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51The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."

This argument conclude that according to the preliminary result of a study of two groups of patients, the hypothesis of
second infections may keep some patients from healing quickly 'has been proved. And since that, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. This proof idea seems reasonable at first sight while some further reflections reveal that there are several unsubstantiated assumptions which can not make the conclusion persuasively as it stands.

First of all, we can find several points in the study that needs to be explained. As many factors in these two groups have
not been fixed the same, we can seriously doubt the credibility of the study. At the first group, all patients are treated by a
doctor who specialized in sports medicine, while at the second group,all paints are treated by a general doctor who may
be weaker at muscle stain treatment. And the doctor's weakness in this area may cause the slow recuperation. We are
also not sure if the surgeon of the first group has not utilize other useful way to treat his patients besides antibiotics while
this may has a beneficial effort to the healing.

Secondly, we can not find the concrete data about the patients receive treatments in these two groups of the study as
well. For instance if there is only five people recieved treatment in the first group and the  healing time was on average 40
percent quicker than typically. The result may be an accidental event rather than a inevitable result.And this,should not been taken into consideration to support the hypothesis. On the other hand, we are uncertain that whether the patients in
the first or second group have other illness which can effect their recuperation. And if so, the result of the study is really
distrustful.

At last, the medical new letter's opinion through that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well
advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment is narrow and limited. As we all known, different people have different reflection towards antibiotics. Some people are slow with it,some people are even allergic with it.And the abuse
of the antibiotics may bring little benefit or even do harm to the patients' heal.

For my part, the medical newsletter should do some more accurate, deeper and wilder studies before it made conclusion.
And even if the results show clearly that antibiotics is good to the treatment of muscle stain. Doctors should also have a
think before they give the antibiotics to the patients.

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51The following appeared in a medical newsletter.
"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."

This argument conclude(concludes) that according to the preliminary result of a study of two groups of patients, the hypothesis of
second infections may keep some patients from healing quickly 'has been proved.(概括的很好) And since that(in that case), all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. This proof idea seems reasonable at first sight while some further reflections reveal that there are several unsubstantiated assumptions which can not make the conclusion persuasively(persuasive) as it stands.

First of all, we can find several points in the study that needs to be explained. As many factors in these two groups have
not been fixed the same, we can seriously doubt the credibility of the study. At the first group, all patients are treated by a
doctor who specialized in sports medicine, while at the second group,all paints are treated by a general doctor who may
be weaker at muscle stain treatment. And the doctor's weakness in this area may cause the slow recuperation. We are
also not sure if the surgeon of the first group has not utilize(utilized any) other useful way to treat his patients besides antibiotics while
this may has a beneficial effort to the healing.

Secondly, we can not find the concrete data about the patients receive treatments in these two groups of the study as
well.(其实这个也是several points in the study) For instance if there is only five people recieved treatment in the first group and the  healing time was on average 40 percent quicker than typically. The result may be an accidental event rather than a inevitable result.And this,should not been taken into consideration to support the hypothesis. On the other hand, we are(it is) uncertain that whether the patients in the first or second group have other illness which can effect(affect) their recuperation. And if so, the result of the study is really distrustful.

At last, the medical new letter's opinion through that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well
advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment is narrow and limited. As we all known, different people have different reflection towards antibiotics. Some people are slow with it,some people are even allergic with it.And the abuse
of the antibiotics may bring little benefit or even do harm to the patients' heal.

For my part, the medical newsletter should do some more accurate, deeper and wilder studies before it made conclusion.
And even if the results show clearly that antibiotics is good to the treatment of muscle stain. Doctors should also have a
think before they give the antibiotics to the patients.

关键的驳斥大方向基本抓住了，列举的逻辑比较好，但是具体展开的时候有些欠缺，语言上还可以进一步提高。