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I disagree with the statement that high schools and colleges should spend less time teaching about general subjects and spend more time teaching about preparing for the future career and jobs. Nowadays more and more jobs require the student to have a broad scope of knowledge, so spending more time teaching general subjects can ensure the students to be more competitive in the society.bbs.gter.net开头简洁明了，很清楚，用词也很准确，ensure很棒，我抄走了:-)
begin with, With the development of society, people raise their expectations about some traditional jobs. For example, teachers in the past were just required to give as much knowledge as possible to the students. Nowadays, however, teachers are also required to know more about the students' psychological conditions and communicate efficiently with them. That means teachers should have more knowledge in other fields such as psychology and be more skilled in communicating with students rather than knowing only the knowledge of their own major.
这段论证社会对传统职业的要求更高了，分析和例子都很不错，that means 中，that指代的是前一句，用it 或者 this 或者 which 是否更好，毕竟并不是远指。
Moreover, there are more and more new positions which are totally based on knowledge in various fields. I have a friend who gets a job as a web master of the internet site of a famous company. Although he gets a bachelor's degree in computer science and very skilled in programming, he always complains that he just does not have enough knowledge and skills to deal with the problems in the job. For example, as a web master he has to know how to communicate with consumers and negotiate with investors, how to make the advertisements on the site more attractive and how to protect the site from attacks of hackers. Obviously, most of the skills listed above require the knowledge such as consumer psychology, art design as well as commercial management and all these knowledge are just not the knowledge of his major. So the knowledge from general subjects are just indispensable in doing well in some new types of positions today.
这一段论证对新兴职业的各种要求，例子很详细，也很有说服力，排比用的很棒；发现more, more and more多次被使用，可以换个别的词替代一下，增加一些变化；skilled in 为什么用ed的形式呢，be skilled in？可是没有be, 从意思上理解也不是代表过去的；)
To sum up, a broad scope of knowledge from general subjects is necessary in doing well in both the traditional and newly emerging positions, so high schools and colleges should pay more attention to teaching about general subjects rather than only focusing on teaching about preparing for future career and jobs.
楼主的文章写的很地道，说实话基本没挑出任何毛病来，文章是很有说服力的，无论是论证还是例子，而且词汇很丰富，我学到不少东西，仅有的几个地方纯属我鸡蛋里挑骨头了，还请见谅啊。
跟楼主探讨一个问题，也是我不太明白的地方，题目中general subjects指的是什么方面的课呢，我的理解是这样，对于楼主文中的例子，比如computer science那个，programming方面的课程，是他的general subjucts，而楼主说的其它需要的知识和能力，比如与客户交流的能力，还有老师与学生交流的能力，因为他们是基于这个career产生的，是否可以理解为题目中所说的subjects for preparing jobs?
我也不知道我的理解是不是对，呵呵，纯探讨一下
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发表于 2008-9-13 11:50:03
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