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题目:ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."
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1. 作者错误地将BV房价的提高都归结在一个限制政策上。也许有别的原因:整个国家的房价都在提升;BV变成一个旅游城市;BV举办了奥林匹克运动会.
2. 作者认为DA在通过同样的限制策略后购房者就会喜欢。也许住在DA的都是艺术家,他们不喜欢受限制。
3. 也许DA的房子就根本不能使用同样的策略,有单元房有豪宅。

In this letter, it is cited that homeowners in Brookville community passed a series of restriction on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. The speaker then recommends that the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres should adopt the same activities that Brookville community did seven years ago to boost the values of property in that area. However, this recommendation is problematic in several critical respects.

Firstly, the letter's writer mistakenly attribute the success of the enhanced values of property in Brookville to Brookville's restricting how to landscape their yards and what color to paint on the exteriors of their houses. In fact, probably, there are many other reasons why the price of property raised. Perhaps the whole country's estate priced was enhancing in the past seven years. Or perhaps the Brookville was turning to a tourist city those years and therefore all aspects of economy there were increasing. Or even perhaps the Olympic Games took place there, so that large population moved to Brookville for business or living and that is the real reason why houses are more expensive than they were. Since the letter obviously failed to identify the whole complex causes of the raise of Brookville property prices, I cannot be convinced that just one restriction will dramatically enhance the property values of Deerhaven Acres.

Secondly, the recommendation relies on the assumption that the house buyers in Deerhaven also prefer the restriction strategy passed in Brookville. However, the arguer failed to provide any evidence to substantiate this crucial assumption.
It is totally possible that most people in Deerhaven are artists, and they prefer living in houses having different colors and different yards because these kinds of houses are able to vitalize their inspiration. So, without considering and ruling out these and other possible things relative to attitude of people in Deerhaven, the author cannot confidently conclude that consumers in Deerhaven also like the restriction policy.

Thirdly, there is another possibility the arguer has not ruled out that houses in Deerhaven are different in types, so that any restriction here just cannot be put into execution.

In conclusion, in order to make the suggestion more convincing and reasonable, the arguer should provide more evidence on which the restriction can be proved the only reason why property values in Brookville have tripled, and some information about the analogy between Deerhaven and Brookville, such as whether there are any difference about attibudes of residents. The more details provided, the more reasonable it is.


[ 本帖最后由 demonXhunter 于 2007-11-10 00:29 编辑 ]
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发表于 2007-11-10 09:37:11 |只看该作者
时间仓促只看了提纲,例子很有创意阿,这样好么?

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发表于 2007-11-10 13:33:37 |只看该作者
我也不知道呢
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发表于 2007-11-10 23:36:36 |只看该作者
表达好了用得合适就行

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发表于 2007-11-11 23:14:57 |只看该作者
In this letter, it is cited that homeowners in Brookville community passed a series of restriction on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. The speaker then recommends that the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres should adopt the same activities that Brookville community did seven years ago to boost the values of property in that area. However, this recommendation is problematic in several critical respects.

Firstly, the letter's writer mistakenly attribute the success of the enhanced values of property in Brookville to Brookville's restricting how to landscape their yards and what color to paint on the exteriors of their houses. In fact, probably, there are many other reasons why the price of property raised. Perhaps the whole country's estate priced? was enhancing in the past seven years. Or perhaps the Brookville was turning to a tourist city those years and therefore all aspects of economy there were increasing. Or even perhaps the Olympic Games took place there, so that large population moved to Brookville for business or living and that is the real reason why houses are more expensive than they were. Since the letter obviously failed to identify the whole complex causes of the raise of Brookville property prices, I cannot be convinced that just one restriction will dramatically enhance the property values of Deerhaven Acres.

Secondly, the recommendation relies on the assumption that the house buyers in Deerhaven also prefer the restriction strategy passed in Brookville. However, the arguer failed to provide any evidence to substantiate this crucial assumption.
It is totally possible that most people in Deerhaven are artists, and they prefer living in houses having different colors and different yards because these kinds of houses are able to vitalize their inspiration. So, without considering and ruling out these and other possible things relative to attitude of people in Deerhaven, the author cannot confidently conclude that consumers in Deerhaven also like the restriction policy.

Thirdly, another possibility the arguer has not ruled out is that houses in Deerhaven are different in types, so that any restriction here just cannot be put into execution.

In conclusion, in order to make the suggestion more convincing and reasonable, the arguer should provide more evidence on which the restriction can be proved the only reason why property values in Brookville have tripled, and some information about the analogy between Deerhaven and Brookville, such as whether there are any difference about attibudes of residents. The more details provided, the more reasonable it is.
写的不错,行文流畅,例子也比较新颖。。。

[ 本帖最后由 jingjiex 于 2007-11-11 23:28 编辑 ]

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