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otherwise hidden ideas 就是本来会被掩盖的东西。那就是只有arts可以搞定的，所以题目说非它不可。我就要证明其它的也可。

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8# wk4a
TOPIC: ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
1：石制刀具和哈勃望远镜都是技术，也就是都只是人们用来改造世界的工具，是被社会习俗和道德所决定的，而非决定它们。
2：诚然，技术能非常大地改变世界，深刻地影响着人们的衣食住行和价值观念。
3：社会的价值观是由多方面影响的，没有那个单一的方面能决定。
4：事实上科技已经不仅仅是生产力的方式和工具了，它已经是社会习俗和价值的一部分。人们选择怎么去生产，去应用技术，都体现了社会的价值观。两者是相互交叉相互影响的。
5：社会是如此复杂而不能简单的划分成某几部分，更无法被某个东西简单决定着。
From a stone knife to Hubble telescope, any thing that could be made use of to improve the conductivity of society could be called technology, whether primitive or high-tech. Throughout history, technology has severed a vital role to influence the progress of human society profoundly, from daily lives to hidden social customs and ethics. But the importance of technology can never be exaggerated to an extent that it can determine the social traditions and moral values.（开头不错不错）

Admittedly, our world has been changed forever thanks to technology. Since the very moment human beings started to make use of nature source to improve their living quality, history course（这个怎么解释） has transferred form a village path to an expressway. People have been brought closer than ever before to live in metropolises, thus also gradually change their social behaviors and value systems. For example, there is no sense of private for cavemen who usually live in caves or thatch sheds. But in contemporary society, living in separated apartment, everyone is so concerned about their own space and try not to offense others' private. This manner is regarded decent in nowadays while nonsense in prehistory. Such a remarkable difference is ingenerated in the development of architecture and civil engineering technology. Since people have needs for private space and acquired sense of shame, relevant technology would be developed to meet them.
（space 这个观点老美看了应该喜欢）
However, it would be to rash to draw the conclusion that technologies actually determine social customs and moral and ethic standards. Social lives are composed not by some single factor but various ones which as a whole to overwhelmingly influence every aspect of society. Geographic condition（题外话~你在好多篇都提到地理条件，我argument时都想不到的，看来专业背景不一样啊）, for instance, is a significant reason that causes many interesting divergences in different areas in one country. People in north China are usually more frank and straightforward as they live on the vast plain and strew seeds roughly, followed with little cultivation. Farming seems quite simple and direct for them. While in the north（south啦） where is mountainous and of abundant rainfall, farmers have to take care of their crops with much care. Farmers in the southern China usually spend most of their time in cultivation; such a living style contributes to their exquisite and delicate characteristic.（这个南北对比excellent！） Many other significant factors like this have greatly contributed to the social characteristics, left technology even a relatively trifle element in shaping people’s value habits and lives.

Actually, technology has been so essential to society that it is not just how people make and use tools to transform the world; it is already a part of social customs and values. Human beings naturally adore power, speed and height. To satisfy theses interests, we can see Lamborghini roaring on the roads; we can find Spider Man and the Transformers in science fiction, we can also finally step on the moon to enjoy the scenes of the earth. Technology reveals the inner desire of society. Conversely, social interest and values influence technology intensely. Most countries are highly concerned about the result of chaotic ethics if let loose of the development of human cloning. Though this technology is of great essence to cure many fatal diseases, unexpected side effects would be brought to society as well. It is the social value that stimulates and constrains technology.

Complex and delicate as a society is, it can not be simply cataloged into pieces, nor can be determines by some independent factor. Social traditions and values have been forming in a relative long time and constantly changing, and keep interacting with its influencing factors.

