0910G[JUST DO IT] Issue13 by dodolulu

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TOPIC: ISSUE13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."




In the world today, due to the development of technology and economic, all the world tend to use these major languages such as English, France, Spanish, German, Japanese and Chinese. Not only the countries whose official languages are these consequential languages speak them, other countries which have their own languages also want their citizens to learn these crucial languages. Why should those countries do that? The chief reason is the irresistible globalization, the world looks like a village nowadays. In order to communicate well with these potent countries, those countries must change themselves because they can't change these substantial countries. It is clear to see that more than four-fifth of the information on Internet is written in English. From this it is simple to point out that numerous countries will lose their own languages in the flow of globalization. Although today their is no colonizers using their own languages to take place the languages of local people, their is no devastating catastrophe like the eruption of volcano eliminate whole nations, the collapse of many lesser-known languages is happenings by minute. When faced with this, governments
of countries in which these languages are spoken should take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

There is no denying that every language is important. First of all, the languages deputize for culture and history. In order to know the development of the nation well, study the language of this nation is indispensable. For example, the puzzle of Maya due to their languages failed to hand down after they had been forced to move by Spanish. And the people living in Quebec province in Canada speak French different with other province to protect the pass of their own culture. Secondly, just as ecologists advocate the protection of species diversity, the diversity of languages also need preserving, the protections of species diversity and languages diversity all contribute to the integrity of humans’ systems.

Considering this, governments should act to preserve these languages faced with extinction. Some governments pay attention to the protection of languages in this years. What should they do? They can propagate these languages and make people known the importance of the protection of their own languages, they can lead the citizens to use their own languages by appealing political and economic policies, if all of these can't be used, they can put compulsory policies out by the use of laws. All of these will be perfect if governments create a special department to do this. We can't forget that there are manifold NGOs(non-governmental organizations) try their best to protecting these languages faced with extinction, governments also should help NGOs through these means like the sustentation of funds and policies. All of this having a assumption is that the governments have enough money to do this, so what a poor government should do? As I said in the second paragraph, the diversity of languages is important to the completeness of human society, so all world may help these poor countries just like all world work together to protect species diversity.

Last but not least, not only governments should show their solicitude for the languages becoming extinct, but all of people living in the beautiful world may pay attention to these languages, if all of us can consider this problem, this is not a problem.

chill_lyUID: 2640200

1# dodolulu

In the world today, due to the development of technology and economic, all the world tend to use these major languages such as English, France, Spanish, German, Japanese and Chinese. Not only the countries whose official languages are these consequential languages speak them, other countries which have their own languages also want their citizens to learn these crucial languages. Why should those countries do that? The chief reason is the irresistible globalization, the world looks like a village nowadays. In order to communicate well with these potent countries, those countries must change themselves because they cannot (要这样写,注意下) change these substantial countries. It is clear to see that more than four-fifth of the information on Internet is written in English. From this it is simple to point out that numerous countries will lose their own languages in the flow of globalization. Although today there is no colonizers using their own languages to take place the languages of local people, no devastating catastrophe like the eruption of volcano eliminate whole nations, the collapse of many lesser-known languages is happening by the minute. (把第二个there is删了,简洁清楚) When faced with
this, governments of the countries in which these languages are spoken should take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

There is no denying that every language is important. First of all, the languages deputize for(觉得不是很恰当) culture and history. In order to know the development of the nation well, study the language of this nation is indispensable. For example, the puzzle of Maya due to their languages failed to hand down after they had been forced to move by Spanish. And the people living in Quebec province in Canada speak French different with other province to protect the pass of their own culture. Secondly, just as ecologists advocate the protection of species diversity, the diversity of languages also need preserving, the protections of species diversity and languages diversity all contribute to the integrity of humans’ systems.

