issue43 领袖的道德标准

leo_chenUID: 206840

Issue43  第10篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：53分56秒     458 words
从2005年6月3日17时31分到2005年6月3日18时53分
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To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
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There is a debate on whether or not a public official should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader.  In my opinion, although the high ethical and moral standard is the fundamental requirements to political leaders to win the support from the public, what matters for how great he/she could achieve in the admission is the mastery to tradeoff between moral standards and other critical concerns.

It is true that without the high ethical and moral standards in apparent, rarely could a politician win enough support to be a leader.  It is the trust of the public to support a leader from the common people to a raising star, because they believe that the support to the one with high ethical and moral standards will return the welfare to us.  On the other hand, if the public leader is challenged by others to his/her ethical and moral standards, hardly could the challenged leader maintain the authority and position.  To data back the history of United States Presidents as examples, Presidents Nixon resides from his presidency due to the Water Gate event which make him dishonor to the public.  President Clinton, who involved into the sexual scandals with a female intern in White House, also was summoned to the court and was inspected by the public.  Indeed, the behaved high ethical and moral standards could help a leader to enhance his/her leadership and authority.

However, politic is the tradeoff among various interest groups so that a leader famed by the high ethical and moral standards could achieve nothing unless he/she understands the art to meet the demands from others who expect different gains.  The diversity in the world determined the diversified needs among people, especially in the realm of politics.  If a political leader could not understand the need of people different from him, it is impossible for him to win the support from others.  A. Lincoln, the President of the Civil Was, was the sample of an effective leader.  Actually, only a few people in the North, who supported the abolition to slavery, were moved by the hardness of the black.  Other than those with high ethical and moral standards, most of citizens in the North objected to the slavery only because they were worried that the expansion of slavery to the West would prevent them from claiming more salary with the competition to the free slavery labor.   If President Lincoln did not offer enough interests to the public and meet the requirements to the majority, the North would lose the war.  

In short, in order to call for enough supports from citizens to accomplish great goal, an effective leader should seek the optimal balance between the moral standards and other important considerations.

if_lotusUID: 175616

你动作也太快了……
也不让我先有个心理准备~厚厚

我先看看题目，回头给你把把关

if_lotusUID: 175616

可以的话，下次列一下提纲吧~

There is a debate on whether or not a public official should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader.  In my opinion, although the high ethical and moral standard is the fundamental requirements to political leaders to win the support from the public, what matters for how great he/she could achieve in the admission is the mastery to tradeoff between moral[ethical也别落下] standards and other critical concerns[最好用such as挑明一下还有什么concerns].

It is true that without the high ethical and moral standards in apparent, rarely could a politician win enough support to be a leader[假设法，反面论证，没有……会……].  It is the trust of the public to support a leader from the common people to a raising star, because they believe that the support to the one with high ethical and moral standards will return the welfare to us[再挖深一点：有了high ethical and moral standards，怎么就能 return the welfare to us？].  On the other hand[应该配合on the one hand使用吧？还是你要表达“否则”？那应该用otherwise], if the public leader is challenged by others to his/her ethical and moral standards, hardly could the challenged leader maintain the authority and position.  To data back the history of United States Presidents as examples, Presidents Nixon resides from his presidency due to the Water Gate event which make him dishonor to the public.  President Clinton, who involved into the sexual scandals with a female intern in White House, also was summoned to the court and was inspected by the public[用Nixon和Clinton这2个例子支持论点。虽说例子不能免俗，但放在这儿还算起到了作用。].  Indeed, the behaved high ethical and moral standards could help a leader to enhance his/her leadership and authority[总结的偏了，B1没有说有了high ethical and moral standards，就能help到leadership and authority。跟你的TS角度也不同：TS是反面论证，论证部分正/反2面论证，最后一句是正面论证。而且论证部分的正面论证还没说到位，前面我提到过了。].

