寄托天下
查看: 945|回复: 5
打印 上一主题 下一主题

[活动] 进军美利坚作文 我是翠花8.18作业 [复制链接]

Rank: 8Rank: 8

声望
867
寄托币
16335
注册时间
2009-7-10
精华
0
帖子
112

IBT Zeal Cancer巨蟹座

跳转到指定楼层
楼主
发表于 2009-8-19 14:15:35 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Teacher’s salary

晚了不说而且字数还很少的...批评吧

Every student has his/her talent in various areas. Some could master math without effort but others may not. Beside that, the background of student also would have some influence on their studying. There are several reasons to explain a student’s ability instead of his/her teacher. Therefore, it is not reasonable to make criteria of teacher’s salary based on student’s studying. This article is discussing it in the following passages.

Students’ abilities cannot prove that it is due to teaching from teachers. In China, there are 40 even more students in one class because of large population. Several of their grades should not be strong enough to support a teacher. Probably it may bring a reputation for them but could not be the basic condition for teacher’s payment. For instance, a student who was born in a musician family could be quipped the gift in playing music instrument. In Christmas or New Years’ party he/she may have excellent performance, which brings an honor for the class. So it is not fair for other staff if the teacher has higher salary due to that genius student. It will cause jealousy and argument among teachers. So student who has strong ability should not be equal to teacher’s professional work.

For the rest of students, they might be in a prejudice situation. When a benefit of one student bring teacher good payment, it is easier for teacher to put them in a favorable position. One student did not finish homework or late for class will not be criticized with their special gifts. That will cause the rest of those a negative feeling to the school work. It is more serious than how much salary the teacher makes. When students lose interests in academic program, it will be harmful for themselves and country’s future. Like an old saying goes: the youngster’s ability represent the nation.

In conclusion, according to students’ capacity to maintain teacher’s payment will not be a wise decision. For the reason is that it will lead to a disadvantage consequence for both teachers and students. Also, teachers should understand they cannot depend on students for higher salary.
0 0

使用道具 举报

Rank: 1

声望
0
寄托币
58
注册时间
2009-3-20
精华
0
帖子
0
沙发
发表于 2009-8-19 19:33:05 |只看该作者
Every student has his/her talent in various areas. Some could master math without effort but others may not. Beside (是不是Besides)that, the background 这个单词用的不妥吧,还是talent比较好of student(单复数) also would have some influence on their studying. There are several reasons to explain a student’s ability instead of his/her teacher. Therefore, it is not reasonable to make (a) criteria of teacher’s salary based on student’s studying. This article is discussing it in the following passages.1 c% |6 `+ ], f0 N

Students’ abilities cannot prove that it is due to teaching from teachers. In China, there are 40 (or) even more students in one class because of large population. Several of their grades should not be strong enough to support a teacher.(这句没看懂) Probably it may bring a reputation for them but could not be the basic condition for teacher’s(单复数) payment. For instance, a student who was born in a musician family could be quipped the gift in playing music(musical ) instrument. In Christmas or New Years’ party he/she may have excellent performance, which brings an honor for the class. So it is not fair for other staff if the teacher has higher salary (单复数)due to that genius student. It will cause jealousy and argument among teachers. So student who has strong ability should not be equal to teacher’s (单复数)professional work.! _/ y1 {/ x* _: Z% s7 B
* F2 A4 [$ A1 L9 v: H; s/ {- s

For the rest of students, they might be in a prejudice situation. When a benefit of one student bring teacher good payment, it is easier for teacher (单复数)to put them in a favorable position. One student did not finish homework or late for class will not be criticized with (with改成because of是否更好)their special gifts. That will cause the rest of those a negative feeling to(on是否更好) the school work. It is more serious than how much salary the teacher makes(gets是否更好). When students lose interests in academic program(单复数), it will be harmful for themselves and country’s(单复数) future. Like an old saying goes: the youngster’s ability represent the nation.

