5f 11.26 作业 argument 97

anita840808UID: 2431016

5f  11.26 argument 97


In the memo, the manager of television KICK asserts that the company should revise its broadcast schedule to include more sports coverage. The conclusion was drawn on the basis of a phenomenon that after television station increased its sports broadcast, its share of the television audience in viewing area almost doubled. However, the arguer fails to convince the readers due to several lapses in lagical thinking.

Firstly, the author mentioned that a nationalwide survey reveals that a sizable majority of men would like to see additional sports program on television. Although it seems reliable from our common sense, we can not conclude such a information until we make any decisions based on it. Any conclusion is likely to be made on the precondition of a guaranteed valid study. An effective study must possess the features of credibility, generalizability and objectivity. For example, the study experiment needs sufficient participants to enable statistical inferences to be made. And does the result eliminate any biases from personal subjectivity. All the datas are required to accord wuith the reality. By and large, not ensuring the validity of the survey, it can not be evaluated to be effective and the result lends no credible evidence to the argument.

Furthermore, the arguer indicates that after the television station increased the sports broadcasts, the audience share doubled. The statement suffers great limitations. We can not deny that maybe at the same time with the sports program broadcasting, there is another popular teleplay on the program. Thus the television would not be sure that whether the sports or teleplay stimulated the increase of audience share without a scientific study. Or maybe during that period, it happens to possess a big event in the country, like the Olympic Game. Broadcasting the matches is no doubt attractive to all citizens. When the event passed, how does the telecition station make sure the same fairly high audience share? Failing to address all these additional information strongly weakens the argument.

In summary, the arguer jumps to the conclusion that the andience share is increased simply by the reason of broadcasting sports program. Without valid survey and scientific studies by the approach of observation, interview and serious statistics, the statemet is groundless and unsustainable. To make the argument more stronger, the author must provide more specific and direct evidence to support his or her viewpoint.

[ 本帖最后由 星夜无夏 于 2007-11-27 22:06 编辑 ]

komy_leeUID: 2364433

In the memo, the manager of television KICK asserts that the company should revise its broadcast schedule to include more sports coverage. The conclusion was drawn on the basis of a phenomenon that after television station increased its sports broadcast, its share of the television audience in viewing area almost doubled. However, the arguer fails to convince the readers due to several lapses in lagical thinking.

Firstly, the author mentioned that a nationalwide survey reveals that a sizable majority of men would like to see additional sports program on television. Although it seems reliable from our common sense, we can not conclude such a information until we make any decisions based on it. Any conclusion is likely to be made on the precondition of a guaranteed valid study. An effective study must possess the features of credibility, generalizability and objectivity. For example, the study experiment needs sufficient participants to enable statistical inferences to be made. And does the result eliminate any biases from personal subjectivity.(此处是疑问句的句型是问句却没有问候，而且根据and， 很显然这一句是对“an effective study”的叙述，因此不应该用不确定答案的问句，建议改为：And it must be guaranteed that the result eliminate all biases from personal subjectivity.) All the datas are required to accord wuith the reality. By and large, not ensuring the validity of the survey, it can not be evaluated to be effective and the result lends no credible evidence to the argument.(逻辑错误抓到点子上了，论证也还严密。只是要注意一些语法上的小问题)

Furthermore, the arguer indicates that after the television station increased the sports broadcasts, the audience share doubled. The statement suffers (from) great limitations. We can not deny that maybe at the same time with the sports program broadcasting, there is another popular teleplay on the program. Thus the television would not be sure that whether the sports or teleplay stimulated the increase of audience share without a scientific study. Or maybe during that period, it happens to possess a big event in the country, like the Olympic Game. Broadcasting the matches is no doubt attractive to all citizens. When the event passed, how does the telecition station make sure the same fairly high audience share? (这一点我咋没想到呢？学习啦)Failing to address all these additional information strongly weakens the argument.

In summary, the arguer jumps to the conclusion that the andience share is increased simply by the reason of broadcasting sports program. Without valid survey and scientific studies by the approach of observation, interview and serious statistics, the statemet is groundless and unsustainable. To make the argument more stronger, the author must provide more specific and direct evidence to support his or her (只找了两个逻辑错误，似乎少了点哦：）其实还有个很明显的错误可以写一写的，那就是两个电视台之间的false analogy啊)

大概是逻辑错误找得太少的缘故，字数也显得少了点。个人觉得要达到450以上或者500以上的字数，三个逻辑错误是必需要有的。
一起努力吧：）个人觉得楼主的argu不及issue写得好哦

anita840808UID: 2431016

komy_lee提到还可以写两个电视台之间的错误类比，我怎么也就没想到呢～学习学习～～

anita840808UID: 2431016

可能ＡＲＧＵＥ写得比较晚　练的时间相对比较少　以为它简单　看来轻敌了　谢谢komy_lee提醒

liyue24UID: 2350787

原帖由 komy_lee 于 2007-11-30 18:50 发表
大概是逻辑错误找得太少的缘故，字数也显得少了点。个人觉得要达到450以上或者500以上的字数，三个逻辑错误是必需要有的。

三个逻辑错误必须的这种说法是没有的……至少500字的说法也是没有的……

但是关键是要说理清楚明确。能develop自己的idea。这个最关键的了。

看看ETS给的benchmark范文，5分的只有两三百字而已，也只说了一两个方面内容。所以，说清楚一点比泛泛空谈要好一些……