ISSUE.208-BY CHERRYKISS 球拍 严重没感觉的一篇文章！

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从审题、立论到提纲跟例子都很拖沓，不知道为什么思路就是打不开.
说理感觉不够有力度，逻辑上也有点以偏概全，到最后实在挤不出东西了...
大家帮忙看看吧,反正不长...
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208. The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

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While there is some truth in the claim that the way people look, dress, and act reflects their attitudes and interests, it does not necessarily mean that we can judge a society's ideas and values mainly from observing the appearance and behavior of its people. For one thing, semblance is often deceptive. For another, social values and idears are something under the surface.
To some extent, appearance and behavior reflect people's attitudes and interests. For instance, a typical look of Punk characterized by colorful spiked hair, tattoos covering much of their bodies and leather jackets is a message that people are much too identical and that being oneself is essencial. Besides, their appearance and behavior also indicates their preferance for Punk music which combines aggressive sounds of electronic instruments. However, things are not always that easy, that is to say, not all kinds of appearance and behavior provide a clear evidence of people's attitudes and interets like this.
Under some other circumstances, the way people look, dress and act is no more than a adaptation to the environment they live in. To put as an example, artists, even those who are internationally renowned, sometimes dress in a casual way with loose outer garment and render a capricious behavior due to irregular working hours. But the truth may that they are constantly adhere to a rigid artistic criterion. In short, it is superficial to judge a person by his or her look and manner.
Appearance and behavior do not work well in aspect of a single person, let alone social values and idears. As a concentrated expression of how the majority of social members think and what they believe, social ideas and values are abstract and general. There is no evidence to prove that, we see how to deduce and generalize people's thinking the moment we see them. Therefore, it is difficult for us to effectively and accurately come up with the ideology of society as a whole. Even if we do tell something out of the appearance and behavior of its people, it is neither comprehensive nor profound.
In conclusion, the way people look, dress, and act sometimes reveals their attitudes and interests, but we can not tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

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While there is some truth in the claim that the way people look, dress, and act reflects their attitudes and interests, it does not necessarily mean that we can judge a society's ideas and values mainly from observing the appearance and behavior of its people. For one thing, semblance is often deceptive. For another, social values and ideas are something under the surface.
To some extent, appearance and behavior reflect people's attitudes and interests. For instance, a typical look of Punk characterized by colorful spiked hair, tattoos covering much of their bodies and leather jackets sending a message to others that they are cherishing the sense of ego as well as a showy personality. Besides, their appearance and behavior also indicates their preference for Punk music which combines aggressive sounds of electronic instruments. However, things are not always that easy, that is to say, not all kinds of appearance and behavior provide a clear evidence of people's attitudes and interests like this.
Under some other circumstances, the way people look, dress and act is no more than an adaptation to the environment they live in. To put as an example, artists, even those who are internationally renowned, sometimes dress in a casual way with loose outer garment and render a capricious behavior due to irregular working hours. But the truth may that they are constantly adhering to a rigid artistic criterion.(这个例子中的特点与其说指艺术家，不如说科学怪才。) In short, it is superficial to judge a person by his or her look and manner.
Appearance and behavior do not work well in aspect of a single person, let alone social values and ideas. As a concentrated expression of how the majority of social members think and what they believe, social ideas and values are abstract and general. There is no evidence to prove that, we see how to deduce and generalize people's thinking the moment we see them. Therefore, it is difficult for us to effectively and accurately recognize the ideology of society as a whole. Even if we do tell something out of the appearance and behavior of its people, it is either comprehensive or profound.
In conclusion, the way people look, dress, and act sometimes reveals their attitudes and interests, but we can not tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

语言问题不大。但是论述单薄。字数过少。错字不少。
还可以写的有：
1.装束可以反映一点社会的ideology。比如Arab world, women’s veil
2.个人装束不一定represent 个人believes and ideas. 因为conform to the normal due to the pressure of the outside world lest to be isolated as heretics
3.去查查culture 和ideology的区别，就会明白很多相关的东西