However[B1和B2是转折关系吗？感觉递进更好一点。], politic is the tradeoff among various interest groups so that a leader famed by the high ethical and moral standards could achieve nothing unless he/she understands the art to meet the demands from others who expect different gainsB2是在“另起炉灶”，他因法么？. The diversity in the world determined the diversified needs among people, especially in the realm of politics.  If a political leader could not understand the need of people different from him, it is impossible for him to win the support from others[看来我的判断正确，楼主是想说，要想做一个effective leader，还需要其他能力，即，平衡各个人群的利益。不过，个人感觉如果楼主是这个意图的话，有点扯远了，没必要。].  A. Lincoln, the President of the Civil WasWar，晕，下次写完先自己看3遍！, was the sample of an effective leader.  Actually, only a few people in the North, who supported the abolition to slavery, were moved by the hardness of the black.  Other than those with high ethical and moral standards[不是在他因法么，怎么又扯回high ethical and moral standards了？难道我理解有误？晕~], most of citizens in the North objected to the slavery only because they were worried that the expansion of slavery to the West would prevent them from claiming more salary with the competition to the free slavery labor.   If President Lincoln did not offer enough interests to the public and meet the requirements to the majority, the North would lose the war.
[B2没太理解楼主的意思，呵呵]

In short, in order to call for enough supports from citizens to accomplish great goal, an effective leader should seek the optimal balance between the moral standards and other important considerations.


[以上均为个人意见，仅供参考]

leo_chenUID: 206840

sigh, 被拍得遍体鳞伤，看来得做major revision了，呵呵

if_lotusUID: 175616

每个人理解有偏差，来，解释解释你的B2啥意思？

leo_chenUID: 206840

大修了一遍

Issue43  第10篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：53分56秒     650 words
从2005年6月3日17时31分到2005年6月3日18时53分
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
------正文------
There is a debate on whether or not a public official should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader.  In my opinion, although the high ethical and moral standard is the fundamental requirements to political leaders to win the support from the public, what matters for how great he/she could achieve in the admission is the mastery to tradeoff between ethic and moral standards and other critical concerns for immediate purposes.

It is true that without the high ethical and moral standards in apparent, rarely could a politician win enough support to be a leader.  It is the trust of the public to support a leader from the common people to a raising star, because the public believe that the support to the candidates who have high ethical and moral standards will devote themselves to the public welfare as public officers, rather than abuse their power to benefit to own.  Otherwise, if the public leader is challenged by others to his/her ethical and moral standards, hardly could the challenged leader maintain the authority and position.  To data back the history of United States Presidents as examples, Presidents Nixon resided from his presidency due to the Water Gate event which made him become a dishonor to the public.  President Clinton, who involved into the sexual scandal with a female intern in White House, also was summoned to the court and was inspected by the public.  Indeed, the behaved high ethical and moral standards could help a leader to enhance his/her leadership and authority; while the taint of personality would undermine a leader’s authority and reputation, and even pull him into a nightmare.

However, it is hard for a politic leader to meet all kind of ethical and moral dogmas defined by various social groups, because in the realm of public issues the ethical and moral codes often contradict to themselves.  Suppose you were a major of a city, the settlement of new oil refinery could create more jobs to ease the intensive pressure of unemployment in your city.  But the proposal was firmly against by a pack of people who only concern their belief in environmental factors, since the oil refinery would pollute their cherished fresh air.  Likewise, the crops and vegetables by the transformation of generic engineering, which are hopeful to solve the problem of hungry people in Africa, are also against by some people who argue that the deformed food may harm the health of human being.  Due to the difficulty to make a widely accepted decision, the politicians are often compared with the fox for their sophisticated nature.

