issue94 课程的多样性，回拍留连接(sally)

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94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."


提纲
1，        知识是相互联系的，其他专业的知识提高能力。艺术提高审美能力，文学提高表达能力，数学提高逻辑思维能力，这些对深入的专业学习非常有用
2，        但是，全面的学习仅仅限于了解的层面而不需要掌握，因为大学教育的目的是培养专业人才，而非初等教育的目标：培养基础全面的能力。学生没有精力掌握每门学科
3，        社会需要全面专业的人才，全面可以通过不同的学生来实现（而非一个学生学习多种课程），而专业和深入则可以通过专业的学习来实现。

正文
People’s intellectuality is developed transversely and vertically. Cross-disciplines enlarge the landscope of our knowledge while expertise in one field of study deepens our understanding. With regard to the goal of university education, which aims at cultivating professional talents,rather than know-all, to meet the societal needs, university studnets should be equipped with verious academic disciplines only as a means to obtain the basic skills to orient to the society. Yet most importantly, students should have a good command of his or her major in order to profoundly contribute to the society.

As the British philosopher, Francis Bacon, once said, “Histories make men wise; poems pretty; the mathematics subtle; natural philosopher deep; moral grave; logic and rhetoric able to contend. Knowledge from a versatility of disciplines would by all means provide students with the elementary capability to orient to the society. For example, the world is a network made up by individuals. Under such a circumstance, college students have to communicate with different people in almost every aspect. consequently, the communicative skill gained from discipline of literature is necessary. In addition, students have to discriminate right from wrong in the world so as to form the principle of conducting themselves. To do this, they are in dire need of logical ideation which can be learned in the mathematics course. When it comes to cross-disciplines’ relation with students’ major, it cannot be denied that all-rounded knowledge furnish students with a convenient tool to research deeper in their major. An illuminating example involves terpsichorean Tina Oregasa in Germany, it’s through her physics study that she knew the theory of balance. Applying this theory in her dancing movements, she created a multitude of graceful dances and finally is listed in the “golden list” of dancers in the world.

Nevertheless, comprehensive study should be within the confines of understanding instead of mastering, because the very objective of college education is to foster epecialized talents for respective field, which nessitates only common sense of different areas. Consider, if all students are attatched to knowing all areas,whether pertinent to their major or not, this would inevitably occupy a great deal of their time which should be spend on their majors. Therefore,they may not have enough energy and time to go further in their major and this in turn will sharply frustrate their expertise. Take Einstein for instance, even though his hobbies varies greatly from music to philosophy, from mathematics to physics. According to an authentic report leased last year in CNN, the time amount he spent in all his interested areas account for only one fourth of his time spent on biology. Having known this, we do not feel difficult to know how  his masterpiece Special Theory of Relativity in biology come into being. In his sense, veracious discipline only play a role as assistant to major in university education rather than priority.

Furthermore, our society is in dire need of various professional talents. Here, “various”can be achieved from a great many of different students with different majors but not one student with comprehensive knowledge. Whereas, “professional” could be realized through students’ expertise in one field. As one towering educator once said: a cure-all cannot form a society but many professionals do it. Thus, without profound knowledge of in certain fields, there would be no breakthroughs in that fiels. Vice versa, without a diversity of profound knowledge, our society cannot be a comprehensive one. With regard to this, university education should acclimatize itself to the need of society, requiring students to devote to their major, in the meanwhile ,provide various curricula to satisfy every student’s need.

In closing, I cannot agree with the writer that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated. Instead, cross-disciplines act as an accessorial tool to cultivate students basic ability so as to better study and in their major. However, all-rounded knwoledge from veraciosu academic disciplines enables students to be adaptive to the changing and complex society.

[ 本帖最后由 sallyxindu 于 2006-2-6 16:37 编辑 ]

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想改的,看了一下后,发现除了一些拼写小错误和少数几个语法点,大致上没什么可挑剔的.所以也不想帖出来了.
可能是本来能力实在有限,清sally原谅阿
重点还是想让你拍拍我的文章，菜鸟一只，严格一点！

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94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."


提纲
1，        知识是相互联系的，其他专业的知识提高能力。艺术提高审美能力，文学提高表达能力，数学提高逻辑思维能力，这些对深入的专业学习非常有用
2，        但是，全面的学习仅仅限于了解的层面而不需要掌握，因为大学教育的目的是培养专业人才，而非初等教育的目标：培养基础全面的能力。学生没有精力掌握每门学科
3，        社会需要全面专业的人才（社会需要多方面的专业人才），全面可以通过不同的学生来实现（而非一个学生学习多种课程），而专业和深入则可以通过专业的学习来实现。(这点提纲想的不错，说的明确一些就是社会分工的不同)

正文
People’s intellectuality is developed transversely and vertically. Cross-disciplines enlarge the landscope of our knowledge while expertise in one field of study deepens our understanding. With regard to the goal of university education, which aims at cultivating professional talents, rather than know-all, to meet the societal needs, university studnets should be equipped with verious academic disciplines only as a means to obtain the basic skills to orient to the society. Yet most importantly, students should have a good command of his or her major in order to profoundly contribute to the society.

