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Issue 10
"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."  

    According to the speaker, major cities should receive the financial support which they need to thrive because the cultural traditions of a nation are primarily preserved and generated in cities.  However, I do not approve of this assertion for two reasons.  First of all, owing to the impact of globalization, the cultural traditions may be better preserved and generated in rural areas other than cities.  Furthermore, even if I concede the assertion that the cities do better in preserving and generating nation's cultural traditions than rural areas, it does not mean governments must ensure the financial support of their major cities just because of this reason.  Accordingly, I am inclined to argue that the rural areas of a nation deserve more attention from the government.

    To begin with, the cultural traditions may be better preserved and generated in rural areas rather than cities. Cities of the world are being homogenized and cultural traditions are losing their place in cities mainly due to the proceeding of globalization.  For instance, the architectural style is becoming more and more similar between cities while the old buildings which have a unique style reflecting the cultural tradition of one nation are removed for urgent desire of the land.  In addition, people in cities are always busy with work and social association and the cultural traditions become more and more meaningless. Few people spend their time on cultural traditions, and citizens are often indifferent to cultural traditions even in traditional festivals.  In contrast, rural people preserve the traditional style buildings much better than citizens because they do not need the land urgently.  Moreover, there are often aboriginals with conserving their culture traditions completely in the mountains or rainforest.

    Secondly, I argue that more financial support should be put on the rural areas to help them to solve the problem of poverty.  A main task with which all the governments will confront sooner or later is to eliminate the poverty and to eliminate the large distinction between the riches and the poverties. Therefore, governments should lay more emphasis on the rural areas to improve the basic establishments, such as medical care, education, insurance system and so forth.  In addition, another reason why governments should pay more attention to rural areas rather than major cities is that there are more people in rural areas than in cities in most countries, especially in developing countries. In other words, governments should be on most people’s behalf(,?) therefore, they should pay more attention on rural areas for most people are in rural areas and these people often can not compete with that in cities.  Finally, major cities have their own economic systems which make it sure that major cities have the ability to survive by themselves in generally speaking.
  
    To sum up, I insist on that governments should take rural areas for first consideration when they decide to give financial support.  It's difficult for major cities to preserve and generate cultural traditions in the era of economic globalization, and preserving and generating cultural traditions is not the main factor to give financial support. Factually, the rural areas are need more financial supports.  Thus, governments should lay more emphasis on rural areas.

[ 本帖最后由 biopecker 于 2006-2-27 00:49 编辑 ]

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偶没限时那...写了N久...汗...

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感觉自己举例说明时，基本上是泛泛而谈，没有力度，不知道该怎么说，请各位大牛赐教

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Issue 10
"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."  

    According to the speaker, major cities should receive the financial support which they need to thrive because the cultural traditions of a nation are primarily preserved and generated in cities.  However, I do not approve of this assertion for two reasons.  First of all, owing to the impact of globalization, the cultural traditions may be better preserved and generated in rural areas other than cities.  Furthermore, even if I concede the assertion that the cities do better in preserving and generating nation's cultural traditions than rural areas; it does not mean governments must ensure the financial support of their major cities just because of this reason.这里明显用了Argument的写法哟，倒是很新颖，但是我觉得似乎不是很好，因为毕竟A是在挑逻辑错误而I表达的是自我观点，嗯……楼主再考虑一下？  Accordingly, I am inclined to argue that the rural areas of a nation deserve more attention from the government.

    To begin with, the cultural traditions may be better preserved and generated in rural areas rather than cities. Cities of the world （metropolis）are being homogenized and cultural traditions are losing their place （用fade是不是更生动？）in cities mainly due to the proceeding of globalization.  For instance, the architectural style is becoming more and more similar between cities while the old buildings which have a unique style reflecting the cultural tradition of one nation are removed for urgent desire of the land.这意思摆事实好一点，焦点言谈不是总有某公司建筑把古城墙给挖了的事吗？还有好多城市不准放鞭炮，都可以拿来说啊，嘿嘿，不知道古城墙算不算文化传统呢~  In addition, people in cities are always busy with work and social association and the cultural traditions become more and more meaningless.嗯，这个恰当的反应出时下城市人的心态来，还可以加上一条，大家纷纷对炒作的新文化比较感兴趣就忽视了传统文化，也可以再形象一点，可以描述一下城里人吃饱喝足就看电视却没时间到本城市的名胜古迹看一看。不过要限定是中国社会哦，老美如果不是这样的话，看了会很迷惑的。 Few people spend their time on cultural traditions, and citizens are often indifferent to cultural traditions even in traditional festivals.  In contrast, rural people preserve the traditional style buildings much better than citizens because they do not need the land urgently.这句话变个说法好一点，变成他们不像或没有城市那么需要土地是否好一点？ Moreover, there are often aboriginals with conserving their culture traditions completely in the mountains or rainforest.

    Secondly, I argue that more financial support should be put on the rural areas to help them to solve the problem of poverty. 站在老美的角度想，也许农村并不穷哦~这句是针对中国而言的，老美农民每年拿补贴旅游哦，羡慕中~ A main task with which all the governments will confront sooner or later is to eliminate the poverty and to eliminate the large distinction(红宝里有个词意思是“深渊，巨大的差别”，我想不太起来了) between the riches and the poverties. Therefore, governments should lay more emphasis on the rural areas to improve the basic establishments, such as medical care, education, insurance system and so forth.  In addition, another reason why governments should pay more attention to rural areas rather than major cities is that there are more people in rural areas than in cities in most countries, especially in developing countries.这句强调的很好，看，分情况的理由出现了 In other words, governments should be on most people’s behalf(,?) therefore, they should pay more attention on rural areas for most people（majority）are in rural areas and these people often can not compete with that in cities.  Finally, major cities have their own economic systems which make it sure that major cities have the ability to survive by themselves in generally speaking.嗯，这句也不错，状语尤其用得准确合适。
  
    To sum up, I insist on that governments should take rural areas for first consideration when they decide to give financial support.  It's difficult for major cities to preserve and generate cultural traditions in the era of economic globalization, and preserving and generating cultural traditions is not the main factor to give financial support. Factually, the rural areas are need more financial supports.  Thus, governments should lay more emphasis on rural areas.

简单的说一下破题吧，我也看了孙远的提纲^_^.孙远的提纲不无可取之处，但我觉得这个论题还是应该分情况考虑，主要有以下几个情况吧：
1)        国家的财政状况是否有满足维护文化传统保护需要的能力
2)        什么类型的国家，农业国还是工业国
3)        什么类型的文化传统，城市的文化传统还是农村的文化传统？
4)        再有一点，孙远的提纲里提到了农村与城市发展差异的问题，我觉得这个可以提，但最要包含在第一种情况回答为否的情况下，而且最好小谈，毕竟这似乎不是本题目探讨的重点~~~

楼主的思路清晰，行文流畅，似乎有很多话可说但最终却无话可说，似乎问题还是出在提纲上，把提纲细化了，可说的也就多了。

再一个，注意用词，我现在也处在这种情况下，也是用词有点重复，希望楼主能在我划下划线处查一下类反的词典，争取换几个更难认的词，范文的非常词都超过十个呢。

最后，建议楼主先先自己理出一个思路来再对照参考提纲，毕竟还是自己的思想最宝贵啊~

大家共同努力吧，我也想写一下这个题目，敬请楼主回拍~~