Argument48

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Argument 48【六人作文小组】第1周第1次作业

Argument 48
提纲：
1、            电脑数量多不代表电脑使用时间长 ,其他人可以去网吧.
2、            不购买这些产品不一定和经济衰退有关.可能是产品本身的问题
3、            未考虑其他和健康有关的原因

字数：200         用时：00:35:00          日期：2009/1/5 21:00:52
Firstly,the possession of computer is highest does not mean the time of using computers is highest.Perhaps the people who own more than one computer in Corpera only use computers half an hour a day to read daily news.While the people in  other areas own fewer computers are employees of a software company.The time they spend on software may be 8 or over 10 hours a day.Or perhaps people in other areas often go to internet bars.They use computers for a long time a day while they have no computers at all.

Secondly,the author argue that the low expenditure on fitness-related product and services is probablycaused by the recent decline in the economy.However, the author does not put up enough evidence to support his point of view.People may like running or swimming instead of useing the fitness-related product and services.Or the price of the product has been increased so they do not want to buy the things with a higher price.Or it is because of the quality of the fitness-related product and services is decreasing.

Thirdly,the author failed to consider other reasons which can cause physical problems.For example,smoking too much may cause some lung problems.Uncontrolled diet may cause stomach diseases.

[ 本帖最后由 liyue24 于 2009-1-6 00:28 编辑 ]

MVTUID: 2588209

建议你把小组信息写到标题里，这样方便板油互改

YodaUID: 2570075

Firstly,the possession of computer is highest does not mean the time of using computers is highest.Perhaps the people who own more than one computer in Corpera only use computers half an hour a day to read daily news.While the people in  other areas own fewer computers are employees of a software company.The time they spend on software may be 8 or over 10 hours a day.Or perhaps people in other areas often go to internet bars.They use computers for a long time a day while they have no computers at all.(最好再说明一下原题得出的结论是不可信的)

Secondly,the author argue(argues) that the low expenditure on fitness-related product(products) and services is probably caused by the recent decline in the economy.However, the author does not put up enough evidence to support his point of view.People may like running or swimming instead of useing(using) the fitness-related product and services.Or the price of the product has been increased so they do not want to buy the things with a higher price.Or it is because of the quality of the fitness-related product and services is decreasing.

Thirdly,the author failed to consider other reasons which can cause physical problems.For example,smoking too much may cause some lung problems.Uncontrolled diet may cause stomach diseases.

作者列举出了原结论的一些漏洞并进行了攻击，条理较为清楚。不足的是行文过于简单，尤其是最后一段，其实可以做更多的扩展。--Yoda

半妖UID: 2328063

首先让我们来理一下逻辑推理的路线：

Corpora（电脑拥有量最高）健康水平最高--- 所以电脑拥有量高并不影响健康水平（合理）-- 所以电脑使用并不影响健康（不合理）偷换概念，拥有量高不等于使用量高。

经济衰退导致—健康产品花费低—导致健康水平降低--- 经济提升后—健康产品花费增高—导致健康水平的上升

总之，大家驳斥之前可以先理理推理的逻辑，然后从最致命的攻击。Again，多看看前人的分析。

最好来个总起的段落，说明原题不可信啊之类的。如YODA所说。然后在写分论点。

Firstly, the possession of computer is highest does not mean the time of using computers is highest. Perhaps the people who own more than one computer in Corpera only use computers half an hour a day to read daily news.While the people in  other areas own fewer computers are employees of a software company.这个论点的后半部分不太可信。个人觉得不太可能这个地区的人都是在软件公司上班吧，难道是硅谷二号？总之理由应该具有一定的普遍性，太specific的理由，本身不具有说服力。The time they spend on software may be 8 or over 10 hours a day.Or perhaps people in other areas often go to internet bars.Why？是否说另一个地区的人比较没钱，所以只能去网吧上网，They use computers for a long time a day while they have no computers at all.(最好再说明一下原题得出的结论是不可信的)

Secondly,the author argue(argues) that the low expenditure on fitness-related product(products) and services is probably caused by the recent decline in the economy.However,the author doesnot put up enough evidence to support his point of view.People may like running or swimming instead of useing(using) the fitness-related product and services.Or the price of the product has been increased so they do not want to buy the things with a higher price.Or it is because of the quality of the fitness-related product and services is decreasing.

Thirdly,the authorfailed to consider other reasons which can cause physical problems.For example,smoking toomuch may cause some lung problems.Uncontrolled diet may cause stomach diseases.

作者列举出了原结论的一些漏洞并进行了攻击，条理较为清楚。不足的是行文过于简单，尤其是最后一段，其实可以做更多的扩展。--Yoda

同意Yoda的观点。觉得应该挑选最主要的漏洞进行攻击，而且攻击的彻底，怎样做？请参见分享里的链接文章。强烈推荐。

kinte200UID: 2510122

分享里的文章  在哪里啊。。。我想看:loveliness: