【Try Best】第一小组 issue185 by 小红莓

小红莓UID: 2641349

TOPIC: ISSUE185 - "Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."
WORDS: 434
TIME: 01:04:08
DATE: 2009-7-7 11:54:19

As many scandals had happened in politics, economics, academia, and so on, they have been increasingly focused on and cause a significant issue: are scandals really useful? As far as I am concerned, even if scandals may distract attention from many other affairs, the benefit they bring to human is far more meaningful.

Admittedly, scandals always attract public attention from many other so-called important things. And as we all known, the front-page of newspapers, the top line of portals and video news are always scandals of some famous people. As everyone have his own work to do and there are so many important things that worth attention, scandals, to some degree, overshadowed human's attention on the other things.

However, scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people thinking about their morals and as a consequence need to be focused on too. It's the scandals that reflect the truth which is not always mentioned by speaker or reformer. As no one is perfect, mistakes and errors are not that terrible but valuable to everyone for the reason that they can point out what is to be improved by oneself. It is said that mistake is the mother of success. If one cannot realize his falsify, how can he correct it and be a better man? For example, even though Michael Jackson had once taking drugs and catamite, he admitted his mistakes and compensate for the casualty after the scandals was exposed to the public. Until now, Michael is still one of the greatest super stars in our minds. The value of scandals is to reveal mistakes and make individuals correct them.

What’s more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems of some areas or even the whole society. Bernard Madoff, the CEO of Madoff investment company, an American former financial and convicted felon defrauded thousand of investors of billions of dollars. After his crime was exposed, the whole American society became thinking about the financial system and take action to emerge from the financial crisis.

All in all, even though scandals always attract public attention from many other important things, they are also meaningful because scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people thinking about their morals. What's more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems and refresh the air of some areas. To have a better judgment, one should not be confused by the complexity of the exterior, but should have a careful analysis and deep thinking and then correct one's own behavior. Only in this way, the value of scandals can be developed.

还是做不到限时:dizzy:

tidejoyUID: 2527165

hey have been increasingly focused on and cause a significant issue:---------caused？
However, scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people thinking about their morals and ----------------------------------------make后边最好用 think？
what‘s more那段应该加深点吧，这段应该还有写头，写好了深度应该不错

mobius.x64UID: 2628671

一点愚见, 有不妥还请指教了
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3# mobius.x64
收到，谢谢:)

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As many scandals had happened in politics, economics, academia, and so on, they have been increasingly focused on and have caused a significant issue: are scandals really useful? As far as I am concerned, even if scandals may distract attention from many other affairs, the benefit they bring to human outweighs their harms.

Admittedly, scandals always attract public attention from many other so-called important things. And as we all known, in the front-page of newspapers or at the top line of portals and video news, there are always scandals of some famous people. As everyone have his own work to do and there are so many important things are more worthwhile, scandals, to some degree, attract more human's attention than other worthwhile things.

However, scandals can reveal the hidden causes of problems and make people reflect on their morals and as a consequence need to be focused on too??. It's the scandals that reflect the truth which is not always mentioned by speaker or reformer. As no one is perfect, mistakes and errors are not terrible but valuable to everyone for the reason that they can point out what is to be improved. It is said that mistake is the mother of success. If one cannot realize his failures, how can he correct it and be a better man? For example, even though Michael Jackson had once taken drugs and catamite, he admitted his mistakes and compensated for the casualty after the scandals was exposed to the public. Until now, Michael is still one of the greatest super stars in our minds. The value of scandals is to reveal mistakes and make individuals correct them.

What’s more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems of some areas or even the whole society. Bernard Madoff, the CEO of Madoff investment company, an American former financial and convicted felon defrauded thousand of investors of billions of dollars. After his crime was exposed, the whole American society started to think about the financial system and took action to emerge from?? the financial crisis.

All in all, even though scandals always attract public attention from many other important things, they are also meaningful because scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people think about their morals. What's more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems and refresh the air of some areas. To have a better judgment, one should not be confused by the complexity of the exterior, but should have a careful analysis and deep thinking and then correct one's own behavior. Only in this way, the value of scandals can be developed.

景辰UID: 2645202

As many scandals had happened in politics, economics, academia, and so on, they have been increasingly focused on and cause a significant issue: are scandals really useful? As far as I am concerned, even if scandals may distract attention from many other affairs(读者增么理解这个词？中文低文脉，英文高文脉，不要让语言误导了你的意思), the benefit they bring to human is far more meaningful.（TS，统领全文，看看下面的文章是怎么和这句呼应的）

Admittedly,（一开始就让步，那么这个让步是建立在什么基础上的呢？） scandals always attract public attention from many other so-called important things（同many other affairs，指代不清吧，呵呵）. And as we all known（know）, the front-page of newspapers, the top line of portals and video news are always scandals of some famous people.（好吧，这里说明一个现象~~） As everyone have his own work to do and there are so many important things that worth attention, scandals, to some degree, overshadowed（为啥呢么，跳出来一个过去时） human's attention on the（the 去掉） other things.

However, scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people thinking about their morals and as a consequence need to be focused on too.(这句子结构有点混乱了。。 to be focused on主语是谁？呵呵~) It's the scandals that reflect the truth which is not always mentioned by speaker or reformer.（这句话很突兀，上面没有顺承下面也没有展开） As no one is perfect, mistakes and errors are not that terrible but valuable to everyone for the reason that they can point out what is to be improved by oneself. （同上，没有展开）It is said that mistake is the mother of success. If one cannot realize his falsify（第一次见这个词。。查了一下，是动词。。）, how can he correct it and be a better man? For example, even though Michael Jackson had once taking drugs and catamite, he admitted his mistakes and compensate for the casualty after the scandals was exposed to the public. Until now, Michael is still one of the greatest super stars in our minds. （仔细看看这个例子支持本段TS了吗？看上去只是列举了一个实例，但是影响作用呢？）The value of scandals is to reveal mistakes and make individuals correct them.


What’s more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems of some areas or even the whole society. Bernard Madoff, the CEO of Madoff investment company, an American former financial and convicted felon defrauded thousand of investors of billions of dollars. After his crime was exposed, the whole American society became thinking about the financial system and take action to emerge from （额。。这是什么、、没明白）the financial crisis.（这个例子同样单单列举，没有支持TS）

All in all（这个是“总之”的意思吧。。囧）, even though scandals always attract public attention from many other important things, they are also meaningful because scandals can reveal the nature of problems and make people thinking about their morals.（这个说法证明了吗） What's more, on a social level, scandals can bring reform to systems and refresh the air of some areas. To have a better judgment, one should not be confused by the complexity of the exterior, but should have a careful analysis and deep thinking and then correct one's own behavior. Only in this way, the value of scandals can be developed.（建议结尾可以升华，不要复述前面每段的TS.）
水平有限，呵呵，不当之处还请包涵~~

我认为这道题吧，useful建立在“They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could”的基础上，可以驳斥useful的定义，也可以肯定useful的定义，在这个基础上，分析是否useful，即whether They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could