Considering this, governments should act to preserve these languages faced with extinction. Some governments pay attention to the protection of languages in these years. What should they do? They can propagate these languages and make people known the importance of the protection of their own languages, they can lead the citizens to use their own languages by appealing political and economic policies, if all of these cannot be used, they can put compulsory policies out by the use of laws.(这句话的语法结构似乎有问题,缺少必要的连词,或换个结构,至少在if前加一个and) All of these will be perfect if governments create a special department to do this. We cannot forget that there are manifold NGOs (non-governmental organizations) trying their best to protect these languages faced with extinction, and governments also should help NGOs through these means like the sustentation of funds and policies. All of this has an assumption that the governments have enough money to do this, so what should a poor government do? As I said in the second paragraph, the diversity of languages is important to the completeness of human society, so all the world may help these poor countries just like all the world work together to protect species diversity.


Last but not least, not only governments should show their solicitude for the languages becoming extinct, but all the people living in the beautiful world may pay attention to these languages, and if all of us can consider this problem, this is not a problem.

注意一下句子结构,有些连词不能少,有些句子也可以写得更好些
其他还不错 加油

dodoluluUID: 2641270

谢谢chill-ly的批改，cannot的事情我才知道
小修改一下

In the world today, due to the development of technology and economic, all the world tend to use these major languages such as English, France, Spanish, German, Japanese and Chinese. Not only the countries whose official languages are these consequential languages speak them, other countries which have their own languages also want their citizens to learn these crucial languages. Why should those countries do that? The chief reason is the irresistible globalization, the world looks like a village nowadays. In order to communicate well with these potent countries, those countries must change themselves because they cannot change these substantial countries. It is clear to see that more than four-fifth of the information on Internet is written in English. From this it is simple to point out that numerous countries will lose their own languages in the flow of globalization. Although today there is no colonizers using their own languages to take place the languages of local people, no devastating catastrophe like the eruption of volcano eliminate whole nations, the collapse of many lesser-known languages is happening by the minute. When faced with this, governments of the countries in which these languages are spoken should take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

There is no denying that every language is important. First of all, the languages represent culture and history. In order to know the development of the nation well, study the language of this nation is indispensable. For example, the puzzle of Maya due to their languages failed to hand down after they had been forced to move by Spanish. And the people living in Quebec province in Canada speak French different with other province to protect the pass of their own culture. Secondly, just as ecologists advocate the protection of species diversity, the diversity of languages also need preserving, the protections of species diversity and languages diversity all contribute to the integrity of humans’ systems.

Considering this, governments should act to preserve these languages faced with extinction. Some governments pay attention to the protection of languages in these years. What should they do? They can propagate these languages and make people known the importance of the protection of their own languages, they can lead the citizens to use their own languages by appealing political and economic policies, and if all of these cannot be used, they can put compulsory policies out by the use of laws All of these will be perfect if governments create a special department to do this. We cannot forget that there are manifold NGOs (non-governmental organizations) trying their best to protect these languages faced with extinction, and governments also should help NGOs through these means like the sustentation of funds and policies. All of this has an assumption that the governments have enough money to do this, so what should a poor government do? As I said in the second paragraph, the diversity of languages is important to the completeness of human society, so all the world may help these poor countries just like all the world work together to protect species diversity.


Last but not least, not only governments should show their solicitude for the languages becoming extinct, but all the people living in the beautiful world may pay attention to these languages, and if all of us can consider this problem, this is not a problem.

greenxsUID: 2529289

In the world today, due to the development of technology and economic, all the world tend to use these major languages such as English, France, Spanish, German, Japanese and Chinese. Not only the countries whose official languages are these consequential languages speak them, other countries which have their own languages also want their citizens to learn these crucial languages. Why should those countries do that? The chief reason is the irresistible globalization, the world looks like a village nowadays. In order to communicate well with these potent countries, those countries must change themselves because they cannot change these substantial countries.这句话我觉得读起来有点绕，有点指代不明的感觉。 It is clear to see that more than four-fifth of the information on Internet is written in English. From this it is simple to point out that numerous countries will lose their own languages in the flow of globalization.可能还不足以point out，如果能给一个language 流失的证据的话，会比较有说服力 Although today there is no colonizers using their own languages to take place the languages of local people, no devastating catastrophe like the eruption of volcano eliminate whole nations, the collapse of many lesser-known languages is happening by the minute. When faced with this, governments of the countries in which these languages are spoken should take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