D
In conclusion, according to students’ capacity to maintain teacher’s payment will not be a wise decision. For(是否多余) the reason is that it will lead to a disadvantage consequence for both teachers and students. Also, teachers should understand they cannot depend on students (依赖学生还是依赖学生的表现)for higher salary(单复数).


句子表达不是很顺,单词用的不是很恰当,还有单复数要多加注意。同组的另一个人写的较好,句式变换较多,我们可以共同借鉴下。

使用道具 举报

Rank: 8Rank: 8

声望
867
寄托币
16335
注册时间
2009-7-10
精华
0
帖子
112

IBT Zeal Cancer巨蟹座

板凳
发表于 2009-8-19 22:38:47 |只看该作者
老师和薪水我是没想泛指所有都用单数. 2段用了几个because of , due to 所以这个就用的介词. 都一样.嘿嘿 你辛苦了

使用道具 举报

Rank: 2

声望
1
寄托币
166
注册时间
2009-5-28
精华
0
帖子
1
地板
发表于 2009-8-20 12:16:13 |只看该作者
来晚了来晚了 马上改

使用道具 举报

Rank: 2

声望
1
寄托币
166
注册时间
2009-5-28
精华
0
帖子
1
5
发表于 2009-8-20 12:34:21 |只看该作者
Every student has his/her talent in various areas(用fields). Some could master math without effort but others may not. Beside that(不要that), the background of student(s) also would have some influence on their studying. There are several reasons to explain a student’s ability instead of his/her teacher. 这句有问题Therefore, it is not reasonable to make criteria of teacher’s salary based on student’s(s’) studying. This article is discussing it in the following passages.(用demonstrations 或者enumerations)
" Y  i! p5 \% o3 f2 U" R! ^
Students’ abilities cannot prove that it is due to teaching from teachers. In China, there are 40 even more students in one class because of large population. Several of their grades should not be strong enough to support a teacher. Probably it may bring a reputation for them but could not be the basic condition for teacher’s payment. For instance, a student who was born in a musician family could be quipped the gift in playing music instrument(s). In Christmas or New Years’ party he/she may have excellent performance, which brings an honor for the class. So it is not fair for other staff(s) if the teacher has higher salary due to that genius student. It will cause(give rise to 稍微高级点) jealousy and argument among teachers. So student who has strong ability should not be equal to teacher’s professional work.2 h3 b7 J( U' ^2 e5 u" W( n

For the rest of students, they might be in a prejudice situation. When a benefit of one student bring teacher good payment, it is easier for teacher to put them(it吧?) in a favorable position. One(A) student (who 不加who你的句子是错的)did not finish homework or late for class will not be criticized with(不能用with ) their special gifts. That will cause the rest of those a negative feeling to the school work. It is more serious than how much salary the teacher makes(gains). When students lose interests in academic program, it will be harmful for themselves and country’s future. Like an old saying goes: the youngster’s ability represent the nation.
. l* Z; B: C7 V7 C+ U6 D( ]
In conclusion(最好别用这个 大家都用), according to students’ capacity to maintain teacher’s payment will not be a wise decision. For(不要 它) the reason is that it will lead to a disadvantage consequence for both teachers and students. Also, teachers should understand they cannot depend on students for higher salary.

第二点好像有点跑题了 注意单复数的用法 还有介词的用法

使用道具 举报

Rank: 2

声望
1
寄托币
166
注册时间
2009-5-28
精华
0
帖子
1
6
发表于 2009-8-20 12:35:13 |只看该作者
??我在WORD里都打红了啊 怎么这里没有啊???

使用道具 举报

RE: 进军美利坚作文 我是翠花8.18作业 [修改]

问答
Offer
投票
面经
最新
精华
转发
转发该帖子
进军美利坚作文 我是翠花8.18作业
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-997870-1-1.html
复制链接
发送
回顶部