Issue121【Triple Week】第1次练习by mymuro

mymuroUID: 2356228

TOPIC: ISSUE121 - "At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species."
WORDS: 505        TIME: 00:45:00         DATE: 2009-7-11 17:13:49

According to the speaker, the phenomenon that many species are currently in danger of going extinct are caused by the natural instead of human activities so the society have justifiable reason not to make extraordinary efforts to save the endangered species. I strongly disagree for the sake that human activities is the main factor leads to many species’ extinction.

Indeed, different kinds of species have appeared and disappeared throughout Earth's history. Some species go extinct due to the changes of the climate they live such as the extinction of dinosaurs and some go extinct for they cannot compete with other species for food. The Darwin's theory of evolution tells people that only the species suit for natural will live in the ecosystem. To balance the ecological, the natural itself will choose the suitable species to survive while others may become extinct. Scientists often call this process "eliminate through selection of contests". Thus, for those extinct naturally, it is unnecessary for human beings to make efforts to save.

Nevertheless, in contemporary society, the main causation to species' extinction is the human activities and thus, human society has the responsibility to save them. According to the recent research published by the Hong Kong University of Science and Technology, the speed of species' extinction accelerate increasingly since the Industrial Revolution, which greatly accelerate the development of modern society and in the meanwhile, destroy the habitats of other species. A habitat, a place where a species normally lives, includes forests, deserts, wetlands and so on.As human society developing, most of habitats are destroyed through human activities. For example, in tropical rain forests, people cut down the trees to build farms, roads as well as cities. As a result, those live in tropical forests become endangered species. Thus, people have the responsibilities to save the endangered species for the sake that their habitats are now destroyed by human activities.

Furthermore, keeping the balance of ecosystem is important for human beings because human, no matter how intelligent, cannot avoid the fact that they are also a member of the ecosystem. Although some species' extinction seems to be none of our business, human themselves are higher level of the food chain, which means the broken part of the lower level will leads to unpredictable harms to human. For instance, certain boring insects (such as the mosquito, fly and so forth) are likely to have no benefit for us, and we must believe that we will live better if the mosquito all over the word disappeared. However, there will be a great number of antibodies that are poured into the human beings' body as a result from the mosquito biting us which increase our immunity from diseases. Then, spend a cost in money and a job to save endangered species is our responsibility.

In the final analysis, as human activities accelerate the extinction of many species, it is the human’s responsibility to save endangered species since human are also a member of the ecosystem and cannot survive without keeping the balance of it.

完美飞行家UID: 2622083

总体来说行文结构清晰，论证的例证也较为新颖，贴切，个人认为有些小的不足之处：
1. 有些地方的表达方式有些口语化的痕迹：如“boring insects ”；
2.个人认为“蚊虫叮咬”用sting会比bite更加贴切；
3.“Then, spend a cost in money and a job to save endangered species is our responsibility.
”一句语法上有些不通顺，改为spending会更高好~
另外，楼主，由于我权限不够，不能够PM给你我的QQ，这里就一并告诉你吧：807693745.谢谢~

mymuroUID: 2356228

谢谢LS建议，麻烦抓紧按格式发布作业帖,以便筛人

至于QQ,其实不着急，等筛完人后我会逐个询问联系方式的- -

完美飞行家UID: 2622083

多谢~

ahngUID: 2605383

TOPIC: ISSUE121 - "At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species."
WORDS: 505        TIME: 00:45:00         DATE: 2009-7-11 17:13:49

According to the speaker, the phenomenon that many species are currently in danger of going extinct are caused by the natural instead of human activities so the society have justifiable reason not to make extraordinary efforts to save the endangered species. I strongly disagree for the sake that human activities is(are) the main factor leads to(of) many species’ extinction.

Indeed, different kinds of species have appeared and disappeared throughout Earth's history. Some species go extinct due to the changes of the climate they live such as the extinction of dinosaurs and some go extinct for they cannot compete with other species for food. The Darwin's theory of evolution tells people that only the species suit for natural will live in the ecosystem. To balance the ecological, the natural itself will choose the suitable species to survive while others may become extinct. Scientists often call this process "eliminate through selection of contests". Thus, for those extinct naturally, it is unnecessary for human beings to make efforts to save.(这段是说对于自然地灭亡，人类不需要花费精力去挽救，写的满好，但是最后一段说的是有必要对濒危生物进行挽救，这可能产生一些小小的矛盾，并不是一个大问题，但我觉得需要作进一步的处理，看上去你的观点应该还是一个求中的观点，就是要分辨出哪些是由于人类造成的，哪些不是，然后对由人类造成的濒危生物进行挽救。)

Nevertheless, in contemporary society, the main causation to species' extinction is the human activities and thus, human society has the responsibility to save them. According to the recent research published by the Hong Kong University of Science and Technology, the speed of species' extinction accelerate increasingly since the Industrial Revolution, which greatly accelerate the development of modern society and in the meanwhile, destroy the habitats of other species. A habitat, a place where a species normally lives, includes forests, deserts, wetlands and so on.As human society developing, most of habitats are destroyed through human activities. For example, in tropical rain forests, people cut down the trees to build farms, roads as well as cities. As a result, those live in tropical forests become endangered species. Thus, people have the responsibilities to save the endangered species for the sake that their habitats are now destroyed by human activities.(这段写的不错！)

Furthermore, keeping the balance of ecosystem is important for human beings because human, no matter how intelligent, cannot avoid the fact that they are also a member of the ecosystem. Although some species' extinction seems to be none of our business, human themselves are higher level of the food chain, which means the broken part of the lower level will leads to unpredictable harms to human. For instance, certain boring insects (such as the mosquito, fly and so forth) are likely to have no benefit for us, and we must believe that we will live better if the mosquito all over the word disappeared. However, there will be a great number of antibodies that are poured into the human beings' body as a result from the mosquito biting us which increase our immunity from diseases. (个人觉得这个例子不大好阿，可以从正面来举例子，比如保护什么动物会对人类有益处，从反面举蚊子消失了对人类有益固然可以支持前面一个子论点，但是，对整个段落的论点不能很好的支持。可以说保护壁虎阿，可以吃掉蚊子，如果他们没了，那么蚊子就越来越多了，我们就囧了。不过我不知道壁虎是不是濒危动物，反正就这个意思了。)Then, spend a cost in money and a job to save endangered species is our responsibility.

In the final analysis, as human activities accelerate the extinction of many species, it is the human’s responsibility to save endangered species since human are also a member of the ecosystem and cannot survive without keeping the balance of it.(恩)

整体行文满好的！