As the British philosopher, Francis Bacon, once said（Bacon的话引用到哪里，只有一个引号？）, “Histories make men wise; poems pretty; the mathematics subtle; natural philosopher deep; moral grave; logic and rhetoric able to contend. Knowledge from a versatility of disciplines would by all means provide students with the elementary capability to orient to the society. For example（例子在哪里？）, the world is a network made up by individuals. Under such a circumstance, college students have to communicate with different people in almost every aspect. consequently, the communicative skill gained from discipline of literature is necessary. In addition, students have to discriminate right from wrong in the world so as to form the principle of conducting themselves. To do this, they are in dire need of logical ideation which can be learned in the mathematics course. When it comes to cross-disciplines’ relation with students’ major, it cannot be denied that all-rounded knowledge furnish students with a convenient tool to research deeper in their major. An illuminating example involves terpsichorean Tina Oregasa in Germany, it’s through her physics study that she knew the theory of balance. Applying this theory in her dancing movements, she created a multitude of graceful dances and finally is listed in the “golden list” of dancers in the world.（段落总结句呢？）

Nevertheless, comprehensive study should be within the confines of understanding instead of mastering, because the very objective of college education is to foster epecialized（professional） talents for respective field, which nessitates（necessitate） only common sense of different areas. Consider, if all students are attatched to knowing all areas, whether pertinent to their major or not, this would inevitably occupy a great deal of their time which should be spend on their majors. Therefore, they may not have enough energy and time to go further in their major and this in turn will sharply frustrate their expertise. Take Einstein for instance, even though his hobbies varies(vary) greatly from music to philosophy, from mathematics to physics. According to an authentic report leased last year in CNN, the time amount he spent in all his interested areas account for only one fourth of his time spent on biology. Having known this, we do not feel difficult to know how  his masterpiece Special Theory of Relativity in biology come into being. In his sense, veracious discipline only play a role as assistant to major in university education rather than priority.(Einstein 的例子感觉举的不好，虽然他的兴趣广泛，花在他感兴趣的时间占他花在生物上时间的1/4，但还能取得如此成绩（并没有耽误他的专业，也没有浪费时间和精力），这更说明他是一个杰出而全面的人才，个人觉得这个例子做为第一段的例子较恰当。)

Furthermore, our society is in dire need of various professional talents. Here, “various”can be achieved from a great many of different students with different majors but not one student with comprehensive knowledge. Whereas, “professional” could be realized through students’ expertise in one field. As one towering educator once said: a cure-all cannot form a society but many professionals do it. Thus, without profound knowledge of in certain fields, there would be no breakthroughs in that fiels. Vice versa, without a diversity of profound knowledge, our society cannot be a comprehensive one（这两个句子论证好）. With regard to this, university education should acclimatize itself to the need of society, requiring students to devote to their major, in the meanwhile ,provide various curricula to satisfy every student’s need.（总体感觉这段分析的比较好）

In closing, I cannot agree with the writer that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated. Instead, cross-disciplines act as an accessorial tool to cultivate students basic ability so as to better study and in their major. However, all-rounded knwoledge from veraciosu academic disciplines enables students to be adaptive to the changing and complex society.

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People’s intellectuality is developed transversely and vertically 横向和纵向这样表达吗,我觉得vertical不太恰当吧,这个应该偏向与表达空间方位的词,而且这句话和后面联系也不是太紧密,可以去掉吧?. Cross-disciplines enlarge the          landscope of our knowledge while expertise in one field of study deepens our understanding. With regard to the goal of university education, which aims at  cultivating professional talents,rather than know-all, to meet the societal needs, university studnets should be equipped with verious academic disciplines only as a means to obtain the basic skills to orient to the society. Yet most importantly, students should have a good command of his or her major in order to profoundly contribute to the society.开头段除了第一句话之外都非常好,值得学习学习~~~