In fact, to be a successful political leader, what is necessary is to understand the art of tradeoff among different parties with various expectations.  President Lincoln, who leaded the Americans to abolish the slavery by the Civil War, was an excellent sample.  Although, admittedly, some people in the North, who supported the abolition, were really motivated by the sympathy to the hardship of the Black and by their high ethic and moral standards, most soldiers who devoted themselves in the battle field were attracted by the offer to claim a wide area of land in the West if they could beat the South.  In the same way, rather than the moral factors of race equality, what pushed the businessmen in the North to support the finance of the Army was the desire on the fortune by building railways and factories in the West, instead of the plantation by the South.  If Lincoln failed to understand the demand of those people who expect different from him, he could not set up a strong army to beat the South.


In short, in order to call for enough supports from citizens to accomplish great goal, an effective leader should seek the optimal balance between the ethic and moral standards and other requirements by other people with diversified interests.

翦瞳UID: 184872

我要写，会把重点放在effective上面
In my opinion, although the high ethical and moral standard is the fundamental requirements to political leaders to win the support from the public, what matters for how great he/she could achieve in the admission is the mastery to tradeoff between ethic and moral standards and other critical concerns for immediate purposes.转折不是很明显，我觉得不是折衷的问题。转折 what the masses most concern is  never only the personal ethical and moral level, but the practical well-being such as medical insurance and job opportunity, the public could get from the elected leader from all the candidates. I believe some private and not harmful faults do not cumber the entire benefit of a group.
我觉得据林肯的例子挺好的，虽然老，但可以说明effective
Clinton 的例子甚至可以作正例

翦瞳UID: 184872

President Lincoln, who leaded the Americans to abolish the slavery by the Civil War
还是in the Civil War 更好些，因为解放奴隶是手段，不是目的

可以举 丘吉尔，酗酒，吸烟
           罗斯福
但是具体的角度不知道怎么写

fhxyweiUID: 157384

有时间，再看看你修改过的，这个政治类的题目理解不难，写的出彩不容易

victor2005UID: 2106670

There is a debate on whether or not a public official should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader.  In my opinion, although the high ethical and moral standard is the fundamental requirements to political leaders to win the support from the public, what matters for how great he/she could achieve in the admission is the mastery to tradeoff between ethic and moral standards and other critical concerns for immediate purposes.
    It is true that without the high ethical and moral standards in apparent, rarely could a politician win enough support to be a leader.  It is the trust of the public to support a leader from the common people to a raising star, because the public believe that the support to the candidates who have high ethical and moral standards will devote themselves（这个 themselves如果是指the candidiates的话，这么写好象回让人一下子读不懂，因为主语是the public） to the public welfare as public officers, rather than abuse their power to benefit to own.  Otherwise, if the public leader is challenged by others （如果是指受到一些事件的挑战，应该用something吧） to his/her ethical and moral standards, hardly could the challenged leader maintain the authority and position.  To data back the history of United States Presidents as examples, Presidents Nixon resided from his presidency due to the Water Gate event which made him become a dishonor to the public.  President Clinton, who involved into the sexual scandal with a female intern in White House, also was summoned to the court and was inspected by the public.  Indeed, the behaved (这样用对吗) high ethical and moral standards could help a leader to enhance his/her leadership and authority; while the taint of personality would undermine a leader’s authority and reputation, and even pull him into a nightmare.
    However, it is hard for a politic leader to meet all kind of ethical and moral dogmas defined by various social groups, because in the realm of public issues the ethical and moral codes often contradict to themselves.  Suppose you were a major of a city, the settlement of new oil refinery could create more jobs to ease the intensive pressure of unemployment in your city.  But the proposal was firmly against by a pack of people who only concern their belief in environmental factors, since the oil refinery would pollute their cherished fresh air.  Likewise, the crops and vegetables by the transformation of generic engineering, which are hopeful to solve the problem of hungry people in Africa, are also against by some people who argue that the deformed food may harm the health of human being（这个dilemma例子用的好！）.  Due to the difficulty to make a widely accepted decision, the politicians are often compared with the fox for their sophisticated nature.
    In fact, to be a successful political leader, what is necessary is to understand the art of tradeoff among different parties with various expectations.  President Lincoln, who leaded the Americans to abolish the slavery by the Civil War, was an excellent sample.  Although, admittedly, some people in the North, who supported the abolition, were really motivated by the sympathy to the hardship of the Black and by their high ethic and moral standards, most soldiers who devoted themselves in the battle field were attracted by the offer to claim a wide area of land in the West if they could beat the South.  In the same way, rather than the moral factors of race equality, what pushed the businessmen in the North to support the finance of the Army was the desire on the fortune by building railways and factories in the West, instead of the plantation by the South.  If Lincoln failed to understand the demand of those people who expect different from him, he could not set up a strong army to beat the South.（这个例子分析的很好，但是这段的ts我觉得本身有点扯远了，因为他这做，没有损害道德原则。个人认为如果是用来论证领导人应该这样做才能更有效的实现目的话比较合适）   
In short, in order to call for enough supports from citizens to accomplish great goal, an effective leader should seek the optimal balance between the ethic and moral standards and other requirements by other people with diversified interests.

