COMEON小组--krasovsky9.9作业

krasovskyUID: 2232937

Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


Well, as far as I am concerned, I prefer amusing movies to serious movies for the following reasons.


First, the amusing movies can make me feel released and be helpful for me to get rid of the stress of hard work. As we all know that, nowadays, the society is more of competition than ever before, so people always feel both mentally and physically tired after a whole day's work.Taking myself as an example, as long as I feel tired, I do not want to think any more so watching serious movies at this moment can just make me feel even more tired. However, the amusing movies can always make me laugh a lot thus give me a sense of relaxation.


Second, serious movies are always difficult for we ordinary people to understand. For example, the serious movies such asthe "The Seventh Seal" always require the audience to have a broad scope of knowledge such as philosophy, psychology and even history to understand. So when ordinary people watch serious movie their common sense would just be the statement that "I am totally lost".


Finally, sometimes amusing movie always explain some sophisticated theories in a more relaxing or even sarcastic way which is much easier for ordinary people to understand. For example, there is a famous theory that "life is like a box of chocolate and you will never know what you will get next" in the film "Forrest Gump". This theory is explained by a lot of interesting stories that Forrest Gump experienced in his life. I like this amusing movie so much because it just show the life experience of Forrest Gump in a way that I can easily understand.


To sum up, in my opinion, I like amusing movie more than serious movie because amusing movie can just make me feel relaxed and easy for me to understand.

[ 本帖最后由 krasovsky 于 2008-9-10 11:57 编辑 ]

ansoncodeUID: 2528782

Well, as far as I am concerned, I prefer amusing movies to serious movies for the following reasons.(well是口语中用的，这里显得不正式，as far as I am concerned前面必须有别人观点才能用)

First, the amusing movies can make me feel released and be helpful for me to get rid of the stress of hard work. As we all know that, nowadays, the society is more of competition than ever before, so people always feel both mentally and physically tired after a whole day's work.Taking myself as an example, as long as I feel tired, I do not want to think any more so watching serious movies at this moment can just make me feel even more tired. However, the amusing movies can always make me laugh a lot thus give me a sense of relaxation (不错，有观点，有例子，有比较)

Second, serious movies are always difficult for we ordinary people to understand. For example, the serious movies such as the "The Seventh Seal" always require the audience to have a broad scope of knowledge such as philosophy, psychology and even history to understand. So when ordinary people watch serious movie their common sense would just be the statement that "I am totally lost". (The Seventh Seal的例子很好，但本段论点缺乏development, 另外，双引号不要滥用，建议baidu一下英文标点符号的使用)

Finally, sometimes amusing movie always explain some sophisticated theories in a more relaxing or even sarcastic way which is much easier for ordinary people to understand. For example, there is a famous theory that "life is like a box of chocolate and you will never know what you will get next" in the film "Forrest Gump". This theory is explained by a lot of interesting stories that Forrest Gump experienced in his life. I like this amusing movie so much because it just show the life experience of Forrest Gump in a way that I can easily understand(Forrest Gump的例子很贴切! theory一般是指科学理论，这里用philosophy更合适)

To sum up, in my opinion, I like amusing movie more than serious movie because amusing movie can just make me feel relaxed and easy for me to understand. (低级语法错误,两句话并一句说常出问题)

结构上有一点小问题，完美的结构是
第一段，我的观点是A>B 因为
第二段，从relaxation的角度，A>B
第三段，从easy to understand的角度 A>B
第四段，从XXX的角度 A>B
第五段，所以 A>B
还有Transition words用的太低级了，建议你improve一下，不要都是first,second, for example
楼主的观点和语言都很自然，值得我学习，建议用些高级词汇和高级句型加以点缀，效果更佳

krasovskyUID: 2232937

谢谢ansoncode 提的建议，给我很大启发，向你学习