2009 进军美利坚作文组 wondersmiths2第二次作业

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8.13 Some people think it's more important to spend more time working than being with family，

With the advent of industrialization and urbanization, the life paces of modern people are getting faster and faster. Most people virtually cannot have plenty of time to spend with their families when they return their home with exhausted bodies after a day-long work. So, when it comes to which one is more important to deserve more time to spend, work or family, I will choose family with no hesitation.

It should be admitted that career plays an very important role in our lives. People have to work and earn money to support their family, and also for some people, they work for their interests and dreams and additionally they can obtain others’ respects and the sense of accomplishment.

However, job is job, but it is not life. Such is human nature that our homes are recognized as our mental and emotional harbors. Hence, we cannot merely pay attentions on our jobs and spend much less time on family, which can lead to a broken family. Taking my uncle as example, since he is a workaholic and seldom stay at home with his children and wife, he even doesn’t know how old his children are and often miss their birthdays. Eventually his wife cannot tolerate this boring and lonely life so that she gives my uncle a divorce. A happy family becomes broken totally because of too little family time. This case is not rare.

Moreover, it is widely accepted that family can serve as a natural stress reducer. For instance, when you sit and eat together around the table with your family members, when you watch TV and chat with your parents or siblings, when you play with your cute and smart children, you must have the feeling of happiness and get yourself away from worries and troubles in your life. Therefore, a harmonious family can help you regain the confidences and energy of work and thus make your work more successful.

In conclusion, although work can help us earn money and satisfaction of success, spending more time on family still should be attached more importance since family enables us to enjoy the recovery of body, the peace of soul, and the happiness of life.

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:loveliness:写得相当好啊~我一口气读下来的@@

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With the advent of industrialization and urbanization, the life paces of modern people are getting faster and faster. Most people virtually cannot have plenty of time to spend with their families when they return their home with exhausted bodies after a day-long work. So, when it comes to which one is more important to deserve more time to spend （on）, work or family, I will choose family with no hesitation.  感觉可以这句去掉be more important to 结构，直接用deserve more

It should be admitted that career plays an (a) very important role in our lives. People have to work and earn money to support their family, and also for some people, they work for their interests and dreams and additionally they can obtain others’ respects and the sense of accomplishment.这句结构稍微有些长

However, job is job, but it is not life. Such is好 human nature that our homes are recognized as our mental and emotional harbors. Hence, we cannot merely pay attentions on（to） our jobs and spend much less time on family, which can lead to a broken family. Taking my uncle as example, since he is a workaholic and seldom stay（stays） at home with his children and wife, he even doesn’t know how old his children are and often miss their birthdays. Eventually his wife cannot tolerate this boring and lonely life so that she gives my uncle a divorce. A happy family becomes broken totally because of too little family time. This case is not rare.
身边例子支持论点，不错，好像该用过去时态？

Moreover, it is widely accepted that family can serve as a natural stress reducer. For instance, when you sit and eat together around the table with your family members, when you watch TV and chat with your parents or siblings, when you play with your cute and smart children, you must have the feeling of happiness and get yourself away from worries and troubles in your life. Therefore, a harmonious family can help you regain the confidences and energy of work and thus make your work more successful.   句句都好

In conclusion, although work can help us earn money and satisfaction of success, spending more time on family still should be attached （to） more importance since family enables us to enjoy the recovery of body, the peace of soul, and the happiness of life.

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1# wondersmiths2

好牛好牛的作文 我都看不出来哪里可以改了 务必教教我把大哥 我作文一般般的 而且看了你帮我改的 我也大有收获的 谢谢！~