victor2005UID: 2106670

我也写了同样的题目，但是思路和你不同，可能没你想的这么多，比较简单，呵呵。
这是我的第1片，写的时候象挤牙膏一样，难受死了。改了3-4遍，还是只能达到这个水平，请大家多提宝贵意见，谢谢拉！

Issue43  第1篇             修改了3-4遍，508 words
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
作为一位英名的领导人，公共官员必须维护最高的伦理和道德标准。
------正文------
    Whether a public official should maintain the highest ethical and moral standards is a hot issue in recent years. The answer of this question I think is that a public official should try to be a highest ethical and moral person.

Firstly, preserving ethical and moral criterion are necessary for public officials to get more support and trust from the public. Since the standards are admitted and abided by majority of citizen, a person especially a public official, who violates them will be criticized and unaccepted by the public. As public characters, their behaviors are often concerned by the public, whether they keep up ethical and moral principles will affect their public reputation and their gaining respect from the public. For example, the Watergate scandal made Nixon disreputable and lose his presidental power because of public distrust to him. In contrast, Lincoln is one of the greatest presidents who struggled all his life for and was devoted to the career of slave liberation. Although he has been dead for a long time, people still miss and respect him so much. So as an effective leader, a public official should be a model of preserving ethical and moral rules to get public confidence.

Secondly, it is harmful to the public benefit that officials lack high ethical and moral quality. Ethical and moral standards are handed down from one generation to another through thousands of years, and now formed into their own integrated rule accordant with requirements of present society. It tells people how to act and speak is comparatively right or proper. It advocates kindness, beauty and truth and opposes guilt and evil, so it can regulate people behavior in some extent by means of consensus pressure. When a public official has some power and get no enough supervision, he or she is very likely to abuse power and commit a crime such as corruption. For instance, some leaders in the Communist Party of China were reported corrupt. Economic development and comfortable life make them desire to be rich, but because of lacking of high ethic and morality they make money illegally and severely damage the public interest. In my opinion, it is benefit to us that public official are able to sustain their ethic and moral principles.

Admittedly, it is a good horse that never stumbles. Public officials are not perfect one, their personal ethical and moral failings are inevitable. For instance, the marital indiscretions of present Kennedy, the sexual scandal of president Clinton. Chairman Mao, one of the greatest leaders in Chinese history, was indulged in his personality cult after he became the highest leader of China. He was commonly known in China as the “Four Greats”: “Great Teacher, Great Leader, Great Supreme Commander, Great Helmsman”. The Mao Cult finally resulted in the famous Cultural Revolution lasting 10 years that almost destroyed the development of China.

In sum, I think a public official should be a man who maintains ethical and moral standards. Effective leaders are advanced examples of ethic and morality in this society that the public respect and admire.


不知道毛主席的例子用在这里合适不合适？:)

[ Last edited by victor2005 on 2005-7-4 at 12:03 ]