条例很清楚，也加了一些生动的例子，这篇我觉得很不错。
从你的几篇文章我学到了一点：社会很复杂，任何问题都有很多原因。

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我现在在看北美范文的131，它写艺术反应的是艺术家的个人情趣而非社会理念。

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131果然是难题，很多地方可以展开，就怕隔靴搔痒没找到考官要的点。

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16# wk4a
我查了下WEBSTER，Ohterwise有几种形式，pron., adv., adj.;
pron.肯定排除，
按语法考虑adv.是说得通的。
adv.
1. in a different way or manner
2. in different circumstances
3. in other respects
4. if not
5. not

你的理解是3. in other respects

ok~这种解释还是最顺的，我得再琢磨下题目~

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18# wk4a
北美那人我觉得看得有点窄

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我的北美范文版本都没这题，issue只到124

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10# lele77521
No one can deny the great attribution made by technologies to human society，in fact, technologies have played an indispensable role in everyday life, including influence the social customs and ethics. However, the speaker（这么诡异呢~） holds the idea that technology determines social traditions and morals, which apparently exaggerate the function of technology.

Undoubtedly, the most changes and creations are attributed to the application of technologies, which influence our traditional customs. Some forms of technology have become so well established that it is possible to forget the great scientific achievements that they represent. Such as automobiles, airplanes, cell phones, all which make our life conveniently. Moreover, it is internet（专有名词大写） that changes our life fundamentally. The convenience of communicating makes the world smaller than ever before. People need not to get together to hold meeting nowadays, in many big companies, they hold meeting online, which saving much cost and time. Individuals who are busy will not worry about they have no time to go shopping, they just need a computer and a mouse, all the problems will be solved, just waiting open your door and receive whatever you desire. We can also relax on internet, chatting online with our friends, parents, or reading so-called e-books.
（这段写人们生活改变）
In（To） some extent, technology exerts significant effect in the history of mankind, even including their morals. First, some of the technological advances like above-mentioned that make life easier or more enjoyable have proved to have unwanted and often unexpected long-term effects. Individual would be not care of the other people, which will enlarge the distance between human beings. Two closed friends will be feel stranger when they are talking personally for the reason that they have accustomed chatting on line.
（这段写了科技带来的弊端之一）
It is particularly true in the fields of medicine. Take cloning as an example, which gives scientists the unprecedented power to bring about new life. At the other extreme, the nuclear weapon, the most destructive weapons that the world has ever known. All of which are the ‘fruits’ of hi-technology that may result in disasters far beyond our control. （这点很好，应该展开来写，不该就3句）
（这依然是弊端，但是两段弊端之间的衔接不够紧）

Admittedly, technologies have made great contribution to our society and influence the social traditions and morals, someone even believe that technology determines a society customs and ethics. In fact, there are a lot of complex factors, such as culture, history, and believes（beliefs） and so on, all of which eventually formed a society’s customs and morals. If we suppose technology would determine the customs and ethics, what is the world like? All human are experiencing nearly the same technology, they should share the same hobbies and morals.（这个极端取得好！）
（这段观点好，考虑其他方面）
It is apparent that technology have changed the whole world, influencing mankind’s traditions and morals, but the customs and ethics that determined by complex factors in different countries are still develop accord to their own way.

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我的有，不过那样写有点偏啊。ETS似乎喜欢自圆其说的本事，只要不离体。

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13# wk4a
obviously, you are describing ordinary people's lives and their customs vividly, which are less relavent with "otherwise hidden ideas and impulse". I do not think you fully developed the topic, though I do not know how either.
我应该把那painting删掉，把希腊神话扩充点。
Ah Q is a excellent example just like Greek Mythology, but it could have bee better if you describe them as "not so obvious”
我没懂你后半句话~用母语吧~
I think it is better to bring in some other forms of expression to reveal social values.
Yeah~u r right~

困了~先去睡了~脑子都要转不动了~

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The most common usage of word is 'art' in daily life. However, what's the definition of art on earth?   Art, in my opinion, is something that stimulates an individual’s thoughts, emotions, beliefs, or ideas through the sense. It is also an expression of an idea and it can take many different forms and serve many different purposes. According to the task of the art, we can find that the author's idea is incomplete that arts reflect the hidden ideas and impulses of our society. I hold the opinion that art as a main form reflect every corner of the whole society in a unique way.
这个题目讨论艺术是否揭示本会被隐藏的东西，你反而扩大到全社会了，没有抓住应该讨论“是否揭示那些不易察觉的东西”。
Admittedly, there are some artworks which reflect the hidden idea and impulse in the past. Artistic works have existed for almost as long as humankind, from early pre-historic art to contemporary art. So it is really reveal some hidden ideas and impulses of the society. Here I will take poem, a traditional form of art to support my viewpoint. Because the human society is a process from wildness to civilization, people at that time have no right to deliver their opinion or their expectation publicly. They had to depend on the form of poem to show their inner activities, which indirectly reflect their discontent with the society. Consequently, a lot of poets such as Libai, Dufu create many pomes, which were the valuable spirit wealth in Chinese history.

