argument174 oceanus4月作文小组4月3日作业

oceanusUID：2283238

TOPIC: ARGUMENT174 - The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.

"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumni who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially."
WORDS: 366          TIME: 01:10:00          DATE: 2007-4-3

In the argument, the author comes to a recommendation that Grove College preserves its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. To support the author's recommendation, the author provides two surveys; however, there are some critical flaws in the surveys.

In the first place, the survey conducted by the student government is insufficient to support the author's conclusion. In evaluating the survey, we must consider how the survey was conducted. First, if the question of the survey was leading, the results might be unreliable. Secondly, we must consider how broad the survey was. If the survey was limited to a few students, the results ware not forceful. In addition, even if the survey was broad and not leading, it is still possible that the responders did not express their thought because of certain reasons. For instance, were the responders shy of supporting coeducation? Were the responders upon a severe pressure from those who opposed coeducation? Factors such as these could explain the survey results and could undermine the generalizability of the survey results.

What's more, the separate survey in which over half of the alumni who answered opposed coeducation is problematic. The author does not provide enough specific of the survey. For example, how many alumni took part in the survey? It is entirely possible that only a few alumni participated the survey and most of them opposed coeducation. Besides, why did they oppose coeducation? The author also talked nothing about it. In short, without ruling out these possible alternatives and providing more powerful evidence, the author cannot convince me.

Finally, even if the surveys above are convictive, it also unfairly concludes that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially. The author does not mention the reason why the morale will raise and why the alumni will keep supporting the college financially. So, if the author wants to support his conclusion, he should provides more evidence about that.

In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strength the argument, the author should provide more evidence and rule out other possible alternatives. Or the author will not convince me.

寂寞樱花UID：2306511

In the argument, the author comes to a recommendation that Grove College should preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. To support the author's recommendation, the author provides two surveys; however, there are some critical flaws in the surveys.

In the first place, the survey conducted by the student government is insufficient to support the author's conclusion. In evaluating the survey, we must consider how the survey was conducted. First, if the question of the survey was leading, the results might be unreliable. Secondly, we must consider how broad the survey was. If the survey was limited to a few students, the results ware not forceful. In addition, even if the survey was broad and not leading, it is still possible that the responders did not express their thought because of certain reasons. For instance, were the responders shy of supporting coeducation? Were the responders upon a severe pressure from those who opposed coeducation? Factors such as these could explain the survey results and could undermine the generalizability of the survey results.

What's more, the separate survey in which over half of the alumni who answered opposed coeducation is problematic. The author does not provide enough specific of the survey. For example, how many alumni took part in the survey? It is entirely possible that only a few alumni participated the survey and most of them opposed coeducation. Besides, why did they oppose coeducation? The author also talked nothing about it. In short, without ruling out these possible alternatives and providing more powerful evidence, the author cannot convince me.

Finally, even if the surveys above are convictive, it also unfairly concludes that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumni to keep supporting the college financially. The author does not mention the reason why the morale will raise and why the alumni will keep supporting the college financially. So, if the author wants to support his conclusion, he should provides more evidence about that.(这一段的攻击可以扩充一下)

In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strength the argument, the author should provide more evidence and rule out other possible alternatives. Or the author will not convince me.

LZ的A写的很好啊感觉,这篇不算非常好写但是写的很不错的,要象LZ学习~

xiaolinlhxUID：2302833

短小精悍,很好
结尾有时间是不是可以丰富一点?