argument37[冲刺 小组]第三次作业

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The whole argument is clear and gives out general information about the end of the uniqueness of Palean basket. However, it still lacks some elements to prove those key points. I hold that it should be changed in the way below.

First, it is asserted that Palean could only cross the river by boat for its depth and broadness, in the argument. Actually, the river was possibly not so deep or broad during those days as it is today. There should be some evidence to show that the river did not change very much. And even if they cannot go there by boat, there might be some other ways to get there. It is possible that the ancient Palean invented some other transportation tools across the rivers, which has similar functions of boats. At the same time, they might go there by land rather than across the river. So, to make it clear that they can only use boats, it should be stated that no evidences about the other transportation methods and the low probability of going to Lithos by land has been found already.

Second, the arguer said that the boats were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. There is no evidence to support this point. Useful boats might be developed by those Palean people. It is highly possible that those inventions disappeared by some incidents such as nature disasters. So a strict proof of the void of developed boats in those days should be provided.

What is more, the arguer asserted that there was no needs to cross the river for Paleans. However, there might be some reasons for them to do it. For example, exploring a new world might be desired by some Paleans, no matter whether they had enough food. And it is also possible that the population of Paleans grew up too high and some people are forced to leave Palea. So, the needs of going to Lithos should not be asserted so easily in the arguer's way.

In all, the argument is clear and gives readers its contents well. If sufficient evidences on the states of Brim River, the transportation ways, the methods to get to Lithos and the needs of staying at Palea in those days are provided by the arguer, the argument will be perfect and it can be stated out that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.
1.clear need constraints be exact
2.there lacks shows of the way they get there(like before, other trans, other way)
3.Assertive boats might zao
4.Thought finding new land other reason population

[ 本帖最后由 chenhaoz 于 2008-8-4 00:23 编辑 ]

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