In nowadays, with the development of human civilization, art has permeated to all fields of human society and reflected everything in this colorful world. Architectures vividly embodied the development of a society and the story at that time. The Great Wall, one of the world’s famous constructions, is symbolizing China's ancient civilization; the statue of liberty embodies the spirit of freedom. There are countless famous architectures indicating the long process of human society, we may consider that it is the art of architecture records the history in a unique way. Further more, the famous building-Bird’s Nest would be help us to remind of the 2008 Olympics. We have to admit the charming of the art make this world full of art atmosphere.

In addition, art has already as a way of individuals realize their dream, which also reveals that people can convey their thought, value, emotion in their works. We can clearly find that the function of art is to convey inner idea, feelings, and image, then influence those people who love them. Art, such as music, painting, literature, can increase our happiness and help us relax both in physical and mental. And in turn, these art works not only reflect our aesthetic choice, but also the trend of a society’s progress.

In the end, artistic works, whether their forms are music, painting, literature, or architecture, are revealing every aspects of the whole world. Human society is art mirrored by all kinds of art form.

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No one can deny the great attribution made by technologies to human society，in fact, technologies have played an indispensable role in everyday life, including influence the social customs and ethics. However, the speaker holds the idea that technology determines social traditions and morals, which apparently exaggerate the function of technology.
恩，开头表述的不错，虽然有那么点模板的痕迹，不过很流畅。
Undoubtedly, the most changes and creations are attributed to the application of technologies, which influence our traditional customs. Some forms of technology have become so well established that it is possible to forget the great scientific achievements that they represent. Such as automobiles, airplanes, cell phones, all which make our life conveniently. Moreover, it is internet that changes our life fundamentally. The convenience of communicating makes the world smaller than ever before. People need not to get together to hold meeting nowadays, in many big companies, they hold meeting online, which saving much cost and time. Individuals who are busy will not worry about they have no time to go shopping, they just need a computer and a mouse, all the problems will be solved, just waiting open your door and receive whatever you desire. We can also relax on internet, chatting online with our friends, parents, or reading so-called e-books.
细节例子很多，但是要是抓住一两个来着重讨论会更好。
In some extent, technology exerts significant effect in the history of mankind, even including their morals. First, some of the technological advances like above-mentioned that make life easier or more enjoyable have proved to have unwanted and often unexpected long-term effects. Individual would be not care of the other people, which will enlarge the distance between human beings. Two closed friends will be feel stranger when they are talking personally for the reason that they have accustomed chatting on line.
第一段说exaggerate，那就应该说出夸张之处，而不是说缺点了。
It is particularly true in the fields of medicine. Take cloning as an example, which gives scientists the unprecedented power to bring about new life. At the other extreme, the nuclear weapon, the most destructive weapons that the world has ever known. All of which are the ‘fruits’ of hi-technology that may result in disasters far beyond our control.
还是缺点。和首段不符合。
Admittedly, technologies have made great contribution to our society and influence the social traditions and morals, someone even believe that technology determines a society customs and ethics. In fact, there are a lot of complex factors, such as culture, history, and believes and so on, all of which eventually formed a society’s customs and morals. If we suppose technology would determine the customs and ethics, what is the world like? All human are experiencing nearly the same technology, they should share the same hobbies and morals.
恩，这一段不错哦，可以把历史什么的细化来写，以论证技术是被夸张了的。
It is apparent that technology have changed the whole world, influencing mankind’s traditions and morals, but the customs and ethics that determined by complex factors in different countries are still develop accord to their own way.

