Argument51

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51.The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."

医生长期以来怀疑严重肌肉扭伤后的二次感染妨碍了一些患者迅速康复。这一假说现在被一项对两组患者的研究的初步结果所证实。第一组患者全部由专攻运动医学的Dr. Newland治疗肌肉损伤，他们在疗程中经常服用抗生素。他们的康复期平均比通常预期的快40％。第二组患者由综合医师Dr. Alton治疗，他们被给予糖丸，而患者相信他们在服用抗生素。他们的平均康复时间没有明显缩短。因此，任何被确诊为肌肉损伤的患者应被建议服用抗生素作为辅助治疗。



前提 secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain.
结论 Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment.

因为医生怀疑是2次感染影响了病人的恢复时间（实验支持 2组 吃不同的药物 恢复时间不同）-------所有肌肉扭伤的人都应该服用抗体从而加快恢复


观点 作者对不同的病人做出了同样的结论
1 严重的病人不能推广到所有的病人 可能没2次感染
2 一些人不能推到所有人 过敏的人
3 实验结果不可信 两组人不同

Before accepting that all patients with muscle strain would be better to take antibiotics, the reasoning in this argument could be questioned from several aspects. The arguer conducts the conclusion from a doctors' hypothesis without considering different symptoms and physical conditions and fitness between different patients.

To begin with, it is not cogent that antibiotic is helpful for all patients with muscle strain as the arguer asserts. What is impossible is that all muscle strain causes an infection to patients. For example, as is known to us all, many people may get muscle strain, which is just a slight muscle pulled, when they are exercising. The patients just need to put some ointment on sore skin or wound to help it heal, such as Voltaren. In this way, they will recuperate soon without taking antibiotics. In addition, even if some muscle strain will cause infection, it is entirely possible that patients and doctors will be careful to avoid the secondary infection after the first time.

Furthermore, even if antibiotic plays a significant role in muscle strain recuperation, does it mean that all patients could take it without any consideration about disadvantage to health it brings? The arguer is blind to its side-effect which is harmful to patients. For instance, the patients, who are allergic to antibiotics, could not take antibiotics. After taking antibiotics, they will become ill or get a rash. Further, antibiotics could cause a more serious result to certain kinds of patients, such as children and pregnant women. In fact, it is because of its damage to growing audition system that children and pregnant women should avoid taking antibiotics.

In addition, the result based on the study is not convincing. There is no evidence can illuminate antibiotic is the only factor affects the time of recuperation. It is an unfair comparison between two groups if their members are not the same career and in the same age. These factors also determine the time of recuperation in a certain extent. For example, the patients in first group may be young and vigorous athletes, and patients in the other group may be middle-aged office clerks. Obviously that, because of the better physical fitness athletes own, they could recover in less time than those clerks.

After a scrutiny, it is clear that we can not safely reach the conclusion that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. And the arguer needs to choose samples more carefulness and rigor to support the statement.

[ 本帖最后由 ostrich1986 于 2007-2-2 10:40 编辑 ]

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还有一点 就算抗生素真的有效 也未必说明确实存在2次感染

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seat taken

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Argument51
51.The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."

医生长期以来怀疑严重肌肉扭伤后的二次感染妨碍了一些患者迅速康复。这一假说现在被一项对两组患者的研究的初步结果所证实。第一组患者全部由专攻运动医学的Dr. Newland治疗肌肉损伤，他们在疗程中经常服用抗生素。他们的康复期平均比通常预期的快40％。第二组患者由综合医师Dr. Alton治疗，他们被给予糖丸，而患者相信他们在服用抗生素。他们的平均康复时间没有明显缩短。因此，任何被确诊为肌肉损伤的患者应被建议服用抗生素作为辅助治疗。



前提 secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain.
结论 Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment.

因为医生怀疑是2次感染影响了病人的恢复时间（实验支持 2组 吃不同的药物 恢复时间不同）-------所有肌肉扭伤的人都应该服用抗体从而加快恢复


观点 作者对不同的病人做出了同样的结论
1 严重的病人不能推广到所有的病人 可能没2次感染
2 一些人不能推到所有人 过敏的人
3 实验结果不可信 两组人不同

Before accepting that all patients with muscle strain would be better to take antibiotics, the reasoning in this argument could be questioned from several aspects. The arguer conducts the conclusion from a doctors' hypothesis without considering different symptoms and physical conditions and fitness between different patients.

To begin with, it is not cogent that antibiotic is helpful for all patients with muscle strain as the arguer asserts. What is impossible is that all muscle strain causes an infection to patients. For example, as （缺主语）is known to us all（all of us?就us行了）, many people may get muscle strain, which is just a slight muscle pulled（pull，拉伤是这么翻译么？如果不是，别这样类型的写）, when they are exercising. The patients（may不要过于武断） just need to put some ointment on sore skin or wound to help it heal, such as Voltaren. In this way, they will recuperate soon without taking antibiotics. In addition, even if some muscle strain will cause infection, it is entirely possible that patients and doctors will be careful to avoid the secondary infection after the first time.

Furthermore, even if antibiotic plays a significant role in muscle strain recuperation, does it mean that all patients could take it without any consideration about disadvantage to health it brings? The arguer is blind to its side-effect which is harmful to patients. For instance, the patients, who are allergic to antibiotics, could not take antibiotics. After taking antibiotics, they will become ill or get a rash. Further, antibiotics could cause a more serious result to certain kinds of patients, such as children and pregnant women. In fact, it is because of its damage to growing audition system that children and pregnant women should avoid taking antibiotics（and switch to other ways to cure their muscle strain）.

In addition, the result based on the study is not convincing. There is no evidence can illuminate antibiotic is the only factor affects the time of recuperation（3个谓动，无一个连词，语法错误）. It is an unfair comparison between two groups if their members are not the same career and in the（in the 可以剩去） same age. These factors also determine the time of recuperation in a certain extent. For example, the patients in first group may be young and vigorous athletes, and patients in the other group may be middle-aged office clerks. Obviously that, because of the better physical fitness athletes own（because of 加名词，短语。你这里是个句子了。That不是随便可以省略的）, they could recover in less time than those clerks.

After a scrutiny, it is clear that we can not safely reach the conclusion that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. And the arguer needs to choose samples more carefulness and rigor to support the statement.

本文可以参考精华区同主题写作的本题目分析。
1.        开头和结尾的写法不错。应该是比较不落入俗套的写法，保持就好。此外结尾还可以更省一点，当然因人而异，你这样写已经不错了。
2.        基本算写的不错，不过思路表达的一些细节部分表达还不够。比如说，应该不确定情况要多使用may。还有，反驳的观点还是为你的主观点服务的。不要完全不点你的观点，只顾着展开你的分析。
3.        语法还需要稍微注意。
4.        总的来说写的不错的A。继续加油。

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谢谢斑竹~~