As the British philosopher, Francis Bacon, once said不是说为了防ETS说抄袭,这里要加and i paraphrase吗?, “Histories make men wise; poems pretty; the mathematics subtle; natural philosopher deep; moral grave; logic and rhetoric able to contend. 缺少点过渡吧Knowledge from a versatility of disciplines这是什么意思? would by all means provide students with the elementary capability to orient to the society. For example, the world is a network made up by individuals这样会让人误以为你的例子就是这一句话了.... Under such a circumstance, college students have to communicate with different people in almost every aspect. consequently, the communicative skill gained from discipline of literature is necessary. In addition, students have to discriminate right from wrong in the world so as to form the principle of conducting themselves 直接用self-command简洁一点. To do this, they are in dire need of logical      ideation which can be learned in the mathematics course数学好象只能提供逻辑思维能力,并没有对是非的分辨能力吧. When it comes to cross-disciplines’ relation with students’ major, it cannot be denied that all-rounded knowledge furnish students with a convenient tool to research deeper in their major. An illuminating example involves terpsichorean Tina Oregasa in Germany, it’s through her physics study that she knew the theory of balance. Applying this theory in her dancing movements, she created a multitude of graceful dances and finally is listed in the “golden list” of dancers in the world.似乎举例子的时候有点烦琐

Nevertheless, comprehensive study should be within the confines of understanding instead of mastering, because the very objective of college education is to foster epecialized talents for   respective field, which nessitates手误打错了? only common sense of different areas. Consider, if all students are attatched to knowing all areas,whether pertinent to their major or not, this would inevitably occupy a great deal of their time which should be spend on their majors. Therefore,they may not have enough energy and time to go further in their major and this in turn will sharply frustrate their expertise. Take Einstein for instance, even though his hobbies varies greatly from music to philosophy, from mathematics to physics让步之后怎么没有转折了?. According to an authentic report leased last year in CNN, the time amount he spent in all his interested areas account for only one fourth of his time spent on biology. Having known this, we do not feel difficult to know how  his masterpiece Special Theory of Relativity in biology come into being. In his sense, veracious discipline only play a role as assistant to major in university education rather than priority.这段很不错

Furthermore, our society is in dire need of various professional talents. Here, “various”can be achieved from a great many of different students with different majors but not one student with comprehensive knowledge. Whereas似乎不是转折关系,用while会不会更好一点, “professional” could be realized through students’ expertise in one field. As one       towering educator once said: a cure-all cannot form a society but many professionals do it. Thus, without profound knowledge of in certain fields, there would be no breakthroughs in that fiels. Vice versa, without a diversity of profound knowledge, our society cannot be a comprehensive one. With regard to this, university education should acclimatize这个词不是偏重于新的环境吗 itself to the need of society, requiring students to devote to their major, in the meanwhile ,provide various curricula to satisfy every student’s need.

In closing, I cannot agree with the writer that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated. Instead, cross-disciplines act as an accessorial tool to cultivate students basic ability so as to better study and in their major. However, all-rounded knwoledge from veraciosu academic disciplines enables students to be adaptive to the changing and complex society.


sally功底的确很深,佩服佩服,用了好多好多的短语收藏之,不过提一点,完全一样的短语最好不要重复,稍微改一下再用,还有短语用的多了断句准确一点,有几个地方费了些时间才看明白,另外有些词语再斟酌一下,不一定非要追求语言的华丽.

[ 本帖最后由 forevera 于 2006-2-7 16:17 编辑 ]

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94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."
好久没有回sallymm的帖子了，这些天在捣鼓ETS那个评分系统。

提纲
1，        知识是相互联系的，其他专业的知识提高能力。艺术提高审美能力，文学提高表达能力，数学提高逻辑思维能力，这些对深入的专业学习非常有用
2，        但是，全面的学习仅仅限于了解的层面而不需要掌握，因为大学教育的目的是培养专业人才，而非初等教育的目标：培养基础全面的能力。学生没有精力掌握每门学科
能否和题目的turly education联系更紧密点呢？比如给出定义truly education 不仅要求对本专业知识技能有较高造诣，同时又要有moraliy as well as broad understanding of other disciplines。然后再提上面两点。
3，        社会需要全面专业的人才，全面可以通过不同的学生来实现（而非一个学生学习多种课程），而专业和深入则可以通过专业的学习来实现。
接着上面分析，truly education还包含一个意思就是能够对社会做出贡献，所以社会需要全面专业那么大学就要开多些课啦。
例子有现在大学改革，放宽口径，MIT的电子系和计算机系就是在一起混的，目的就是intensify cross-disciplinary communication and give students more chance and potential to deeply develop one's abilities.这是我想的。
还可以举些牛人来说明truly education与博识的关系，比如Maxewell就懂电也懂磁结果成大师
其实我最欣赏第三点，抓住这点，把历史，艺术等重要性扯进来就可以再添好多内容了。
正文
People’s intellectuality is developed transversely and vertically. Cross-disciplines （参考cross-cultural) enlarge the landscope （landscape)of our knowledge while expertise in one field of study deepens our understanding. With regard to the goal of university education, which aims at cultivating professional talents,rather than know-all, to meet the societal needs, university studnets should be equipped with verious academic disciplines only as a means to obtain the basic skills to orient to the society. Yet most importantly, students should have a good command of his or her major in order to profoundly contribute to the society.

后面没细看，晚安啦！