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1：兴趣和需要重要；兴趣和需要是推动科学家探求真理强大的推动力。
Eg. Einstein 说过 The interest is the best teacher. Einstein of boyhood is more stupid, afterward; he showed the extreme hobby of physics

2：固然重要，也不能一味以满足其需要和兴趣为目标.
A.因为有时需要和兴趣并不能确保个人价值的实现：个人价值的实现有时并不是仅仅兴趣可以实现的，他所受到的逻辑，哲学教育、正确的思想教育都很重要。
B.而且有时个人的兴趣和需要并不总是对其个人和社会的发展有利的，甚至是有害的，需要学校给予纠正.Eg：兴趣是网络游戏，吃穿打扮等。

3：有些教育是必须的，不能因为没有兴趣而不学。
Eg：道德、历史教育


The author asserts it is truly effective only when education is particularly designed to meet the individual need and interests. In my view, I tend to agree that need and interests play an important role in fostering individuals; however, I disagree with the assertion that whether meeting the individual need and interests dominate that whether the education is truly effective.

On the one hand, I admit the significant role of need and interest in the process of educating students. Einstein said: "The interest is the best teacher." In most cases, it is interests that stimulate the creativity of individuals and promoting the ability of discovering the truth. For example, in area of science, many scientists, who were provoked by their interests, have made great contributions to the world. Consider Einstein, one of the most famous scientists in history. He was stupid in his childhood; however, he showed a great interest in physics and devoted himself to it. Without the excitation of the interests, he would not advance the theory of relativity and achieved so great accomplishments.

However, on the other hand, in certain cases interests and need cannot always benefit the individuals. Individual interests and need cannot necessarily make success. The objective of education is to realize value of individuals and make them contribute to the world. However, the interests and need of individuals in some cases cannot help attain the objective. The success of an individual is attributable to many factors such as critical thinking, philosophic thinking, and basic professional knowledge. When education ignores the education of such aspects while only focus on the interests and need of individuals, I cannot admit this kind of education is truly effective.

In some cases, the interests and need of individuals are contradictory with the objective of education; even do damage to the growth of individuals and the society. When come to these circumstances, education must correct, even prevent the interests and need of individuals. For example, in our modern society, so many students abandon themselves to the computer games excessively and spend little time on studying knowledge. Anyone could not deny this kind of interest of these students is detrimental to the healthy development of individuals. In these cases, whether education should support their interests? I suppose in these cases, education should correct their interests rather than support this kind of interest.

From another standpoint, I assume that some knowledge should be taught to students, though the students are not interested in this kind of knowledge. Some knowledge such as moral knowledge, history of a nation is important for the development of an individual. Moral education can make an individual grow healthily; learning the history of a nation can foster patriotism of individuals. So, for this kind of knowledge, it should be taught to the individuals without regard to the interests and need of individuals.

In sum, I tend to agree that interests and need play a significant role in growth of individuals and development of society. However, excessively focusing on the interests and need does not necessarily make success of individuals, even in some cases it bring damage to individuals and society. In addition, some knowledge such as moral education, history of a nation is necessary and important for the healthy growth of an individual, it should be taught to students no matter whether the students are interested in this kind of knowledge or not.

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The author asserts it is truly effective only when education is particularly designed to meet the individual need and interests. In my view, I tend to agree that need and interests play an important role in fostering individuals（个性personality）; however, I disagree with the assertion that whether meeting the individual need and interests dominate that whether the education is truly effective.

On the one hand, (文章开始body1就另一方面了)I admit the significant role of need and interest in the process of educating students. Einstein said: "The interest is the best teacher." In most cases, it is interests that stimulate the creativity of individuals and promoting（promote） the ability of discovering (exploring)the truth. For example,(可以去掉) in area of science, many scientists, who were provoked by their interests, have made great contributions to the world. Consider(considering) Einstein, one of the most famous scientists in history（，as a example）. He (, he)was stupid in his childhood; however, he showed a great interest in physics and devoted himself to it. Without the excitation of the interests, he would not advance the theory of relativity and achieved so great accomplishments.

However, on the other hand, in certain cases interests and need cannot always benefit the(去掉) individuals. Individual interests and need cannot necessarily make success. （与上一段矛盾，可以加深程度 over emphasis on......）The objective of education is to realize value of individuals and make them(指代不明) contribute to the world. However, the interests and need of individuals in some cases（to some extent） cannot help （to）attain the objective. The success of an individual is attributable to many factors such as critical thinking, philosophic thinking（analytical abilities）, and basic professional knowledge. When education ignores the education of （去掉）such aspects while only （and ，if only，）focus on the interests and need of individuals, I cannot admit（词要多变） this kind of education is truly effective.（这段你可以举例子再具体说明）

In some cases, the interests and need of individuals are contradictory with （conflict with）the objective of education; even do damage to the growth of individuals and the society. When（it） come（comes） to these circumstances（这指代不明）, education must correct, even prevent the interests and need of individuals.（觉得这句话意思表达的有问题）For example, in our modern society, so many students abandon themselves to the computer games excessively and spend little time on studying knowledge. Anyone could not deny this kind of interest of these students is detrimental to the healthy development of individuals. In these cases, whether education should support their interests? I suppose in these cases, education should correct their interests rather than support this kind of interest.（语言缺乏变化）

From another standpoint,（段与段之间的连接词用的不够准确，导致逻辑有点不清晰） I assume （不当）that some knowledge should be taught to students, though the students are not interested in this kind of knowledge. （可以继续说这样带来的好处）Some knowledge such as moral knowledge, history of a nation is important for the development of an individual. Moral education can make an individual grow healthily（healthy）; learning the history of a nation can foster patriotism of individuals. （可以再举平行的例子进一步说明）So, for this kind of knowledge, it should be taught to the individuals without regard to the interests and need of individuals.（论证不够充分）

In sum, I tend to agree that interests and need play a significant role in growth of individuals and development of society. However, excessively focusing on the interests and need does not necessarily make success of individuals, even in some cases it bring damage to individuals and society. In addition, some knowledge such as moral education, history of a nation is necessary and important for the healthy growth of an individual, it should be taught to students no matter whether the students are interested in this kind of knowledge or not.

文章整体的逻辑不够紧密，有点脱节。论证不够充分。
词汇单一，有的词汇我不知道你用的是否正确（correct， provoke，patriotism ...... ）