Issue87 第二篇习作，渴求狠拍，必回

DidasWUID: 2666962

TOPIC: ISSUE87 - "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
WORDS: 543          TIME: 00:59:15          DATE: 2009/7/29 21:44:38
Admittedly, nowadays, we find science journals, magazines, and newspapers are full of articles telling us that some young brilliant brain has made some breakthroughs or new and significant discoveries, but can we conclude that the experts are not as good as beginners in making important discoveries?

The core of the scientific methods is to left enough room in one's brain to doubt and at the same time to accepted the fresh foundings, which were proved to be true, sincerely. From that point of view, we may conclude that any proposition which is either too arbitary or too absolute is potentially fallacious. So when the first time I encounter the statement above, the word "any" made me feel sorry for the proposition, which could have made much more sense if instilled with more cogency and balance.

Firstly, the situation differs from area to area. For a scientist, maybe beginners have more curiosity and passion than the experienced experts and are seem to make bigger breakthroughs as for science, in a certain degree,  "imagination is more important than knowledge"(A.Einstein). But what about other subjects such as archeology? Time and time again numerous acient relics were disintered by highly experienced experts while the beginners even don't realize that there maybe something valuable lied deep under the cover of dust in that territory. By that example I want to convey that there are some areas in which the experience and the long-term familarity to the subject  is itself the irreplacable value, and one cannot make crucial discoveries without being an expert first.

What is more? Even in the domain of science, which were sometimes considered imagination and youth comes first, the neophytes are not absolutely better capable of finding new things. Take my major, physics, for instance, when M. Planck, famous for his fundamental contribution to the foundation of the quantum theory, which were considered as one of the most critical discoveries of the 20th century, published his discovery in 1900, he was already in his fourties and was already an expert in his area. At the same time, take another great phenomenon of physics for example, A. Einstein, publish his theories in his middle-twenty as a strange name to the whole world of physics. Examples show the same meanings I can find a dozen: 1994 Nobel prize owner, John Nash made his breakthrough of game theory in his  doctoral treatise when he was 22, while another great economist Adam Smith, finish writing his book The Wealth of  Nations at the age of 53, being professor for around twenty years. So, through careful observation and cogitation, we could find that maybe what makes the difference is not being an expert or beginner but the dedication to one's own persuits, the open mind to new things, and the ever-burning passion  in one's heart.

In sum, I think it's clear that we should grasp the very essence of making new discovery: with respect and prudence to the experiences provided, one should keep an open mind to whatever make sense and empty his own strength into the pursuit of development. I have faith that when we find the balance, with years of devotion maybe, we will make it big sooner or later, no matter we are neophytes or experts.

DivineUID: 2650173

1 breakthroughs or new and significant discoveries 意思有点重复 而且第一段以反问结束 没有清楚地阐明主题
2 第二段仅仅是要说最后一句，就是any用得不恰当，用了一段，有点太多了，可以考虑并到第一段，而且写any不合适的原因太抽象了 不如直接说太武断
3 正文两段的论点比较重复，例子举得太多，降低了文章的可读性 作者是想持平衡观点，就是新手和专家都能做出重大发现，但主要篇幅没有集中在论述，分析两种人的优缺点 而是举大量名人例子，引用名言。其实beginner和expert的最主要区别是前者没有后者的经验，而不是他们更有好奇心和激情，这应该是可以写一段论述的，可以用来支持新手。
4 总之文章基础架构有了，但主论点，分论点不明确，内容有些空洞 楼主请继续努力~欢迎互改

DidasWUID: 2666962

2# Divine


多谢多谢。
确实觉得好像自己写在直接比较上的文字太少了点。其实想写的意思是
1.有些学科里面，专家就是比新手更容易有突破，不如考古。
2.即使在那些我们认为似乎年轻人是生力军的科学里面，新手有创意有时候也只是表面现象
3.比较发现，其实做出重大突破的条件是要有足够的宽容，足够的眼界和持续的激情。专家被误解为不能更好做出突破，是因为很多专家慢慢不够宽容，而且激情也随年龄和生活而衰退了。

本来想主要写的是第三段，但是写完发现，居然基本没有直接写。例子堆的太多了。
多谢你的提醒，incisive！

DivineUID: 2650173

恩 对对 最重要是一定要分析专家和新手各自的长处短处 再辅以好的例子分一定不会低的

DivineUID: 2650173

有时间请帮我看看
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... age=1#pid1773028629
谢谢~