant to the author's conclusion. Without telling the result ofcompeting newsmagazines' decrease of international news on cover,citing the action itself does not make any sense. There is no evidencewhich illustrates that competing companies took this action in order toprevent falling sales caused by international news on front cover.Theymay have to do this, rather than want to, pressed by the shortage ofmoney to maintain foreign bureaus.Moreover, without any resultmentioned, how can we believe that international news on cover doeshave a negative effect on magazine selling?
To rationalize this argument, the arguer stressed the fact of the rising cost of maintaining foreignbureaus. But this helped little,because only considering the risingcost of maintaining foreign bureaus is one-sided. The rise or fallingof cost is controlled by many factors. According to economic theory, the higher demand for salary promotes the employer to raise the price ofproducts, which in return,will bring even higher salary demand.Inflation will take place if this trend goes on. So the rising cost of maintainingforeign bureaus may be a micro effect caused by social inflation,and the price (价格)of magazines may also keep going up to compensate therising cost of maintaining foreign bureaus.
(这一段是引用的一个经济学的成本推动论。把通货膨胀归因于称作价格-工资螺旋上升的现象,即劳动者要求增加工资导致雇主提高价格以反映出他们更高的成本,因此又为新一轮要求增加工资埋下种子。)
This argument fails to be valid becauseit is based upon several simple facts, yet many subjectiveassumptions.More persuasive proof should be assembled, instead of falsepresumptions, to build up this argument.

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