issue48 又短又慢，真是欠拍！求拍求拍！！

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

改过以后的，填了些内容才这样的，大家拍吧
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The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.
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Taking a general view of the history, we usually spend considerable long time to analyze many significant events and trends. As the research going on, some new discoveries and comprehension turn on. It is reasonable that those typical individuals may be analyzed more, while other aspects related to the events should also be discussed.

My first reason is that the few and famous individuals are representative in the historical events and trends. They may be considered as sparkles in historical events. Placing emphasis on them, we can learn and remember history easily. For instance, when we refer to Adolf Hitler, a figure of dictator in World War II probably flashes in our minds quickly. And we could more easily mention a series of historic events related to him; such as he carried out despotism in Germany and launched the slaughter of Jew, rather than refering to a soldier of Nazi who is unknown or one of  victims whose identity might be forgotten. Therefore, playing emphasis on the few famous figure is a more efficient way for us to remember the event and understand them easily.

My second reason is that we could learn from the individuals, since they are typical in the general people and could give great models to people. We could not deny that the famous few play important roles in historic events, and their reputation came from their influence to the society and people. A case in point is Marie Curie, a Polish-born French chemist and physicist. We would not only know the fact that she discovered the radium, a chemical substance, but also honor her academic achievement and learn from her perseverance in the research process. Because the story that Madam Curie refined the radium in a shanty suffering from cold and poor has deeply influence many people. Another famous person I would like to refer to is Giordano Bruno, an Italian renaissance philosopher. He suffered death penalty because of his ideas opposing to the Roman authorities. Just to memorize his courage for pursuing free thought, a statue was erected on the site of his martyrdom.

Admittedly, analyzing an event from different angles would contribute to know the fact and get a full and reasonable conclusion, which would be useful to further research. For example, another eyewitness of World War II might show something new details about the evidence and help us to understand facts across-the-aboard. After all, historic events were composed by lots of people, most of who are unknown common populace. Furthermore, some objective factors are indispensable to the whole events. Just as the old saying goes, the times produce their heroes. The political situation and foundation are also important. So we could not ignore other people, who are relative to the events but not famous, and the objective conditions in a historic events.

In sum, we need more analysis and investigation on the typical individuals and could not ignore the general groups in order to understand historical events and guide further trends. And generally, emphasizing on representative individuals will help us to learn history more effectively.

[ Last edited by lignumvitae on 2005-7-19 at 22:44 ]

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

拉一把，就要去单位报到了，要忙咯～
晚上回来回拍

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

好累啊，先听首歌吧．．．
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[ Last edited by lignumvitae on 2005-7-18 at 22:12 ]

staralwaysUID: 193479

The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.

Taking a general view of the history, we usually spend considerable long time to analyze many significant events and trends. As the research going on, some new discoveries and comprehensions turn on [out]. It is reasonable that those typical individuals may be analyzed more, while other aspects related to the events should also be discussed. [开头提出观点很明确。]

My first reason is that the few and famous individuals are representative in the historical events and trends. They may be considered as sparkles in historical events. Placing emphasis on them, we can learn and remember history easily. For instance, when we refer to Adolf Hitler, a figure of dictator in World War II probably flashes in our minds quickly. And we could talk about a series of historic events related to him; such as he carried out despotism in Germany and launched the slaughter of Jew. As to Neville Chamberlain, the prime minister of British (1937-40), we would think of his appeasement policy and his failure at last. Therefore, it is a more efficient way for us to remember the event and understand them easily. [对于这一段来说，感觉对于划下划线的那两个单词没有很好的体现出来。段落里只是简略地陈述了两个人物，但是他们所体现的“代表性”在哪里呢？感觉如果不把这个说清楚的话，那么“有效性”也就很难体现了。]

My second reason is that we could learn from the individuals, since they are typical in the general people and could give great models to people. We could not deny that the famous few play [have played] important roles in historic events, and their reputation came from their influence to the society and people. A case in point is Marie Curie, a Polish-born French chemist and physicist. We would not only know the fact that she discovered the radium, a chemical substance, but also honor her academic achievement and learn from her perseverance in the research process. [感觉可以花一定的篇幅来描述她的坚忍不拔，来强调一下TS句所讲的我们能够从那些伟大人物身上学到东西。] Another famous person I would like to refer to is Giordano Bruno, an Italian renaissance philosopher. He suffered death penalty because of his ideas opposing to the Roman authorities. Just to memorize his courage for pursuing free thought, a statue was erected on the site of his martyrdom.

Admittedly, analyzing an event from different angles would contribute to know the fact [better] and get a full and reasonable conclusion, which would be useful to further research. For example, another eyewitness of World War II might show something new details about the evidence and help us to understand facts across-the-aboard. Furthermore, some objective factors are indispensable to the whole events. Just as the old saying goes, the times produce their heroes. So we could not ignore other people, who are relative to the events but not famous, and the objective conditions in a historic events. [这段是想讲人民大众吧？！但是提及的地方不多啊。]

In sum, we need more analysis and investigation on both the typical individuals and the general groups [对双方同等对待这个论调在正文里没有体现出来。] in order to understand historical events and guide further trends. And generally, emphasizing on representative individuals will help us to learn history more effectively.

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

非常感谢斑竹的指导，我改了一下，不知好点了没～