【喜洋洋杀G大队】dingyi0311,7.3号作业

dingyi0311UID: 2627919

argument38
To reduce absenteeism in schools and workplaces, the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council has recommend consumers to purchase the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. To justify their suggestion, the Council has indicated that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, and people visit doctor once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. As the cold are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, the arguer then conclude that the Ichthaid can reduce cold and absenteeism. The argument sound reasonable at the first glimpse, however, my further reflect revealed that it has suffered at least three logical fallacies as follows.
Firstly, the threshold problem with this argument is that the casual relationship between high fish consumption and low cold rate are unwarranted. The arguer fails to take many other effects into consideration. Perhaps the climate in the East Maria is mild, or that people are more likely to take exercises, or that the environment there are more friendly, so that people there less likely to be got in cold. Moreover, it is equally possible that people in East Maria are more diligent that they ask for less sick leaves, or that the fee for medical treatment in the East Maria is too high that, people will not see doctor , for that the cold is not a serious problem.

Even if the high fish consumption is the direct reason for the low cold rate, the arguer unfairly asserts that the Ichthaid will take the same effect. As it known to us all, there are many components of fish. It is unwarranted to say that fish oil is the part that takes effects. Maybe the bones, the meats, or the liver is the real effective part. In addition, Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. As the molecular structure is changed, whether it can have the same biological function as the nature fish oil is dubious. For better support, the arguer needs to provide more scientific reports on the effect of Ichthaid in preventing cold.
Another problem that weakens the logical of this argument is that the author regard the reduced cold will serve to less absenteeism. However, the author fails to provide evident to support his assertion. Maybe the cold is just an excuse that used by students or workers. If it is true, no matter the occasions of cold reduce or not, the absenteeism will not change. Without precluding this possibility, I remain not convinced.
In sum, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim that using the Ichthaid can reduce the absenteeism, because the evident cited and the logical inference do not lead to strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the author need to provide more information on whether the Ichthaid can real reduce the cold and that whether reduced cold can lead to less absenteeism. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.

wu-intrepidUID: 2659758

To reduce absenteeism in schools and workplaces, the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council has recommend consumers to purchase the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. To justify their suggestion, the Council has indicated that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, and people visit doctor once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. As the cold are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, the arguer then conclude that the Ichthaid can reduce cold and absenteeism. The argument sound reasonable at the first glimpse, however, my further reflect revealed that it has suffered at least three logical fallacies as follows.

Firstly, the threshold problem with this argument is that the casual relationship between high fish consumption and low cold rate are unwarranted. The arguer fails to take many other effects into consideration. Perhaps the climate in the East Maria is mild, or that people are more likely to take exercises, or that the environment there are more friendly, so that people there less likely to be got in不要in把 cold. Moreover, it is equally possible that people in East Maria are more diligent that they ask for less sick leaves, or that the fee for medical treatment in the East Maria is too high that, people will not see doctor , for that the cold is not a serious problem.

Even if the high fish consumption is the direct reason for the low cold rate, the arguer unfairly asserts that the Ichthaid will take the same effect. As it known to us all, there are many components of fish. It is unwarranted to say that fish oil is the part that takes effects. Maybe the bones, the meats, or the liver is the real effective part. In addition, Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. As the molecular structure is changed, whether it can have the same biological function as the nature fish oil is dubious. For better support, the arguer needs to provide more scientific reports on the effect of Ichthaid in preventing cold.

Another problem that weakens the logical of this argument is that the author regard the reduced cold will serve to less absenteeism. However, the author fails to provide evident to support his assertion. Maybe the cold is just an excuse that used by students or workers. If it is true, no matter the occasions of cold reduce or not, the absenteeism will not change. Without precluding this possibility, I remain not convinced.

In sum, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim that using the Ichthaid can reduce the absenteeism, because the evident cited and the logical inference do not lead to strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the author need to provide more information on whether the Ichthaid can real reduce the cold and that whether reduced cold can lead to less absenteeism. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.

写的很好啊，看来你argument已经弄好适合的模板了，厉害！向你学习！

dingyi0311UID: 2627919

2# wu-intrepid
呵呵，主要是先烈们的模板，自己改了下，以后还要慢慢改~~

pinokuUID: 2435028

argument38
To reduce absenteeism in schools and workplaces, the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council has recommended consumers to purchase the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. To justify their suggestion, the Council has indicated that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, and people visit doctor once or twice per year for the treatment of colds这句话不对，in near by xx不是主语，你逗号后的是修饰这个地方，后面就没有话了，and后是一个分句。As the cold are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, the arguer then concludes that the Ichthaid can reduce cold and absenteeism. The argument sounds reasonable at the first glimpse, however, my further reflect revealed that it has suffered at least three logical fallacies as follows.
Firstly, the threshold problem with this argument is that the casual relationship between high fish consumption and low cold rate are unwarranted. The arguer fails to take many other effects into consideration. Perhaps the climate in the East Maria is mild, or that people 这个that的使用我不是很确定，你确定吗，告知我一声，我感觉前面没有that从句，似乎这里用不上。are more likely to take exercises, or that the environment there are more friendly, so that people there less likely to be got in cold. Moreover, it is equally possible that people in East Maria are more diligent that they ask for less sick leaves, or that the fee for medical treatment in the East Maria is too high that, people will not see doctor , for that the cold is not a serious problem.

Even if the high fish consumption is the direct reason for the low cold rate, the arguer unfairly asserts that the Ichthaid will take the same effect. As it known to us all, there are many components of（用in好点吧） fish. It is unwarranted to say that fish oil is the part that takes effects. Maybe the bones, the meats, or the liver is the real effective part. In addition, Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. As the molecular structure is changed, whether it can have the same biological function as the nature fish oil is dubious. For better support, the arguer needs to provide more scientific reports on the effect of Ichthaid in preventing cold.
Another problem that weakens the logical of this argument is that the author regard the reduced cold will serve to less absenteeism. However, the author fails to provide evident(evidence)to support his assertion. Maybe the cold is just an excuse that(用that就应该有be动词，去掉that） used by students or workers. If it is true, no matter the occasions of cold reduce or not, the absenteeism will not change. Without precluding this possibility, I remain not convinced（am）.
In sum, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim that using the Ichthaid can reduce the absenteeism, because the evident cited and the logical inference do not lead to strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the author need to provide more information on whether the Ichthaid can real reduce the cold and that whether reduced cold can lead to less absenteeism. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.

pinokuUID: 2435028

写的很不错，很流利，向你学习