0910G[JUST DO IT] argument242 by dodolulu

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In this passage, the arguer advocates that these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton’s which calls for students to agree not to cheat in exams and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Although well‐presented this argument is, it’s not well‐reasoned enough from my perspective. The reasons are stated as follows.


Firstly, the arguer assumes that honor code has proven successful because the number of cases of cheating has declined. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this essential assumption. It is very likely that the number of the students'
of the test takers has been on the decline or only the number of the fifth years has declined and other four years hasn’t. We also cannot neglect the survey was conducted by Groveton itself that we must suspect the truth of it. The arguer's reasoning is undoubtedly flawed unless the arguer can persuade me that these or other possible scenarios are impossible.


Secondly, the arguer assumes that the students agree notify cheaters when they suspect mean they are actually compliance with the commitments. Nevertheless, the arguer does not supply any evidence to verify this assumption. It is quite possible that many students wouldn't want to report because they are not sure of their suspicion lack of prove and they don't enjoy undermining the relationship with their fellow students anyway. It is known to us that it is the teachers' job to monitor and report cheating cases, while students might concentrate more on their own exam. The arguer cannot sustain the recommendation without accounting for and ruling out these and other replaceable explanations


The last but not the least, even if the evidence turns out to support the aforementioned assumptions, the arguer also assumes that honor code will be effective for other institutions and neither any conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption. It is just as possible that the cases of cheating of other institutions is much less than that of Groveton or the students in other institutions don’t agree with honor code because it is based on the suspicion of students . To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly.


In a world, the arguer’s argument mentioned above is not based on sound evidence or sound reasoning, neither of which is dispensable for a definitive argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer should reason more convincingly and take every possible consideration into account.

chill_lyUID: 2640200

In this passage, the arguer advocates that these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton’s which calls for students to agree not to cheat in exams and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Although well‐presented this argument is, it’s not well‐reasoned enough from my perspective. The reasons are stated as follows. (重复题目似乎不是很好的写法,范文里这样写的不多,写的评价也不高,不如直接亮观点,具体A开头怎么写好我也很纠结,可以探讨下)

Firstly, the arguer assumes that honor code has proven successful because the number of cases of cheating has declined. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this essential assumption. It is very likely that the number of the students of the test takers has been on the decline or only the number of the fifth years has declined and other four years hasn’t. We also cannot neglect the survey was conducted by Groveton itself that we must suspect the truth of it. The arguer's reasoning is undoubtedly flawed unless the arguer can persuade me that these or other possible scenarios are impossible.

Secondly, the arguer(主语) assumes(谓语) that the students agree to notify cheaters when they suspect(assume的宾语?) mean(??) (that) they are actually compliance with the commitments(mean的宾语).
(首先不知道我分析的是不是你想的,不过mean在这里的形式肯定有问题,可能的改法是,assume后再加个that,两个that第一个引导assume的宾语从句(这个that似乎可以省,如果是的话你的句子有可能是对的了….不过mean要改means),第二个就是引导主语从句了,希望我说清楚了…)

Nevertheless, the arguer does not supply any evidence to verify this assumption. It is quite possible that many students wouldn't want to report because they are not sure of their suspicion lack of prove and they don't enjoy undermining the relationship with their fellow students anyway. It is known to us that it is the teachers' job to monitor and report cheating cases, while students might concentrate more on their own exam. (前半句似乎就是作者说的老方法了,你这相当于说老方法好,应该是说新方法不好吧(也许是我思想扭曲了,不同意可以无视), 最好还是把前半句去了吧,这应该不能当作理由)The arguer cannot sustain the recommendation without accounting for and ruling out these and other replaceable explanations

The last but not the least, even if the evidence turns out to support the aforementioned assumptions, the arguer also assumes that honor code will be effective for other institutions and neither(很怪,不知道对不对,可能要倒装?前面不要and?最好不这么写) any conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption. It is just as possible that the cases of cheating of other institutions is much less than that of Groveton or the students in other institutions don’t agree with honor code because it is based on the suspicion of students . To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly.


In a world, the arguer’s argument mentioned above is not based on sound evidence or sound reasoning, neither of which is dispensable for a definitive argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer should reason more convincingly and take every possible consideration into account.



怎么说呢,有点太模板化了,中间3段开头太相似了
论述的理由也不是很充分,充分的论述比套话好得多
多看下范文吧,尤其是官方的
A的行文语言要求不高,严密就好(其实这也不简单),但内容一定要充实
加油!

dodoluluUID: 2641270

2# chill_ly
the arguer assumes that the students
agree notify cheaters when they suspect mean they are actually compliance with the commitments貌似这么改可以吧，我再找高人问问the arguer assumes that the students
agree notify cheaters when they suspect means
they are actually compliance with the commitment

And it is also known to us all that students might concentrate more on their own exam so it is hardly for them to find other’s cheating.原来的前半句确实很危险

and neither any conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption.这句是模版，确实有问题,这么改行吗and there is no conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption

模版那是必须的，30分钟我的能力实在有限，现在的任务就是完善模版，完善套话。论述不充分，不充实，我确实要好好提高了。开头，这个我是要改进一下。

加油！

dodoluluUID: 2641270

In this passage, the arguer advocates that honor codes similar to Groveton’s which requires students to agree not to cheat in exams and to report a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated should be accepted by other institutions. Although well‐presented this argument is, it’s not well‐reasoned enough from my perspective. The reasons are stated as follows.

Firstly, the arguer assumes that honor code has proven successful because the number of cases of cheating has declined. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this essential assumption. It is very likely that the number of the students' of the test takers has been on the decline or only the number of the fifth years has declined and other four years hasn’t. We also cannot neglect the survey was conducted by Groveton itself that we must suspect the truth of it. The arguer's reasoning is undoubtedly flawed unless the arguer can persuade me that these or other possible scenarios are impossible.  