There is no denying that every language is important. First of all, the languages represent culture and history. In order to know the development of the nation well, study the language of this nation is indispensable. For example, the puzzle of Maya due to their languages failed to hand down after they had been forced to move by Spanish. And the people living in Quebec province in Canada speak French different with other province to protect the pass of their own culture. Secondly, just as ecologists advocate the protection of species diversity, the diversity of languages also need preserving, the protections of species diversity and languages diversity all contribute to the integrity of humans’ systems.如果这句话回扣你的第一句话，会不会能意思完整一些呢

Considering this, governments should act to preserve these languages faced with extinction. Some governments pay attention to the protection of languages in these years. What should they do? They can propagate最好不要用这个词，这个词是贬义 these languages and make people known the importance of the protection of their own languages, they can lead the citizens to use their own languages by appealing political and economic policies, and if all of these cannot be used, they can put compulsory policies out by the use of laws. All of these will be perfect if governments create a special department to do this. We cannot forget that there are manifold NGOs (non-governmental organizations) trying their best to protect these languages faced with extinction, and governments also should help NGOs through these means like the sustentation of funds and policies. All of this has an assumption that the governments have enough money to do this, so what should a poor government do? As I said in the second paragraph, the diversity of languages is important to the completeness of human society, so all the world may help these poor countries just like all the world work together to protect species diversity.


Last but not least, not only governments should show their solicitude for the languages becoming extinct, but all the people living in the beautiful world may pay attention to these languages, and if all of us can consider this problem, this is not a problem.这句话感觉不是很有力度。。。。
感觉写的不错，如果要说问题的话，我觉得目前的问题是能把话说顺，但是说不清，重点的地方不是很明确，不重点的地方很冗赘。。。但是我不知道这问题怎么解决，因为我也是在这个问题上不太清楚怎么提高

3# dodolulu

dodoluluUID: 2641270

谢谢greenxs的修改

In the world today, due to the development of technology and economic, all the world tend to use these major languages such as English, France, Spanish, German, Japanese and Chinese. Not only the countries whose official languages are these consequential languages speak them, other countries which have their own languages also want their citizens to learn these crucial languages. Why should those countries do that? The chief reason is the irresistible globalization, the world looks like a village nowadays. In order to communicate well with potent countries, weaker countries must change themselves because they cannot change these substantial countries. It is clear to see that more than four-fifth of the information on Internet is written in English. From this it is faint to point out that numerous countries will lose their own languages in the flow of globalization a few years later. Although today there is no colonizers using their own languages to take place the languages of local people, no devastating catastrophe like the eruption of volcano eliminate whole nations, the collapse of many lesser-known languages is happening by the minute. When faced with this, governments of the countries in which these languages are spoken should take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

There is no denying that every language is important. First of all, the languages represent culture and history. In order to know the development of the nation well, study the language of this nation is indispensable. For example, the puzzle of Maya due to their languages failed to hand down after they had been forced to move by Spanish. And the people living in Quebec province in Canada speak French different with other province to protect the pass of their own culture. Secondly, just as ecologists advocate the protection of species diversity, the diversity of languages also need preserving, the protections of species diversity and languages diversity all contribute to the integrity of humans’ systems so we can’t neglect any languages.

Considering this, governments should act to preserve these languages faced with extinction. Some governments pay attention to the protection of languages in these years. What should they do? They can spread these languages and make people know the importance of the protection of their own languages, they can lead the citizens to use their own languages by appealing political and economic policies, and if all of these cannot be used, they can put compulsory policies out by the use of laws. All of these will be perfect if governments create a special department to do this. We cannot forget that there are manifold NGOs (non-governmental organizations) trying their best to protect these languages faced with extinction, and governments also should help NGOs through these means like the sustentation of funds and policies. All of this has an assumption that the governments have enough money to do this, so what should a poor government do? As I said in the second paragraph, the diversity of languages is important to the completeness of human society, so all the world may help these poor countries just like all the world work together to protect species diversity.


Last but not least, not only governments should show their solicitude for the languages becoming extinct, but all the people living in the beautiful world may pay attention to these languages, and if all of us can consider this problem, this will be no problem sooner or later.