[YB-2] 7月9日作业 by 忘了密码的E

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只写了一篇A 还拖到现在

In the memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center (GTGC), he or she pointed out that there a couple of reasons that support the idea of increasing profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds they stock for the coming spring.  By using the result of a national survey and the local magazine sales recently, the author provides a seemingly reasonable thinking procedure, however, these evidences are actually not enough to support the conclusion.

First, the results of the national survey failed to support the conclusion for a couple of reasons. On one hand, it cannot specifically show whether consumers in Green Thumb were satisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. The national trend does not necessarily exist in Green Thumb. Also, even if local consumers were also dissatisfied with the fresh vegetables sold in supermarkets, they do not necessarily want to grow them because there may be other sources that they can get the vegetables they want, directly from local farmers for instance. It is even possible that people would still buy vegetables from supermarket because it is the most convenient way and can save them lots of time. In one word, the national survey does not guarantee that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables.

Secondly, since the arguer did not show what the Great Gardens magazine is all about and if people buy it for guidance or just for fun, it is unwise to draw a conclusion that this showed people’s increasing interests in growing vegetables in their own gardens. To be specific, the Great Gardens may be about how to make the gardens prettier by growing different kinds of flowers and has nothing to do with growing vegetables. Moreover, even if it gives tips on how to grow vegetables in gardens, we still do not know if people will follow them or simply read it and forget it.

In addition, even if both the survey and the sales of the magazine indicate that local people in Green Thumb are now having increasing interest in growing vegetables themselves, whether GTGC can increase its profit by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds stock is still open to discussion. This paragraph did not show any evidence about what kind of vegetables local people like in Green Thumb, thus it would be a rush decision if they just expand the variety.

To sum up, the evidences that backed the arguer’s suggestion that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their own vegetables seems logical. However, the GTGC needs to conduct more locally based surveys about consumers’ attitude towards fresh vegetables in the supermarket and in depth research about the readers of Great Gardens magazine before they decide on whether to expand the variety of vegetable seeds they stock for the coming spring.

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只写了一篇A 还拖到现在

In the memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center (GTGC), he or she pointed out that there a couple of reasons that support the idea of increasing profits by greatl ...
忘了密码的E 发表于 2009-7-10 07:32

组长的这篇A驳斥点都找得不错了，结构安排得也挺好。不足的是觉得句式变化少了些，可以看看写作必背200句，应该会收益不少的。（汗，改你的文章实在是不容易）