Issue 51 By WDI小组 - 小欣

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Education is like spiritual feeding, you cannot give an individual just according to his temporary appetite, but should feed him by all kinds of nutrition, in which way could keep him healthy. In saying this, I disagree what the speaker claims. I believe that an individual in our nowadays  society needs broad education, at the same time may develop some personal interest if he is no longer a kid.

Let’s start from talking about the purpose of education, namely the effectiveness of education mentioned by the speaker. I think education is always dedicated to shape a person, and make him a responsible man, having study skills and creative qualifications, as well as the ability to cooperate with others. Besides the education provided by the society, family education should also take care one’s personality.

Therefore, based on the education purposes talked above, I assert that education should be differently designed according to different cases, so that education could be maximum effective.  I know what you mean here. However, it's unclear. You initially disagree with the claim but this sentences seems like you agree. You'd either elaborate on this sentence e.g. under what assumption it is effective, or clarify this sentence.

Firstly, for little kids, the elementary education of all subjects should be implemented. At this primary level, compulsory education should be guaranteed by local governments, and schools should not let kids select the courses among required courses that they like. We all admit that kids and most of teenagers do not have a good judgment. Their interest or desires are temporary, and most of them are lack of persistence. So we cannot only treat the kids what they like, we should make decisions for them. For instance, if a kid dislikes a teacher, he might also hate the teacher’s course, and wants to abandon it and only take other courses; or, if he likes a teacher and prefers the teacher’s classes, we cannot trust the kid that he may like that subject forever. a well-supported paragraph

Secondly, for adults’ higher level education, I think it is the time to provide good research environments for them to develop their personal interests and desires of a specific field of knowledge. This education is not compulsory, but is training individuals who would be good at different things and make them specialists in different positions. consulting a grammar book on "not only, but also" is helpful, because it is a common and good one to use.   At this time, it is surely that an individual has more fairly judgment and could make decisions on his own. For example, if a student likes math, he may be trained as a professional software writer, and we shall never force him to be a literature writer. At the same time, the knowledge of arts he learned in previous ten years is enough for him to use.

Lastly, for the elder citizens or who are aging, it would be perfect that the public education open to them. At this period, they have more spare time to learn about life, not only limited to the knowledge for working or examinations. They will benefit from this open education and renew their outlook of life, and therefore have a healthier mentality.

However, what discussed above are for most of people, I have to admit that unique person do exist in our society. Their cynical attitude forces them to stay at home and have self-study. Some of them are very talented and did have achievement and contribution. So for those people, education may be effective by giving them what they mostly desired.

To put it simply, education is giving guidance. Compulsory education is a must for kids. But for adults, education could be more flexible and should avoid constraining their creativity.


I really liked your first body paragraph. It's well-supported with evidence and has a clear logic. However, there's a tendency to blow off. My suggestion is that if you are running out of time, write good topic sentences and support it by evidences are the quickest way.