argument 241 自己为了不套模板而创的一套模板 离考试还有7天

wildrose800331UID：2602131

TOPIC: ARGUMENT241 - The following appeared in a memo at the XYZ company.

"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating resumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less-expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
WORDS: 535
TIME: 50
DATE: 2009-7-9 11:18:19
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The conclusion reached in this argument that XYZ Company would make a mistake to replace Delany with Walsh seems to be obviously reasonable at the first thought; however, the author fails to consider other elements necessary to evaluate the situation. The fact that last year those laid-off employees found jobs much more quickly with the help of Delany may be true, but it is possibly true with the help from Walsh. Furthermore, the cited case of Walsh eight years ago was not sufficient to corroborate the failure of Walsh regardless of other factors. Besides these two incomplete and weak citations, the evidences given to bolsterDelany "clearly superior"  can not actually render the sound preference of Delany as a better personnel company.

As we know, job seeking involves more than efforts from job seekers and personnel companies but covers the prosperity and requirement of a specific industry as well as much more broadly, the whole economic situation. Just as it is premature to overestimate the success of Delany last year with which laid-off employees found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not, it is over simple to underestimate the efforts made by Walsh eight years ago because using Walsh, only half of the laid-off workers at that time found jobs within a year. The possible opportunities and job vacancies were at least equivalently vital in these two cases.

Meanwhile, the two cited cases can not make a correct analogy due to two factors. For one thing, it did not happen simultaneously and in the same environment, which is to say, the market of job seeking eight years ago can not be identical to that last year. For another thing, the case of Delany last year did mention it took far less time for those employees to find jobs, but did not clarify how long exactly and what kind of jobs. It is highly possible that they spent more than a year to find unsatisfactory jobs with the help of Delany and Walsh’s clients eight years ago spent less time to find better jobs.

The stated clear superiority of Delany may be amazing and trustworthy, but does it necessarily lead to the triumph of Delany as a personnel company? Its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices can cater for more clients, but the number of clients has nothing to do with its professional quality. Last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine. These differences can not justify its excellence, either. Their clients may in a wide range of industries and each industry vary in its potentiality and requiring positions.

The paragraphs given merely scratches the surface of justifying that XYZ Company would make a mistake to replace Delany with Walsh. Much more considerations and essential elements should be accounted for during this deduction. Without pinpointing overall comparison and ruling out other possible variables, the arguer can not convince anyone of this deduction.

草木也知愁UID：2487572

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wildrose800331UID：2602131

The conclusion reached in this argument that XYZ Company would make a mistake to replace Delany with Walsh seems to be obviously reasonable at the first thought; however, the author fails to consider other elements necessary to evaluate the situation. The fact that last year those laid-off employees found jobs much more quickly with the help of Delany may be true, but it is possibly true with the help from Walsh. Furthermore, the cited case of Walsh eight years ago was not sufficient to corroborate the failure of Walsh regardless of other factors. Besides these two incomplete and weak citations, the evidences given to bolsterDelany "clearly superior"  can not actually render the sound preference of Delany as a better personnel company.

As we know, job seeking involves more than efforts from job seekers and personnel companies but covers the prosperity and requirement of a specific industry as well as much more broadly, the whole economic situation. Just as it is premature to overestimate the success of Delany last year with which laid-off employees found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not, it is over simple to underestimate the efforts made by Walsh eight years ago because using Walsh, only half of the laid-off workers at that time found jobs within a year. The possible opportunities and job vacancies were at least equivalently vital in these two cases.

Meanwhile, the two cited cases can not make a correct analogy due to two factors. For one thing, it did not happen simultaneously and in the same environment, which is to say, the market of job seeking eight years ago can not be identical to that last year. For another thing, the case of Delany last year did mention it took far less time for those employees to find jobs, but did not clarify how long exactly and what kind of jobs. It is highly possible that they spent more than a year to find unsatisfactory jobs with the help of Delany and Walsh’s clients eight years ago spent less time to find better jobs.

The stated clear superiority of Delany may be amazing and trustworthy, but does it necessarily lead to the triumph of Delany as a personnel company? Its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices can cater for more clients, but the number of clients has nothing to do with its professional quality. Last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine. These differences can not justify its excellence, either. Their clients may in a wide range of industries and each industry vary in its potentiality and requiring positions.

The paragraphs given merely scratches the surface of justifying that XYZ Company would make a mistake to replace Delany with Walsh. Much more considerations and essential elements should be accounted for during this deduction. Without pinpointing overall comparison and ruling out other possible variables, the arguer can not convince anyone of this deduction.

kind03UID：3004042

楼主忽略了一个重要的攻击点：就算Delany千好万好，但是他贵啊！为毛一定要选更好的公司啊？他们公司都裁员了还有那么多钱么。。。