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22# emily_feifei

你好像只交了一篇啊？难道是我眼花了？

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28# wk4a
是啊~上课阶段一天写不了2篇I~

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131"The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
1: 艺术一直为人们所追捧，正是由于其表达手段的有效和丰富，包含了大量审美情趣，对世界的认知，个人立场等平时很难表达出来的情感。
2：艺术只是一个供人们释放情感的工具，没有艺术，情感依旧在，也会找到其它途径来释放，从而在另一个方面展示社会内在的理念和情感冲动。
3：社会是由人聚集，分工合作而形成的，一个社会的任何内在情感和思想都一点点体现在人身上，只要人去表达自己，我们就可以探究社会，而不一定要通过那些经过高度提取和抽象再借其它符号表达出来的艺术

What if we live in a world without any museum, gallery, and theater? Will it be a society of backwater that people are so depressed that no available channel to release emotions and ideas? Absolutely not. What are hidden inside people's minds as a whole composes general ideas and impulses of a society, and they can always find ways to be found, not just via arts.

Throughout history, numerous genius artists have combined their talents and experience to create marvelous paintings, sculptures, music, literature and so forth. Any of these master piece is highly appreciated and carefully taken care of, in hope of that they can last forever to offer unfailing values. The reason behind the enthusiasm for arts is obvious-arts as a tool of efficiency of abundance, containing much aesthetic value and cognition about the world, help people to reveal otherwise hardly expressed emotions and opinions. Avant-garde artists, for example, tend to express their criticism and apprehension by various seemingly absurd performance and works. They might wear costumes attached with many feathers, and close themselves in bird cages. Such weird behaviorism only tries to show discontent against caging birds in zoos. Artists usually prefer impressive means to show their ideas and impulses, which usually reveal the unfamiliar characteristics of society.-->Art, as a form of expression, serves to reveal people’s ideas and notions towards outside worlds, whether it is agreeable or shocking.

However, as a form of language to express and describe, the importance of art should never be exaggerated to an indispensable degree. If, at the very beginning of human being started to think and create, no any art is ever created, the inner emotions and values of people would not thus disappear or eliminated. Strong impulses and expression needs will eventually compel common public to find some other channels to release their thoughts. Or perhaps people would develop available tools like public speeches or debates to directly fully let loose the deep inside parts in human minds, which also represent most concealed emotional corners of society.  Anyway, nothing would naturally disappear or hidden as a result of lack of realization means. Common people may not write a delightful melody or draw bright-colored oil painting when full of exhilaration, but they may sing aloud and write down the feeling and mail it friends; although that can not be called art and by doing which can not make them artists, they are trying to express their emotions.

Every single society is composed by individuals who work and live together, ingenerating complex and exquisite rational ideas and emotional impulses. All of these thoughts, evident or hidden, are vividly expressed by people's words, writings, apparels, habits, and all kinds of social activities. As long as we careful observe these interesting details, the general value system, moral and ethical standard can be easily revealed. The detailed law system in the US, for example, has clearly and exactly prescribe people's behaviors to the extremely extend. Such delicate law system is base on the disbelief on human nature and the confidence on the efficiency of a reliable system. It is not necessary, also impossible, for artists try to represent such a value behind the law system which is legislated to ensure the freedom and rights of the public. Although it is agreeable for people to enjoy and study arts which celebrate freedom and rights, the function of arts is limited and never requisite.-->  Without doubt, the law system can not be called art, but it does reveal the most fundamental value shared by the people in the States.

Thanks to our greatest musicians, painters and novelists, we have enjoyed so much profound aesthetic experience and exciting sympathy. We are also able to read through society to understand many ideas and impulses in it. But all these arts are the results of the need for expression which can be released by various means. In all, any part of a society can be never hidden, but in different forms.

附：
The otherwise hidden values revealed by arts, in other words, without arts, some social ideas could never be found out, are actually never hidden, or we will be even unaware of their existence. In this case, it is better to ignore those unrevealed ones, but examine these expressed values through arts to see if they have other forms of expression.-->这句话绕不绕？