Secondly, the arguer assumes that the students agree notify cheaters when they suspect means they are actually compliance with the commitments. Nevertheless, the arguer does not supply any evidence to verify this assumption. It is quite possible that many students wouldn't want to report because they are not sure of their suspicion lack of prove and they don't enjoy undermining the relationship with their fellow students anyway. And it is also known to us all that students might concentrate more on their own exam so it is hardly for them to find other’s cheating. The arguer cannot sustain the recommendation without accounting for and ruling out these and other replaceable explanations


The last but not the least, even if the evidence turns out to support the aforementioned assumptions, the arguer also assumes that honor code will be effective for other institutions and  there is no conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption. It is just as possible that the cases of cheating of other institutions is much less than that of Groveton or the students in other institutions don’t agree with honor code because it is based on the suspicion of students . To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly.


In a world, the arguer’s argument mentioned above is not based on sound evidence or sound reasoning, neither of which is dispensable for a definitive argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer should reason more convincingly and take every possible consideration into account.

chill_lyUID: 2640200

3# dodolulu

语法这东西我也很难说对错,很多是靠语感和感觉,不免有错的地方,不过我的想法是,不知道对不对的句子尽量不用,说不清的长句子尽量改成短句子
你是限时写的吗?那真不容易,像我写写停停的一篇A就1h+了,真要限时还不知道写出什么东西来呢
至于模板,考试时肯定用得上,当场想哪有时间啊,不过应该多融入些自己的东西,千篇一律就不好了
个人的一点看法,仅供参考

leopard2009UID: 2596872

不好意思，我最近工作变动，没时间修改，我明天晚上再来改，先占楼哈

dodoluluUID: 2641270

修改

In this passage, the arguer advocates that honor codes similar to Groveton’s which requires students to agree not to cheat in exams and to report a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated should be accepted by other institutions. Although well‐presented this argument is, it’s not well‐reasoned enough from my perspective. The reasons are stated as follows.

Firstly, the arguer assumes that honor code has proven successful because the number of cases of cheating has declined. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this essential assumption. It is very likely that the number of the test takers has been on the decline or only the number of the fifth years has declined and other four years hasn’t. We also cannot neglect the survey was conducted by Groveton itself that we must suspect the truth of it. The arguer's reasoning is undoubtedly flawed unless the arguer can persuade me that these or other possible scenarios are impossible.  

Secondly, the arguer assumes that the students agree notify cheaters when they suspect means they are actually compliance with the commitments. Nevertheless, the arguer does not supply any evidence to verify this assumption. It is quite possible that many students wouldn't want to report because they are not sure of their suspicion lack of prove and they don't enjoy undermining the relationship with their fellow students anyway. And it is also known to us all that students might concentrate more on their own exam so it is hardly for them to find other’s cheating. The arguer cannot sustain the recommendation without accounting for and ruling out these and other replaceable explanations



Last but not least, even if the evidence turns out to support the aforementioned assumptions, the arguer also assumes that honor code will be effective for other institutions and  there is no conclusive scientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption. It is just as possible that the cases of cheating of other institutions is much less than that of Groveton or the students in other institutions don’t agree with honor code because it is based on the suspicion of students . To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly.


In a word, the argument mentioned above is not based on valid evidence or sound reasoning, neither of which is dispensable for a definitive argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer should reason more convincingly and take every possible consideration into account.

dodoluluUID: 2641270

6# cxjack

the number of the students' of the test takers真别扭
改the number of the test takers

on sound evidence or sound reasoning 改
on valid evidence or sound reasoning

剩下的那几个地方我写完了没检查出来，汗

leopard2009UID: 2596872

Inthis passage, the arguer advocates that honor codes similar toGroveton’s, which requires students to agree not to cheat in exams andto report a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated,should be accepted by other institutions. Although well‐presented this argument is, it’s not well‐reasoned enough from my perspective. The reasons are stated as follows.


Firstly, the arguer assumes that honor code has proven successfulbecause the number of cases of cheating has declined. Although this isentirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate thisessential assumption. It is very likely that the number of the testtakers has been on the decline or only the number of the fifth yearshas declined and other four years hasn’t. We also cannot neglect thesurvey was conducted by Groveton itself that we must suspect the truthof it. The arguer's reasoning is undoubtedly flawed unless the arguercan persuade me that these or other possible scenarios are impossible.  

Secondly, the arguer assumes that the students agree to notify cheaterswhen they suspect, which means they are actually compliance with thecommitments. Nevertheless, the arguer does not supply any evidence toverify this assumption. It is quite possible that many studentswouldn't want to report because they are not sure of their suspicionlack of prove and they don't enjoy undermining the relationship withtheir fellow students anyway. And it is also known to us all thatstudents might concentrate more on their own exam so it is hardly forthem to find other’s cheating. The arguer cannot sustain therecommendation without accounting for and ruling out these and otherreplaceable explanations

Lastbut not least, even if the evidence turns out to support theaforementioned assumptions, the arguer also assumes that honor codewill be effective for other institutions and  there is no conclusivescientific evidence is provided to affirm this assumption. It is justas possible that the cases of cheating of other institutions is muchless than that of Groveton or the students in other institutions don’tagree with honor code because it is based on the suspicion of students. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly. Toreach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain clearly.

In a word, the argument mentioned above is not based on valid evidenceor sound reasoning, neither of which is dispensable for a definitiveargument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer shouldreason more convincingly and take every possible consideration intoaccount.

写的不错，几乎没有什么错误。不好意思现在才修改。