ISSUE 212 求拍，有拍必应，拍不嫌多

roughmanUID: 2685617

212 "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."

The speaker asserts that goals can be achieved by any means only if it is valuable as worthwhile one. I concede possible reasons in some rare and extreme situation, by using any means to attain the goal which may influence the future of the whole world and human being. However, few possibility indicates the casual correlation between means and goal and it may appear to be partial.  

Recall the movie " World War". In the film, the director depicts a world are facing one extreme hazardous situation that our world are inundated and doomed to disappear and human's safety are being challenged. Or recall the disaster in the film " The Day After Tomorrow". Among the films tainted with crisis endangering the whole human, we may feel to fight against by using possibly extreme methods. Even at the cost of great loss, it may be overshadowed by human's extinction or the perilous Earth. Although these appear to be imaginary works based on fake stories, it can still verify some reasonability to use some extreme methods supported by the speaker.

Yet, under most of circumstances, these situations may hardly appear. Human cannot dispassionately imagine the danger essentially by using any means. For instance, on international level, war between two countries requires one side to pay costs to resist invader. But if such means by resisting invaders are the devastation to invading country's populace by using nuclear weapon, the importance and the aftermath will appear to be unbalanced. Or we may look no further example to our social development, especially in some developing countries. Industrialization is a valuable goal but every means to achieve are not necessarily acceptable. By cost of pollution to the nature or bringing health problems to citizen demonstrates the worthless of the goal. After all, in common sense, the overall health of citizen are much more important than the extent they are wealthy.

Furthermore, on a personal level, hardly can we orientate one goal of our lifetime is so important that every methods can be applied in order to achieve. For example, deception to other people or possible crime cannot be proved as a right approach to success despite it may help easily. Or we may look for academic success in the future, by the cost of personal health, happiness and sustainability is not advocated to be worthwhile. More importantly, personal well-being is much decided by the means we accept rather than the goal we may achieve.

In a common setting of social development or personal growing up, goals and means are more interdependent. Mutually, one acceptable means to achieve one goal is wise and one fair goal supported by adoptable means is rational. Dividing goal and means tarnish the excitement when we attain one goal and harm the reasonability of one means.

In sum, the speaker's assertion is too extreme to accept unless one world is facing great danger of extinction as the stories fear. In a common setting, goals instruct the means but means verify the goal. Both of the two sides are fairly interdependent and interconnected. Balancing goals and means strengthens the necessary procedure of achieving one goal and its approach.

wdassfmUID: 2542447

The speaker asserts that goals can be achieved by any means only if it is valuable as worthwhile one. I concede possible reasons in some rare and extreme situation, by using any means to attain the goal which may influence the future of the whole world and human being. (这句没有看懂) However, few possibility indicates the casual correlation between means and goal and it may appear to be partial.  

Recall the movie " World War". In the film, the director depicts a world are facing one extreme hazardous situation that our world are inundated and doomed to disappear and human's safety are being challenged. Or recall the disaster in the film " The Day After Tomorrow". Among the films tainted with crisis endangering the whole human, we may feel to fight against by using possibly extreme methods. Even at the cost of great loss, it may be overshadowed by human's extinction or the perilous Earth.（额~这句也没看懂） Although these appear to be imaginary works based on fake stories, it can still verify some reasonability to use some extreme methods supported by the speaker.

Yet, under most of circumstances, these situations may hardly appear. Human cannot dispassionately imagine the danger essentially by using any means.
（额~这句也没看懂） For instance, on international level, war between two countries requires one side to pay costs to resist invader. But if such means by resisting invaders are the devastation to invading country's populace by using nuclear weapon, the importance and the aftermath will appear to be unbalanced. Or we may look no （for?）further example to our social development, especially in some developing countries. Industrialization is a valuable goal but every means to achieve are not necessarily acceptable. By cost of pollution to the nature or bringing health problems to citizen demonstrates the worthless(adj.) of the goal. After all, in common sense, the overall health of citizen are much more important than the extent they are wealthy.(两个例子很简明，学习了~)

Furthermore, on a personal level, hardly can we orientate one goal of our lifetime (that) is so important that every methods can be applied in order to achieve(it). For example, deception to other people or possible crime cannot be proved as a right approach to success despite it may help easily.(第一个例子似乎不大合适，或者可以先提一下虽然追求个人财富是正确的) Or we may look for academic success in the future, by(at) the cost of personal health, happiness and sustainability is not advocated to be worthwhile. More importantly, personal well-being is much decided by the means we accept rather than the goal we may achieve.(看出来你想表达的是要看重过程，但是用means似乎不大合适)

In a common setting of social development or personal growing up, goals and means are more interdependent. Mutually, one acceptable means to achieve one goal is wise and one fair goal supported by adoptable means is rational. Dividing goal and means tarnish the excitement when we attain one goal and harm the reasonability of one means.

In sum, the speaker's assertion is too extreme to accept unless one(the) world is facing great danger of extinction as the stories fear. In a common setting, goals instruct the means but means verify the goal(有点抽象). Both of the two sides are fairly interdependent and interconnected. Balancing goals and means strengthens the necessary procedure of achieving one goal and its approach.

LZ结构清晰，语言都很精炼，也说得很有道理，学习了~
只是没看出来第二段和第三段的关系，望指教……

atticuswangUID: 2663189

LZ 语言流畅，而且事例很丰富，整体行文思路：
1. 有些极端情况必须不顾一切去实现目标（事例是有，阐述不够清楚，突出worthy和any means，作者只是谈了世界大战和后天中的基本思想，没看过的人，比如说ETS估计没看过后天吧，不清楚你到底在讲什么）
2.讲到了实现目标带来好坏的问题
3.指出并不是所有的目标都有各种方法可以实现，你中心句是这样，但是觉得你的论据却是证明2，只不过这是从individual角度来考虑的
觉得LZ应该再仔细思考题目整理好文章的结构，论述的时候多多扣题目的关键字～～
拍得有些多，纯属个人意见，还望LZ回应～～

roughmanUID: 2685617

我用中文列一下提纲：
1. 关于用电影说明极端的情况，确实需要对于电影所表达的一些虚构情况进一步的说清楚。
2. 后面就是说在大多数情况下没有那个目标是值得用any方式来实现的。
3. 从个人角度来看这两者的关系。可能主要问题在这里。请LS具体指出应该从哪里加强。因为我在第三点开头的只是承接上面社会啊、国家啊这些的意思，没有另起一个核心的意思。
所以可以进一步讨论如何加强。